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SweetMaj

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My new erotic poem is in the mix. "The Sub In Me"

I would very much like some feed-back,whether you like it or not.

You can't knock me out (so to speak), I can take it !!!


Thank you in advance.
 
My new erotic poem is in the mix. "The Sub In Me"

I would very much like some feed-back,whether you like it or not.

You can't knock me out (so to speak), I can take it !!!


Thank you in advance.

Put up a link to your poem, maj. Some of us are too lazy to go looking for it. ;):kiss:
 

That did not work SweetMaj :rolleyes:

For all those present, here it is http://www.literotica.com/p/the-sub-in-me

Sorry about the :rolleyes: SweetMaj I was just having fun with you

You know I love you really :heart:

Actually for some reason you got the [ / url ] inserted into the wrong place in your quote, if you know http scripting language it is easy to fix the link above in the quote should be active now.

Now I just saw TE99 fixed it.
 
Here is my comment:

I gave you a 5*

Often short can be sweet.

PS: I wouldn't want to be a dom really but I might like to be a sub together with you LOL
 
Here is my comment:

I gave you a 5*

Often short can be sweet.

PS: I wouldn't want to be a dom really but I might like to be a sub together with you LOL

Thank you so much :heart:

I would LOVE to be a sub together with you :kiss:
 
Thank you so much !!! :kiss: When will I ever learn :rolleyes:

Maybe next time ;)

Here is my comment :kiss:

Alot of Love
The key thing for me is that the emotion is clear in your poetry.

Style in poerty is important, but I believe that emotion is more important
 
here is my comment on your other poem: :D

Few words, much emotion
I am happy for you.


Thank you !!! :kiss: :heart:

My poems are short. I like them that way. If they were longer they would loose

the emotions and sensitivity.

I'm proud of my poems !!! And I'm having a GREAT time writing.

Maybe I will write another one (at least five pages) - (Just kidding) :D
 
I enjoyed your poems, Maj. Brevity can speak volumes in the proper context. :rose:
 
You opend your eyes and looked at me.
Though you coulden't speak, you were there.

opend and coulden't? Is this on purpose?
 
You opend your eyes and looked at me.
Though you coulden't speak, you were there.

opend and coulden't? Is this on purpose?

Yes, it is on purpose. I don't follow - what is wrong with that ?
 
Yes it should. It's a miss spell :eek:

But it will get better in time !!!

Ah, okay. I wondered if it may be a dialect or a rhetoric figure I didn't know :)

But, missspell or not, I like your poem :rose:
 
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