...and there she was.

[HumptyDave]

She sat in front of me in the darkness...i couldn't see her, but she touched me in that way she has... that let me know it was her. The occasional blast of lightning in the distant sky had shone the perfect outline of her unmistakable form, that long hair, curvy body, and that sparkle that hit her eye, for just a moment, just enough to let you know she was a high spirited women...and then...in just an instant...she was gone, but I knew she was still there, I had her hand in mine and her fingers scratched against my palm, giving me that subliminal hint, telling me...she was "wanting". She led me inside and sat me down on what could only have been her little napping spot, because even through the darkness I could detect the faintness of a very soft perfume, then she turned on the lights...and there she was.

 

[CharmingTracy]

I love it, Humps!

 

[champagne1982]

She sat in front of me in the darkness...i couldn't see her, but she touched me in that way she has... that let me know it was her. The occasional blast of lightning in the distant sky had shone the perfect outline of her unmistakable form, that long hair, curvy body, and that sparkle that hit her eye, for just a moment, just enough to let you know she was a high spirited women...and then...in just an instant...she was gone, but I knew she was still there, I had her hand in mine and her fingers scratched against my palm, giving me that subliminal hint, telling me...she was "wanting". She led me inside and sat me down on what could only have been her little napping spot, because even through the darkness I could detect the faintness of a very soft perfume, then she turned on the lights...and there she was.

It's good to write off the cuff... "Hot" as it were. It's better to edit in leisure, and this needs a bit of an edit. This is a great little snippet. I find it more prose than poem. You have good descriptors although there are some tell words found where you could have left it all showing.

In the following example I'll bold the tells and color those I think are shows. In my opinion, this will help you understand how you could make your little vignette a little more poem-y.

The occasional blast of lightning in the distant sky had shone the perfect outline of her unmistakable form.

Any adjectives that don't leave the imagery to the reader are tells, the ones that give an impression of the visual are shows. Don't confuse showing with vagueness though, poet, you still want to convey the illustration exactly as you envision it.