an Anonymous Reaming!

[Guest]

An Anonymous Reaming!

I recently received an email regarding my story "The Neighbors". Now while I realize it's far from the perfect work, I didn't think it was awful. But this was the searing commentary I received:

This message contains feedback for: TexasBadboy
About the submission: The Neighbors
This feedback was sent by: Anonymous

Comments:

Did you mean a 2 or 3 liter coke bottle?
I've fucked over 200 guys and MAYBE one
was 7 1/2 inches. Don't write a story
that women can't read. Best, don't
mention cock and breast size. We all can
imagine whatever we want.
BTW, the word you're using is a contrac-
tion of they are. The word you want is
their.




Now I have read several stories so far and almost all made mention of breast size and cock size. And all I can say is that if this woman has slept(?) with over 200 guys and only one was over 71/2", she needs to come to Texas, where they(looks down) obviously grow em' bigger lol!




I did think the coke bottle reference was kinda funny! I was thinking those 10oz bottles of "original" coke we all love that ya always find in those old coke machines in small towns!

 

[lovetoread]

Everyone is entitled to their opinion.

Like assholes,we all got em,some are just shittier than others.

Ignore it and go on.


But as far as using measurements,I dont use them.

I dont like to read about them either.

But,of course, that is only my opinion.

 

[Guest]

Well the reader was a woman and she too didn't like the size reference so I see the old" ya learn sumthin' everyday" addage holds true! Ok, so I won't use size references no mo'. Howabout...........: "it was dark so I didn't know what I was in store for until I felt my pussy being stretched beyond belief and his tool reaching spots never before felt" LOL!





That better?

 

[lovetoread]

How about.. It was so dark that he took the chance that was before him and slammed his hardened dick into her wet pussy?

lol

You write what you want. In the end,the only one that matters is the one that wrote it.

 

[Guest]

Hmmmmm that's nice but so um bland. Well I guess I'll learn. And yeah, I think the writer should enjoy what they're writing first of all. That's what I plan to do. But I have others, so we'll see.......

 

[Whispersecret]

I prefer not to see specific measurements in narrative description. I did have a character talk about his eight inches once, but in general I shy away from those types of numbers. There are far more imaginative ways to describe physical attributes.

Obviously you didn't mean a 2 liter bottle. DUH.

200 guys? Yikes. With numbers like that, she certainly is in a position to state a well-researched opinion, however, that's little consolation for a woman whose life appears to consist of a parade of sexual flings. I feel sorry for her. I hope she uses condoms.

 

[Guest]

Well ok I won't do the coke bottle size references again. Howabout "diet" coke lol!



But seriously folks. I would think reference to "size" helps the reader imagine exactly how someone looks. Maybe the mention of numbers may be a bit much. I'll work on that and maybe get around to reading the helpul hints page!

 

[Madame Manga]

Another female opinion

Measurements make me think Penthouse Forum. If that's what you're going for, no prob. But I think that the whole idea of measuring is a male competitive display thing--for women, it sticks out like a sore thumb (pun only partially intended!)

FYI, I don't even know the length of my husband's penis. I think he told me once, but I don't remember. ;-) I could give a ballpark estimate, but that's all. As long as it's not two inches hard, or so big that it hurts, a woman is usually not going to be thinking about numbers. Thickness and degree of hardness make much more difference than length, IMO.

MM