An Acrostic
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Excellent Poem!
This is beautifully written. I enjoyed the entire poem, and I'll definitely read it again.
Such a good job, TIBET!
MP
This is beautifully written. I enjoyed the entire poem, and I'll definitely read it again.
Such a good job, TIBET!
MP
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Bravo, TIBET
That's taking a very simple form and working wonders with it.
Any further forthcoming?
HomerPindar
That's taking a very simple form and working wonders with it.
Any further forthcoming?
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Catchy title!
What the heck is an "Acrostic"? So I read the poem in hopes of finding out.... absolutely lovely, by the way. But I still dunno... So it's off to my handy dandy dictionary!!
danggggggggg aren't you a clever lil beaver! Now I gotta go back and read your poem again so I can figure out the word
Welcome to the club, TIBET
Sk~
What the heck is an "Acrostic"? So I read the poem in hopes of finding out.... absolutely lovely, by the way. But I still dunno... So it's off to my handy dandy dictionary!!
danggggggggg aren't you a clever lil beaver! Now I gotta go back and read your poem again so I can figure out the word
Welcome to the club, TIBET
Sk~
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Re: Catchy title!
Ah, perhaps another topic for the bootcamp, eh kitten?
Another way of making it is a double acrostic, wherein the first letter of each line, read downwards, spells out a message, so to does the last letter of each line. And yes, there are triple acrostic's - first, last, and the first letter of a set number of words within each line. Wanna try a real twister in jigsaw puzzle poem making? make it a triple acrostic straight down, and a double acrostic diagonally. Another bit of fun, write an acrostic sonnet, fourteen letter message read down in iambic pentamiter read across in Shakespearian rhyming scheme...
Ok, so maybe I do like to make things difficult for myself.
HomerPindar
Savage Kitten said:What the heck is an "Acrostic"? So I read the poem in hopes of finding out.... absolutely lovely, by the way. But I still dunno... So it's off to my handy dandy dictionary!!
danggggggggg aren't you a clever lil beaver! Now I gotta go back and read your poem again so I can figure out the word
Sk~
Ah, perhaps another topic for the bootcamp, eh kitten?
Another way of making it is a double acrostic, wherein the first letter of each line, read downwards, spells out a message, so to does the last letter of each line. And yes, there are triple acrostic's - first, last, and the first letter of a set number of words within each line. Wanna try a real twister in jigsaw puzzle poem making? make it a triple acrostic straight down, and a double acrostic diagonally. Another bit of fun, write an acrostic sonnet, fourteen letter message read down in iambic pentamiter read across in Shakespearian rhyming scheme...
Ok, so maybe I do like to make things difficult for myself.
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Judge #4 here. Ah, Tibet. As you will already have seen by my score, I loved this poem. It stood out above the others, to me.
STYLE 8.5
--There was a richness here that was like a fine wine...much to savor and reflect upon. There were so many lines that I enjoyed: "Kimono of stars thrown loose," "Diaphanous above the mountains," Oh jeez. The whole damn thing is beautiful.
FORM 9.0
--The acrostic form worked perfectly. I did have some trouble with line breaks and even marked down my difficulty, but then remembered that it was an acrostic, and gave it some leeway because of that.
IMAGERY 9.0
--There is little in this poem that I don't like in the way of imagery.
I was confused, though, at the end. I thought they were NAKED LOVERS SKIING DOWN HILL AT NIGHT, and yet, in the last stanza they are clearly in bed.
Yet, the last line brings everything to a quiet close that made it all right. This is a good example of how rich style and imagery can balance a confusing meaning for me and "save" a poem.
STYLE 8.5
--There was a richness here that was like a fine wine...much to savor and reflect upon. There were so many lines that I enjoyed: "Kimono of stars thrown loose," "Diaphanous above the mountains," Oh jeez. The whole damn thing is beautiful.
FORM 9.0
--The acrostic form worked perfectly. I did have some trouble with line breaks and even marked down my difficulty, but then remembered that it was an acrostic, and gave it some leeway because of that.
IMAGERY 9.0
--There is little in this poem that I don't like in the way of imagery.
I was confused, though, at the end. I thought they were NAKED LOVERS SKIING DOWN HILL AT NIGHT, and yet, in the last stanza they are clearly in bed.
Yet, the last line brings everything to a quiet close that made it all right. This is a good example of how rich style and imagery can balance a confusing meaning for me and "save" a poem.
Thank you J4 for the kudos. We do appreciate you taking the time to come down and talk with us.
To clear up the confusion about how they ended up in the sack, when at first they were on the slope: there is a 'turn' in the poem, beginning with the 'H' strophe ('Heaven breathes with memory...'). From this point on, our intrepid hedonists are safely ensconced in their bed, reliving (or, perhaps dreaming all along?)
their winter adventure...
Thanks again for taking the time to let us know your thoughts.
Glad you liked it!
A Tibetan
To clear up the confusion about how they ended up in the sack, when at first they were on the slope: there is a 'turn' in the poem, beginning with the 'H' strophe ('Heaven breathes with memory...'). From this point on, our intrepid hedonists are safely ensconced in their bed, reliving (or, perhaps dreaming all along?)
their winter adventure...
Thanks again for taking the time to let us know your thoughts.
Glad you liked it!
A Tibetan
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When we do find out who you are, I'm wondering if we'll ever look at you Tibetan monks the same way 
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