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Good story in the Extreme-Nonconsent section by WillRun. I don't know if it has been critiqued before, but it doesn't matter. Story starts off with a lapse or two in tense and some awkward syntax, but soon settles down and holds your interest. Story is told simply and honestly without all the contrived,cutsy bullshit of so much porn. I have only one objection: I think it would take more than a pint of whiskey to bribe an Amish father--perhaps a fifth would do better. I hope writer will complete the rest of the story soon.
