Also, a summer story for the start of winter

[gunhilltrain]

This was my entry in the Summer Lovin' contest this year. I recently put up an edited version because it seemed to have a larger than usual number of typos and grammatical errors.

Somewhere in here I think the temperature is referred to as 86° F.

https://www.literotica.com/s/woodstock-1975

 

[LoquiSordidaAdMe]

Another request for feedback that's gone unanswered, GHT? That's a shame. Let's have a look...

Nice little story. It has that clean prose and journalistic style that's familiar from the other story of yours I read. You have a very distinct style. Knowing that you were aimimg for "plausible" I'd say you hit the mark. There were a couple of references I didn't get, unique to NYC in the 70s I'm guessing. It would have been nice to have had a few explained, but I doubt they were crucial to the story.

I especially liked your characters. Paul felt painfully real - the guy in over his head, needing a more experienced woman to take the lead. Denise was almost too good to be true. I got the feeling she had done these photoshoots before, even though Paul never asked and she never said. She was just so perfectly prepared. I especially liked Sandra. There was something so blase about her attitude towards sex and pornography that seems incongruous with a 30-something urban mother. I'd have loved to read more of her backstory and learn how she came to this point in her life. But that would be a different story.

Not sure why you're not getting feedback when you ask for it. Your work is good enough that I doubt it's a matter of "if you can't say something nice..." The only thing that occurs to me is that you're not specific about the of feedback you're looking. Perhaps if your requests asked for feedback on character development or pacing or something it would give readers something to focus their comments on? I dunno.

But that one was a good read. I enjoyed it.

 

[gunhilltrain]

Thank you.

I post announcements of new stories mainly so that I can have more readers than I would get from those who are browsing through the story sections. If I get feedback that's fine; if not, that's okay too. I'm not looking for specific advice, just whatever comes in.

I think Denise is indeed hiding some things about herself. I'm probably going to use the concept in a different timeline for my other 1970s stories (basically it will be a year earlier as Woodstock 1974). That probably won't come out until later this year.

Sandra would be interesting in stories about other Zone productions, so thanks for suggesting that.

I have to guess about how much readers care about the details of past places and events. If they really want to there is usually some info available. I have referred to Arthur Avenue in several stories:

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Arthur_Avenue