Advice on a story?

[MissVictoria]

Oh my, my Halloween story is doing absolutely horribly. I got on this morning and it is voted a 2.5! *goes off to sulk in a corner*

If anyone would be willing to read it and tell me where I went wrong... besides developing a plot, and writing fruity women's erotica.... *chuckle*

Any advice on how to make a happy medium between what I like to write, and what people like to read... or shall I just say "screw them" and keep writing for myself?

-V

p.s. You can read my story by clicking on the link in my signature. Its called "Emily's Attic".

 

[Natalie Nessus]

his tongue dancing steadily over her clitoris.

I like the idea there is a man who can really do this

Congrautlations - I enjoyed it but I thought the pace was a little rushed? perhaps that is my prejudice? Keep writing and enjoy the process

 

[Guest]

I just read your story. I suspect that if you read these threads, and some others, you will realise that there is a row going on about what in the UK is called subediting. Things like spelling, punctuation, grammar, etc.

I don't want to take sides on that, but if this element is so bad that it stops me reading the story, that annoys me.

The basic of running a finished story through spell and grammar check (if you use Word) should always be done. You are not doing justice to your own vivid imagination if you don't do that.

I liked your story, but put it away and read it again on Halloween. By then you will be able to see ways you want to change it to make it better. The worst aspect of these competitions is that the entries are almost all rushed.

Finally, (sorry for the public lecture) I suspect most writers are like me and really write what they would like to read themselves. Prizes, royalties, votes, readership, etc. are all bonuses to the sheer pleasure of writing what you want to say. If it is like that with you, ignore what others think and keep on writing.

My most encouraging thoughts are with you,

 

[MissVictoria]

Wow- I didn't think my spelling and grammar were that bad. Unfortunately, what I've written is more than likely the best I will ever write (grammaticly) as I simply don't know what I did wrong.

Excepting my transition from first to third person at the beginning, which was intentional.

Thanks so much for the comments, however. I'll try to work on... something.

 

[lilminx]

I honestly have to say that I enjoyed your story, but yes, there were a few typos, grammar and punctuation errors. Nothing compared to many of the stories I've seen here though- it wasn't distracting enough to make me stop reading. I'll be honest and tell you I gave it a 4 out of 5 (hope that doesn't offend you). Possibly one fo the reasons people are giving it low rating is because it involves (in a different way) incest? Personally it doesn't bother me because it wasn't the typical "Oh Daddy, please fuck me! I want to be your little slut!" incestual writing, but some people may have taken issue with it. That's just my thought, and I don't mean anything personal by it...as I said, I liked your story (By the way, it would be nice if you could read mine too )

 

[MissVictoria]

I loved the ending!

 

[Blayde]

The ending was great... give it time, and more people will read it and vote.

I'm still waiting for my Halloween story to get processed, but I'm having fun reading all the other entries!

 

[Celtic_Heart]

I too would like some tips and pointers. My story "One Night Stand" is also currently rated a 2.5. Anyone want to give some ideas as to where I went wrong? It's the only one I've got that's under 4, and, personally, I rather liked it.

If you want to take a look you can find it here:

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=25755

Ho Hum.

 

[Pokerman]

If I might suggest....take advantage of the volunteer editors program...They can help you 'polish up' your writing.

Follow this link for information.