Accidental incest

[jtmalone70]

Incest

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[lauracmk]

Hm.. how about this idea?

34 yr old widowed Mom works as some sort of an assistant fitness coach on a top college football team (which explains her lean and good physique). During a summer interstate tour for the team she has to accompany them and due to last minute accomodations she has to share rooms with the boys, which she doesn't mind. Her son is the newest member of the team, but the team doesn't know of their relationship, and the mother and son decided not to reveal it to anyone in case it might spell embarassesment for the son. Being the new kid on the block and all the son is often bullied and is having difficulties trying to fit in, but he badly wants to be a part of this elite group of players.

Due to the travelling away from their girlfiends, the boys have a lot of pent up sexual energies. They have been eyeing their fitness coach for a long while now, 34 yr old athletic blond who looks like a 24 yr old model. They noticed that she is a deep sleeper, and often sleeps with her mouth open, which gave them a wicked idea. Each night they will draw lots and the person who draws the shortest will have to do 3 things in front of the watching football team.

- pinch the mom's nipples gently through her shirt and bra.
- strip and pose for a photo such that the loser of the draw has his cock lying across the face of the sleeping mother.
- lastly, masturbate and cum into the mother's open mouth, position the tip of the cock just inside the lips so none of the cum slips.

As luck would have it, the son draws the shortest lot which means he has to defile his mother. He was petrified but he also badly wanted to fit into the team, and he saw it as his chance to 'bond' with the team. He strips and walks over to his sleeping mom, but due to his fear his cock was limp, which drew stifled laughter from the entire football team watching. He slowly feels his way carefully over his mother's breasts, who was wearing a sports bra, and finds her nipple lump. His strokes it a bit and then pinches it gently, all the while watching his mother's face in case she wakes up. At this point, his cock starts to harden when he realises first hand how firm his mother's breasts are. Next he moves to his mom's face, he had to carefully place a leg over her head so he could reach in and place his cock over her blissfully sleeping face. His mom was a beautiful woman, tanned over the years of sporting with some freckles on the nose, but otherwise flawless complexion. By now his cock was rock hard, even though he was extremely afraid and knew he was doing something wrong, but this was his first time having skin contact between his privates and a woman (he was a virgin) and he found it hard to control his errection. The lewd photo was taken, and then it dawned upon him that he didn't know what they would do with the photo, but it was too late to turn back now.

And now for the last feat, he stood by his moms bedside and masturbated while standing up, all the while looking at her deliciously firm breasts. Some of the other boys started masturbating too. It took a while for him to actually get close to cumming, but when he finally did he knew it was gonna be a big load, as always. With weak legs he once again guided his cock to his mom's face and positioned the cocktip right in front of her open mouth, there he continued to jerk off to orgasm. When he did, he quickly places his cocktip just into his moms parted lips and exploded. The first stream shoots into the side of her mouth due to the position he had to place his cock, but the force and volume was such that much of the cum bounced off anyway and sprayed across her tongue and around her mouth. A good 4-5 cum streams later, he could see the inside of his moms mouth was filled with gooey white cum, and due to his mom tilting her head sideways he knew most of the cum would remain in her mouth until she wakes up. Some of the cum had naturally splattered across her lips and dripped down the side of her mouth, but the boys told him to leave it alone after which they took more close-up pictures of the mom's cum filled mouth.

The boys give the son a pat on the back, and acknowledges him finally as being 'part of the team', which made him so happy that he forgot about the moral sin he had commited. After an exciting night they finally turn in quietly, all of them gleeful at what would happen the next morning when the mom wakes up.

8am next day the mom wakes up, and she realises at once something is wrong. There was a clamy taste in her mouth, in fact it was overwhelmingly musky, she tasted her mouth a bit and found her mouth full of a slippery and sticky substance. She knew then what it was, it was cum. Her mind started to spin, what had happened while she was sleeping? Did a pervert student cum into her mouth? Was a roomwide bukkake session of cum feeding? She was scared and wanted to cry, but then remembered how much her son was looking forward to this trip and if she blew the matter up now the whole trip would be ruined. Fighting back tears she made up her mind to keep quiet about the affair, at this point the head coach enters the room to shout for the boys to wake up. He walks over to her bed and asks her if the boys gave her any trouble, she couldn't talk with a mouthful of her son's cum, she forced herself to swallow the load and replied 'they were fine'. As the boys slowly made their way out of the room pass her bed, she observed each one of them wondering who the culprit was, but all of them acted as if nothing has happened.

- The second night would have the son cum inside her mouth again
- third night the mom stays awake but pretends to be asleep, and realises it was her son all along who has been feeding her with cum. She is sad and confused, but resolves to stay quiet through this ordeal so as to not ruin the trip for her son.
- fourth night the boys decide to have a room wide bukkake, they all take turns cumming into the moms mouth until it is overflowing. The mom was afraid to move or swallow in case they know she was awake, she waits till all of them are asleep before gulping down all the cum in separate takes.

- following week would have the team drugging the mom with sleeping pills, then stripping her down and tieing her in an obscene position. Despite the drugs the mom was aware of what was happening but she pretends to be asleep. The team makes the son fuck his mother and cum inside her, when he was done they all take turns to cum inside her cunt until it was overflowing, at which point they start cumming into her mouth till it was filled. The rest of the gang then cums all over her body. When they were done, they dress the mom back up, putting on her clothes over her slimey body and then covering a blanket over her. The mom then cries throughout the night feeling cum ooze out her pussy and through her cum-wet clothings.

 

[snooper]

... The mom then cries throughout the night feeling cum ooze out her pussy and through her cum-wet clothings.

The whole story works ok, but I think you will have trouble with this last bit at Literotica. In the Nonconsent/Reluctance category they like the woman to end up enjoying it, not crying her eyes out.

 

[sirhugs]

The whole story works ok, but I think you will have trouble with this last bit at Literotica. In the Nonconsent/Reluctance category they like the woman to end up enjoying it, not crying her eyes out.

tears of joy?

 

[jtmalone70]

Accidental

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[sirhugs]

wow, jt ...very insightful.

I suggest also that Lit policy might whince(sp?) at the idea of a 16 yr old mom giving birth so as to be 34 with an 18 yr old.

The 'male dominated' aspect could be finessed by making her an athletic trainer, or other specialist, which are more gender neutral.

I do not read rape stories, so I too would want rethinking of the approach. Whose POV is predominant? Hers His? I personally dislike sitching POV stories. My weak mind gets confused too easily. If he is the 'hero', he needs to be sympathetic. If she is the hero, then she nneeds to be plausible.

The basic premise - Mom on football trip- is save worthy, but the rest I'd discard.

 

[JRaven]

Hmm... Well, alright, I'll speak only as an editor on this one. And only as such. And editing manuscripts is what I do for a living!

I have GOT to get this woman as an editor!

 

[jackolover]

Doesn't seem as plausible with incest. And, sadly, I think that's what so many of the stories in this category lack: reasonable plausibility.

I agree. My own stories are of this shallow type where you have wham bam between family members. It just won't happen. There is too much respect between close family members to let the guard down. It's not that. It's that there is no guard put up. Bro/sis would never think of masturbating in front of each other. They just wouldn't put themselves in that position.

I started another Thread about Best Bro/sis incest stories, and it's very difficult to find believable situations that may occur. I am still looking for that story where the sexual tension builds up enough for siblings and progenators cross the line. How do you get people, who respect each other, to have sex?

 

[odderotica]

Mine on incest tale

Is an accident on one part, and masks are involed.

One angle im about to go to is forced incest. the robber that breaks in and orders sex being a very simple example.

In my story a villaness has enslaved the minds of the city police force, and only a certain type of reaction can free them.

another idea for later is blackmail incest.

Julie Webster got out of the finely tuned BMW that she drove home from the train. Her sharp businesslike heels cliping on the natureal riverstone walk to her door, with a quick stop at the mail box.

Inside she casually opened the largest letter, a thick gray envelope. What she found inside occupied her mind for the next two hours, and shock her soul to its very core.

Todd rode his bike hard that day. The chain spinning and grinding as his legs gave life to the gears he flew by his mother's car, droped his titatiam steed on the steps and strode into the room, hot and sweaty. He barely spared a "Hi" for his mother as she sat reading.

He threw his dirty shirt on the couch, piled his sneakers by the door, and quite tastefully left the room before ripping down his shorts and leaveing the balled remains in a corner. Naked, but out of sight he walked to his room enjoying the cool breeze.

He turned 18 over the weekend, it was thusrsday now and he had to decide who he would soon bless with his legal virinity.

For Julie, the 36years old mother of two the choice was this. She could do nothing, as the letter had clearly requested, and let the police question her at length about her role in the law firm of Dewwie Fuk'em and Yong, endagering her life and her childrens.

The forms and picture told the story well enough, she had manipulated stocks, covered up for bribes in a half doven nations, embezeled from 13 sepertate charites, the list went on. She had only been doing her job, she told herself.

She had not once been sexualy harassed, and a few times she had tried herself while she was an intern. But on judge took pity on her and set her straight. She didn't even date other lawers, she had met her husband online wehn they were in collage, and he raised her son as it were his own. And they were so proud of thier daughter!.

She walked over and poured herself a very stiff drink, swallowed it, and grabed her video camera. If the letter was right, she had just six hours to seduce her only son.

Promotion after promotion had finally caught up with her.


Im sure there are many stories like this, but i hadn't seen it mentioned in this disscussion

 

[snooper]

Hmm... Well, alright, I'll speak only as an editor on this one. And only as such. And editing manuscripts is what I do for a living!

I'll respond only as an author reply to an editor on this one. And only as such. And writing novels is what I do for a living!

The entire premise is a bit of a stretch. Granted, if the readership for this particular genre finds this appealing, then it doesn't matter. However, you might find a broader audience by tailoring it appropriately.

Too many "stretches", and the story falls apart. You can usually get away with one, maybe two, but this outline seems to have far too many.

First and foremost is the incest theme. That's your first hurdle. The setup has to be such that the reader, upon entering the story, will believe the established facts surrounding the characters and the events that bring them together.

This story is very specifically aimed at a niche within a niche. It is trying to write the story of accidental incest.

As an editor, here's what I see in the first paragraph:
1. She's 34 and has a son in college. Assuming he's at least 18, that would have made her 16 at the time of giving birth to him.
2. She managed to also attend college and land a job in a predominantly all-male field: college football.
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Just working with this much information, the basic premise, I, as an editor, would flatly reject this story. Not that I don't think it has potential, but because it's too implausible.

I might be willing to accept #1 and #2. That's certainly possible. The problem, however, is it seems to be too much of a contrived literary device, used to conveniently shorten the age gap between the mother and son, thus relying more on his (or her) hormones as the guiding force which brings them together sexually, as opposed to something more realistic and tangible. I'd be more willing to accept the notion that she's 40, divorced, and lonely on the road,
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Ooops, as this is intended for Literotica you are right about her age. And making her 40 makes the second premise more easy to handle.

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3. On a roadtrip, somehow she ends up sharing a room with several members of, if not the entire, football team. Apparently no one on the coaching staff is worried about the potential lawsuits for sexual harrassment this could bring up.
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#3 is so unlikely as to be ridiculous. But again, anything is possible, but how likely is the real question. My husband is a college professor here in Colorado, and I can state as a fact that his school, as are many universities, is deathly afraid of any kind of lawsuit leveled against them and have strict guidelines regarding this sort of excursion and acceptable behavior therein.
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"How likely" is not the real question. Oedipal incest is very rare, but that is the genre in which this is to be written. Suspension of disbelief has already happened when a reader even looks at the titles in this genre.

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4. She doesn't seem to mind, either.
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Surely she must know this is rather unusual and inappropriate. Surely she must realize the potential for misconduct. It only stands to reason, if she's aware of the bullying of her son, then certainly these same college-aged twits would likely think little of turning their harrassment toward her, given she's young, attractive, and doesn't seem to mind sharing a room with a dozen or more hormonally-charged football players. As an editor, this leads me to believe she's either just that stupid and naive or she's just as sexually eager and shallow as they are.
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Stupid is fine by these readers.

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5. The mother and son don't tell anyone on the team or staff they're related, because of the potential for embarrassment on the son's part, who wants to fit in with the rest of the team.
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I see you accept this. I should hope so, because there are many examples of this. A teacher I know re-married after a divorce, but did not change her daughter's name because she was teaching in the school at which her daughter was about to become a pupil, and she didn't want her daughter to have that as a handicap.

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"She was scared and wanted to cry, but then remembered how much her son was looking forward to this trip and if she blew the matter up now the whole trip would be ruined."

So... she's on the verge of a nervous breakdown, not knowing who did what to her during the night (not to mention the fact that she must sleep like the dead!), and instead of doing what a sound, rational person would and immediately seek out the coach and, more likely, the authorities, she decides to take her chances with a sexually transmitted disease, rather than heap five minutes worth of embarrassment on her son. I suppose I'm supposed to believe that disease, and quite possibly death, are less important to her than making sure her son makes some new chums on the football team.
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"Disease and possibly death" are rarely, if ever, considered in this genre or, for that matter, in the whole field of pornography. As to the harrassment reaction, that too is entirely ignored in most of these stories.

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Assuming she really is just that base in her thinking, I can't help but wonder why she didn't sit up in bed and cheer, knowing she had herself a ticket to easy street via a multi-million dollar lawsuit against the university, the coaching staff, the hotel, and those directly involved.
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You are repeating yourself.

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And I really have to wonder what kind of son she's raised, seeing as how he's so willing and eager to violate her, his own mother no less, ostensibly against her will (as they didn't wake her to seek her approval). I've already lost any sympathy or interest in the son, other than to hope he spends many long years in prison for his role in this, where he can experience on a daily basis what she did for those two nights. He doesn't mind raping a woman, just so he doesn't have to be taunted in the locker room showers. And it's equally unimportant to him that it's his own mother, someone the reader is supposed to believe he loves.

So, right off the bat, I, as a reader (and editor), form no close emotional bond with the lead characters.
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That is because you have talked yourself out of it.

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They're both shallow and selfish and wholly dumb.
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"Shallow and selfish and dumb" is the idea, so that sympathy does not get in the the way of titillation.

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There is potential in this story, but, as it stands, it doesn't work. It asks far too much of the reader from the get-go.
If you want a pat description of sex between two people, well, then I guess this story would work fine the way it is. On the other hand, if you really want to delve into the magic of good writing, then you need to reach into the reader's heart and mind and pull some strings without making it obvious. This story, though having potential, isn't subtle in how it manipulates the reader's heart and mind. Instead, it grabs them by the throat and attempts to force them to believe the unimaginably fantastic.
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At last you've realised I'm not trying to write literature; this is porn. The reader is already committed to this genre and to self-titllation before they even download the story.


WIth abject apologies to lauracmk for apparently taking over her ownership of this story. Fear not Laura, I don't do incest (except as a bit of background in six of my novels!).

 

[sirhugs]

As a pro, you likely could pull it off, Snoop, cause you would resolve the issues that are needed to be fixed to allow a reader, whether one-handed or not, to maintain suspension of disbelief.

I think jtm's points are fair warnings for those of us who dabble in writing ( yes, I write in my job, but not fiction, well, not admittedly fiction).

As a reader, I suspend disbelief pretty well, but once something out of place in a story jars my brain out of 'interior movie playing ' mode into 'logic' mode, my interest evaporates.

The only thing you say that I disagree with is ' stupid is fine for these readers'. See above. I am a reader first and foremost, but a story that assumes I am stupid gets the back key hit if its lucky, a 1 if I'm cranky. Though i think you mean stupid characters, and I agree Lit abounds with those types. Luckily.

I'd love to see you try an incest adventure, just to see a pro at work in the genre.

 

[jtmalone70]

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[snooper]

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The more you narrow your target audience, the fewer readers you have. No author wants a small audience. The more readers they have, the more books they sell. It is entirely possible to publish a book in, as you stated, a fine niche. However, very few authors settle for specializing in merely one small, very marginalized genre. Variance, even if only slight, is how they build a strong readership base.
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This is where you miss the point - this particular story idea was aimed at one particular segment of the Literotica market.

In any case, I doubt that widening the story content sells more books - otherwise we would have all novels ever published set in a space ship {Sci-Fi} run by a cowboy {Western} and a prostitute {porn} who gets murdered {whodunit} and the murderer is caught by a little old lady {Agatha Christie} who uses a magic sword {Fantasy} ... etc. ... etc.

On Literotica, if they didn't demand a minimum of 750 words, the top story of all time would read:
I kiked the dor in & riped her cloths of & fukked her in every vergin hole & We both cummeed a million times in 10 secs.

 

[jtmalone70]

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[sirhugs]

the Adams stories make the point that if you construct a fictional reality and abide by its rules, fantasyt works. The trouble coomes in trying to impose fantasy behaviour on a realistic activity. Only the masters can manage that.

 

[mrmgp]

I just had an idea brought about by bits of a conversation in a thread last night.

Let's say two people on Lit develop a liking for each other based upon some playful back-and-forth banter. What if two people became attracted to each other, and over the course of exchanging some sexy PMs and start to cybersex each other until they exchange first names and find out that they are brother and sister and didn't even realize it. They decide to act upon their PMs in person.

 

[sirhugs]

I just had an idea brought about by bits of a conversation in a thread last night.

Let's say two people on Lit develop a liking for each other based upon some playful back-and-forth banter. What if two people became attracted to each other, and over the course of exchanging some sexy PMs and start to cybersex each other until they exchange first names and find out that they are brother and sister and didn't even realize it. They decide to act upon their PMs in person.

there are numerous variations on this, usually though, they meet before they realize they are related. On meeting, they are so horny, they decide 'what the heck...'

 

[Barry C]

I said this before

I don't mind reading incest stories too and most of my stories that i have written are either in this category or close to it mainly because the taboo nature makes up for my lack of quality as a writer

I'm sure there are plenty of other ideas for accidental enccounters with people usually off limits which would be just as titilating such as the Boss's Wife, Mates Sister, a Mates mother umm maybe the judge in your divorce hearing a police officer who pulls you over the next day. But I do like the accidental premise especially the masquarade and costume idea...

 

[jsplane]

Masquarade Orgy?

I think the best way to do incest accidentally is by masked ball. Perhaps one of those orgy ones, everybody grabs a card and then find the other card, and screw each other. Of course with masks on, I've heard a few times that it's done in colleges, so perhaps one of them is going to college there, the other visits without telling and gets invited to ball, they end up with the same card, have the incredible sex, then pull the masks off.

Do you have any writing experince at all? I don't meen to insult you but that idea will have to take a lot of "spicing up" and I don't meen those british chicks either. But, that may just be something to start on.

 

[jsplane]

You may have something there.

I just had an idea brought about by bits of a conversation in a thread last night.

Let's say two people on Lit develop a liking for each other based upon some playful back-and-forth banter. What if two people became attracted to each other, and over the course of exchanging some sexy PMs and start to cybersex each other until they exchange first names and find out that they are brother and sister and didn't even realize it. They decide to act upon their PMs in person.

I kind of like the idea of the cybering part, however I don't think that once they have found out about each other that they would still want to "go for the gold" and the story continue to remain in the accindental department. I had this online girl that wouldn't send me pics of her face but she would send me photos of any other part of her (and doing anything) I wanted. She was a gift from heaven, though she didn't turn out to be my sister.

 

[TheCaptain]

I suggest also that Lit policy might whince(sp?) at the idea of a 16 yr old mom giving birth so as to be 34 with an 18 yr old.

Just adding my two-cents worth in here... in my series Naughty Boy!, I made the Mom-character, Erica, 15yrs old at the time she gave birth to the Son-character, Kenny. I don't really think Lit has any problems if the character has a child before legal age BEFORE events in the story, and the sexual acts are not described IN THE STORY. At least, that's what I came to the conclusion of, once it was posted.

Either that, or that little detail slipped through the Literotica monitoring cracks! I would have been happy enough to change that one detail if it did not pass their criteria for posting, but it did, so meh... hope that helps someone out there!

Capt

 

[sirhugs]

Just adding my two-cents worth in here... in my series Naughty Boy!, I made the Mom-character, Erica, 15yrs old at the time she gave birth to the Son-character, Kenny. I don't really think Lit has any problems if the character has a child before legal age BEFORE events in the story, and the sexual acts are not described IN THE STORY. At least, that's what I came to the conclusion of, once it was posted.

Either that, or that little detail slipped through the Literotica monitoring cracks! I would have been happy enough to change that one detail if it did not pass their criteria for posting, but it did, so meh... hope that helps someone out there!

Capt

and he is a VERY naughty boy!