Nathan_Brazil
Literotica Guru
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The second chapter is very long too, although it is also very repetitive, it was better.
The author is writing in first person from a couple of povs, and using their thoughts to tell the story.
I would say that its at least 50% too long. The story is in there, but I'm starting to skim.
It has a VERY high rating though. It clearly has an audience, but then again, so did All My Children.
The author is writing in first person from a couple of povs, and using their thoughts to tell the story.
I would say that its at least 50% too long. The story is in there, but I'm starting to skim.
It has a VERY high rating though. It clearly has an audience, but then again, so did All My Children.