A "witch" for the gifted run away

[sexymystic]

A "witch" for the gifted run away

my story Idea is about a boy who runs away from his outcasting village that hunts him to the edge of the woods, a deep, dark, and mystirous woods, (I have bad grammar). no one dare enter the woods, for waits inside a witch, and they say the witch will try and "eat" you.

This story talks of witches, but in no way am I trying to be offencive, infact I know a few wiccan friends.

I am puting the term "witch" as a term that the people of the story label and outcast anyone who is different and gifted from them, I potray the "witch in a more loving and sexual light, instead of a evil eyed caclking stero-type.

This is my first story after reading many talented artists on here.




A young and senisitve boy and finds himself to be a "witch", with magical and psychic abilities.

His name is Jacob, he was raised in the villiage all his life and is now starting to manifesyt strange and new abilities that scare him, and scares the villagers more than him, infact they want to hunt him down.

Jacob is 17 and will be 18 in a few months, he wanted to be a carpenter like his father(no relation to jesus, though it is not my belief), but lately hes has been seeing visons and had dreams come true in real life, he saw his best friend have a fall in a dream and saw him being nursed in a daydream. Jacob told his friend and he didn't belive him. Then the next day a week ago he got knocked off his horse and refuses to talk to jacob ever since till this day, he had these vison for a week or two.

Jacob also discovered as he was anger, he could control nature and conjer the elements and cast fire balls and cause stroms and such, he also can read people emotins, though he had this as a young child from birth, he just never told them how they felt, he kept it to him self.

One day in mid to late autumn, the villagers gathered in the middle of the village and decided that jacob has a witch and decided that they would stone him to death.

So just as his mother ran home crying to jacob to leave and run for the woods the villagers started to march for his house with pitch forks and tourches.

She screamed to Jacob in a bout of tears "Run Jacob, Run for your life, I love you, and I want you to live!"

Jacob started to run for the door, his mother hurly pack a small bundle of clothes and foods and other things, she kissed him on the cheek in a half sob and said "Run, run as far and fast to the woods as you can, the villagers won't follow you there."

Jacob ran to the woods as fast as he can. One villager out of the crowd spoted Jacob and informed the rest of the crowd. they ran fast, but Jacob ran faster, he conjered up a storm and struck a thunder bolt at there feet. Everyone was flung back sevral feet. The mob was astruck and decided to not venture into the woods, for it was dark and scarey, and rumors of men going to slay the witch and never coming back, though many thought the rumors to be made up, still thought the woods to dangerous.

Jacob ran far into the woods to never come back. Jacob stoped and rested on a stump and started to cry, he knew from this day foreword he would have to live on his own and he probably would never see anyone again.

As he build a fire with hes magic and ate some food he started to fall asleep, but in the back of his mind he felt as though someone was watching him, but he decided he didn't care enough to look and he fell asleep.

he woke up in a daze, he looked around and noticed he wasn't in the woods, he was in a dark room, with a small bathing pool near by.

He got up and looked around to see he was in a locked room.
Beside him was a small tray of water and a small bowl of what looked and smelled like soup. Jacob has hungry and decided that he would try it.

Jacob got a sense that he was being watched and looked around, in the corner of the room in the dark was a dark figure, it was a woman aparently.
She said in a laid back voice "oh your a sensitive one aren't you."

With that he jumped back a little and and said "who..who are you?"

He then got a vison and saw she was outcast from the village too, as a small girl she ran away and managed to survive"

The He said to the mystirious woman "wait, your ran away from the village as a little girl, your the one everyone calls the witch"

"you have the gift of foresight too I see" said the witch

"lets see what else you can do" she through and apple at him, and instintively he threw a fire ball at the apple and caused it to burn into ashes and fall to the floor.

"your a witch!!!" she said, and walked over too him with glee. she then said to his quiviring face "little one, I have had visons of you and I final find you."

with this, she grabed him and pull him with a hug into her breasts. Jacob still being a vigin because of his early strangeness to his peers, let out a small moan, and he started to get an erection as she held him close in a tight embrace.

The wicth noticed this and with a a small smile she said You are still of pure heart aren't you, you have near ever had the touch of an elf much less that of a human."

with that she slowly laid him down on the floor, he asked her what she was doing, but her only repley was "shh, I will show you the ways of a lonely women" she then preceeded to slowly undress him and as she did he moaned slightly. For he has not even the touch of a loving godess.

When he was naked, the witch undressed her self also. Jacob was a very hansome boy, he had brown medium hair, not too fat, not overly skinny, he had a very small stomch, with a hint of abs underneath, and long masculent legs and well sculptued arms that aren't to "buff", but not to frail. His manhood was just over 6 and a half inches, close to 7 maybe, and he was thick too.

As for the witch, she was very sweet and loveing, with large c cups and a nice sexy body, and all femine curves of the godess she embodied. Long flowing dark brown hair.

He was a very senistive boy, and very inocent, and every touch made him moan slightly with pleasure.

she loved it and giggled at this in a sexy voice, quietly and slowly she held his hand and pulled him into the bathing pool, the water was warm and soothing,

she slowly push him up too the sooth stone face, he was over taking with the pleasuring thought that he was going make love, and posibbley the high libdo of a yound male. All he could do was sit there and watch with pleasure in his eye as this godess slowly embraced him and kissed him.

She was sexy and really turned on, she can remmebr the first time her elvin lover took her viginity away and this was the best thing she can remmebr feeling, and masturbated often, longing for a man to come along and give her a good sex.

She slowly and gently embraced her lips to his and started to kiss him slowly and passionatly, he moaned in her mouth, only making her want him more.

she then slowly moved and with the gentlest of ease and grabed his memmeber and with that he instinctively bucked foreword.

"eager are you?" she said and begain to stroke him in a stead pattern, he started to buck slightly and moan to the rithum. The witch then began to moan at this and rub her clit with her free hand.

Jacob began to buck faster and harder, thrusting in her hand with a passion.
when the witch looked down, with in a few second he began to maon really load and then his squirted hes hot load high in the air, it has all over the stone walll and her hand. She smiled deeply and licked iti off her hand, He has panting heavly and he was in a world of pure pleasure.

She nealt down and lick off his juices and kissed him deeply. He was so overwhelmed with leasure all he could do was sit and pass out, litteraly.

After he started to comeback, he heard a voice that said "lover, lover." He opened his eyes and he was in a bed, there she was naked laying with him in another dark room in a bed, her then gave hime a smal bite the eat, and she "my, my, you never even touch your self do you?" jacob responded "I don't know how" she let out a small chuckle at his inocents and started to kiss him agin deeply, all the time he got a very welcomed erection, she was still very horny and hadn't gotten off.

She reached out and started to stroke him again, but this time she stop and said "time that you learn of what you have been waiting for and was kept from"

she genlty slid over on top of him and began to kiss him again, very deeply, and very passionaitly.

She then stradled him and guided him in her hot gapping driping enterance, as she slid down on him, he moan really load, she begain to pick up to tempo.

she started off slow and her lips grasped him as she came up and down on his shaft, her wettnes slowly dripped on him.

she was holding him in her arms and she pumped on him, and kissing him, he was moaning loader and began to thrust at her as she came down to meet his thrusts.

he was pumping harder and harder, he let his instincts tak over him, he wildly thrust and thrust and thrust, he felt like he never wanted to leave this feeling ever again, he was in pure euphoia, the feeling of her hot slicky pounding sex on him felt so good, he was thrusting even harder as she thrust down on him harder also, soon he felt a hot liquid warmth moving and flowing in him, he felt he was soon on the verge of exploding in her, she was also strting to feel hot and felt her slelf coming close also.

He then felt him self come with even higher and powerful euphoria, he exponded, over and over and over and over again, he thought he wouldn't stop at the smae time she start5ed to come, she shot a hot stick liquid around his shaft, causing their jucies to spray out all over their them, he colapsed and she colpased on him, they were both so wore out, they both thought this was the best feeling in their lives, they just lay their on top of each other.

He let out a huge sigh of pleasure and she did too, they kissed each other passionately before falling asleep, in each others arms and and under a nice warm blanket covering them, under the sweet autum moon, as they start to sleep, a deep feeling of love swept over them and they huged each other tigher again, but gently in all their time with each other. they smiled as they slept in the inocent imbrace.

They finally found each other and for once they don't feel outcast, but loved and warm.



stephen.

p.s. please don't butcher this, you are free to use it, but this is my pure and raw creativity, I rarely get to express myself like this, thankyou.

Stephen Strausbaugh © 7-10-2006



so, what do you think? is this a good story, should I post this, or what?

 

[Akito01]

There's the base for something here, but the most obvious thing that will need to be changed is the 'boy' -at the very least, he will have to be a 'young man', since there is no room at Lit for child porn of any flavor. This will change the fundamental dynamics of the story a fair bit, and I'm reminded of my 'Rapunzel's Gift' story, in which the title character is described as growing up with the witch, and eventually locked away in the tower once she attains womanhood. In the same way, we could have the 'boy' ecounter the witch, but they do not engage in any actual sexual activity until he comes of age himself. He might relate to her as a mother figure, which adds a rather interesting incest angle to the tale, since the witch may well have intended for him to become her mate right from the start, and kept him isolated from the outside world to bring this to pass.

Obviously, there is no need for the witch to be outright evil, but in living a world much different from that of ordinary people, her perceptions of what is right and wrong would be quite skewed, and she may not find the notion of raising this young man and eventually seducing him as he enters full adulthood to be offensive if it serves her purposes (of which there could be many).

 

[Akito01]

I should really correct myself, since '17 nearly 18' isn't so much on the 'boy' side, and the overall story needn't change as much as I'd said it should (make him 18 flat and you're clear, though I personally tend not to outright list character ages since that often feels like artificial narration rather than storytelling).

I also found myself cringing a bit at the 'with large c cups' line, since, in such a time and place, it is unlikely people would judge breast size in such a way. When it comes to describing a woman's form, especially in erotica, more is more, so don't leap for the shortcuts when one can spend a bit of time weaving in the details of just how full and shapley her chest appears to him.

 

[sexymystic]

but what do you think

what do you think of it being my first story, do you think I have talent?

 

[Akito01]

what do you think of it being my first story, do you think I have talent?

I actually wouldn't even worry about the issue of 'talent' - in my view, Literotica is about the free exchange of sexual fantasies (of which there is a huge range of diversity), and I think everyone should be free to express themselves artistically, talent be damned.

From a technical viewpoint, I would definitely turn this over to someone who's willing to act as editor to fix the spelling and grammer. I don't know if, in it's current form, it would 100% be approved for posting, but it's not far from being put into a state where it could definitely be posted.

In terms of storytelling, there are certainly things that can be done if you are moved to do so, but some of these things come down to personal style. I personally tend to stay away from character descriptions that involve 'inches' and cup sizes -I think there are more potent ways to provide detail that are far more erotic. If you want, there is a ton of room to explore these two characters regarding their past, present and future. Is the witch really a witch? What are her powers and why is she in that forest? Does the boy feel any guilt about being seduced? Did he forsee any of this, and is he being entirely earnest in his appearence to innocence?

I wouldn't tell you not to post the story as you've written it (beyond fixing the technical issues), and I think there is definitely some thought and imagination behind it that portends well for anything further you want to add to this story or in the creation of new stories you wish to share. I'd definitely keep writing, since the best way to learn is by doing, and the whole 'talent' thing will take care of itself in due time.

 

[sexymystic]

Well I used inches and cups because thats all I had at the time.

I couldn't think of much else, and I don't mean to offend but when I think about it using cups and inches is a little cliche' if thats how you spell it.

I mean to say that when I think about using cups and inches, I think its shows a lack of imagination, I was aroused so I am speaking about myself in that state.

But maybe I am a twobit author that dosen't know much aboput writing yet.

Everyone is aroused on some level, I guess I am starting to lose instrest in MYSELF, I have to try and try to keep aroused while masturbating, I don't know why though.

I hope I didn't say anything to get me introuble, this is an errotic site.

Anyway, I give you premision to use this story if you feel you would like to change your alter it, but I wish you would keep the charactors personalities close enough to the same, I just don't like the whole domination thing, and I don't like straight up animal, I going to tear off your clothes and fuck you till your dead, sex ether.

I just wish this was a place where I could find love in sex instead of straight up humping, I know how to have loving sex I think, I just intuitivly know things and I based my fantsy and charactor off of myself being the young sensitive horny male type.

oh well, what say you?

 

[Akito01]

Well I used inches and cups because thats all I had at the time.

I couldn't think of much else, and I don't mean to offend but when I think about it using cups and inches is a little cliche' if thats how you spell it.

I mean to say that when I think about using cups and inches, I think its shows a lack of imagination, I was aroused so I am speaking about myself in that state.

But maybe I am a twobit author that dosen't know much aboput writing yet.

Everyone is aroused on some level, I guess I am starting to lose instrest in MYSELF, I have to try and try to keep aroused while masturbating, I don't know why though.

I hope I didn't say anything to get me introuble, this is an errotic site.

Anyway, I give you premision to use this story if you feel you would like to change your alter it, but I wish you would keep the charactors personalities close enough to the same, I just don't like the whole domination thing, and I don't like straight up animal, I going to tear off your clothes and fuck you till your dead, sex ether.

I just wish this was a place where I could find love in sex instead of straight up humping, I know how to have loving sex I think, I just intuitivly know things and I based my fantsy and charactor off of myself being the young sensitive horny male type.

oh well, what say you?

For one, I think you're right that good erotica should be more than about two people humping. I think that goes to the heart of why I got hooked into this particular message thread, because I can tell you were striving for something a bit more than simple pornography.

It's certainly a natural idea, especially when one begins writing, to use oneself as the basis for ones characters (as is often said, write what you know). The trick is in trying to communicate to others what one 'intuitively' knows, and that's not always easy. The more one writes, the easier this will become.

I think it's pretty common, when writing erotica, to find oneself, shall we say, writing with one hand. There's no point writing about something erotic if it doesn't turn you on, so I understand that completely and am guilty of the same self thing. What inevitably happens, is that once I've completed the first rough draft, I will leave it alone for a day or two, and let the fantasy continue to play out in my mind. This often leads to some thought experiments about what more I can add or change to the story to make it even more erotic and interesting. After that second draft, I leave it again and then come back with a blank slate to edit the story from a pure technical angle to fix the spelling and grammer.

For this story, I would really really encourage you to take the same approach. Let yourself leave the draft in your computer for a bit and let it play out in your mind. Come back to it again if you think of anything you'd like to add or change, then either try to edit it yourself or pass it on to someone like myself who can fix those boring technical things to get it into shape. I think it would be great to have you on board as a Literotica writer, because what you've posted is more than a simple story idea for others to exploit, but something you should really take full credit for yourself. I'd really encourage that. You don't have to worry about being 'two-bit' or anything else like that -I say, go for it!

If you want me to edit your final draft, you can get in touch with me at akito01@yahoo.com There are actually many people here who are willing to act as editors, and I'm not usually part of that group, but in this case I'd definitely be willing to do that, if you wish.

 

[emap]

I'm guessing you have not seen a woman up close and personal sexually. Bra size is only needed when your buying bras.

Instead of talkig about how she has 34C breasts, I mean hello yawn. Instead say something like, her full breasts spilling out of her top as she leaned over him, the fabric tensing under the pressure created enclosing the breasts in to small a space for their size. Her hands reach up and undo her ties, the fabric almost groaning as the captive breasts get more and more freedom until they have burst out.

Which would you rather read? That's the biggest trick to doing erotica or well stories in general, it's not a matter of how few words you can use to tell the story, it's how well the story springs into someone's mind.

Of course be careful of over wording, if you have to much information people will not like it as much and you will get more bad reviews.

 

[Monazwx]

I like it. I don't usually read 'fantasy' stories, but if developed, this one could be a real treat.