A "robber tourist"..?

[000zing]

Has this idea got legs? It's been down among the dregs of my "to write" list for years, literally, but I've never found enough enthusiasm to go for it. People are very welcome to make use of it or some adaptation thereof.

A single woman in her thirties - a very plain Jane with an unattractive personality who's had zero success over the years in attracting male attention - hits on a method which can be used repeatedly.

She books an annual Med holiday in the same resort each year and ensures that her return flight is an evening take-off. During the holiday she selects a number of possible male "targets", thus stacking the odds in her favour. Some may be single, others married. Gradually she gauges which is the pick of the bunch as regards willingness to fuck. On the last day she makes her play, indicating (by a note?) that a tryst for the two of them can be in his room (providing wife can be distracted) that afternoon.

Her libido sated, she plies The Target with a spiked drink and then ransacks the room for all money, valuables such as wife's jewellery etc. The Target is still snoring peacefully, with wife probably hammering on the door, as our heroine boards her plane.

I always thought it would be more fun to have a woman as MC, although it could probably work either way.

 

[Rob_Royale]

Yes, I definitely think this idea has potential. Lots of options for a grifter or a pair. A MF or a FF couple, distracting and seducing both the husband and wife. Woman grabs his cash, scans his cards, grabs the Rolex. Man grabs her jewelry, cash, cards and her panties.

But there's all sorts of ways things can go sideways. That's the fun part.

 

[TheWritingGroup]

But there's all sorts of ways things can go sideways. That's the fun part.

The original idea, the woman is going to drug and rob the man.

But he's a grifter, hoping to blackmail her. When he wakes up, he has photos of her from the hidden cameras.

-Annie

 

[KimAwakened]

Possibly the number of loose ends here was what was putting you off writing it.

The sex scene being in the man's room with him presumably having to chase wife away... awkward. The spiked drink having to appear somehow at the end of the intimacy... awkward. The MC having to seduce the guy over several days without ever revealing her identity... awkward. Can she actually guarantee there will be stuff worth looting from the room..?

A very good idea though and one worth doing if things like that can be manipulated.

 

[Britva415]

It doesn't make sense because - How does she go from not being able to attract male attention to being able to attract male attention?

If she makes that change, why would she be motivated to use it for robbery instead of just using it for what she wanted all along?

It doesn't make sense as described - did you leave something out? Like, is she using incel logic and mentally making it malekind's fault she hasn't been able to score, and using the robberies to exact some twisted revenge?

Sounds like a pretty unsympathetic character, with or without a motivation like that. How could you make her and her situation and the choices she makes sympathetic to the reader? I'm not saying you have to, there does seem to be an audience who enjoy reading about reprehensible characters, however the people I have in mind probably wouldn't enjoy reading about this woman.

 

[Reenigam]

It "doesn't make sense" only if you don't take into account the difference between the humdrum of everyday life and the atmosphere of being on holiday, that and the fact that many men will take what's offered in a foreign situation when they wouldn't if matters were, literally, closer to home with the possibility of repercussions.

As for insisting that an MC be a sympathetic character, it's not always the personalities which are the focus of interest in any story. This is very far from the case and especially so in erotic writing. Often, the star of the show is the plot and the idea behind it. If the OP had a short story in mind, this would very likely be the case.

I like the general proposition.

 

[CuttingEdge]

The story premise definitely has legs.

Two of the erotic stories I have written with this premise has been one where the woman was a waitress, but also a widow and noted the man she targeted had her late-husbands' traits and she wanted a son of that type and wanted to have the man get her pregnant. Obviously, she had a mental issue from her bereavement.

In another one, it was a Femme Fetale where the woman seems innocent, but is a bank teller who sets a man up for sex and to be killed by the police both so that in the distraction she can steal from her own bank. It takes a bit, but the police detective realizes this in an erotic story that is a reverse mystery, or what is known as a Colombo type cop story. That is, you know who the killer is up front. The interest is NOT in who did the crime, but how and why they did it.

 

[Small_Island]

It doesn't make sense because - How does she go from not being able to attract male attention to being able to attract male attention?

If she makes that change, why would she be motivated to use it for robbery instead of just using it for what she wanted all along?

It doesn't make sense as described - did you leave something out? Like, is she using incel logic and mentally making it malekind's fault she hasn't been able to score, and using the robberies to exact some twisted revenge?

Sounds like a pretty unsympathetic character, with or without a motivation like that. How could you make her and her situation and the choices she makes sympathetic to the reader? I'm not saying you have to, there does seem to be an audience who enjoy reading about reprehensible characters, however the people I have in mind probably wouldn't enjoy reading about this woman.

I had the same thought about how is she suddenly able to seduce these guys?
But what if that aspect gets tweaked? She's a little cute, maybe a 6, but has trouble competing when back home - lives in a university town with (younger?) hot coeds everywhere, or the big city with more model types around. However, she realizes that when she goes on trips the action heats up. Maybe there aren't enough willing women to go around or the guys are just hornier, and her 6 becomes an 8. Sometimes they're disappointed in the woman they brought with them and fall for her openness, other times the female companion also appears to be on the prowl for a vacation special. In the end, she realizes it's a great way to get different, hot sex without the hassles of a relationship. But, how to afford these trips without becoming a paid whore - knowing that asking for money might backfire as the people on vacation want the impact of cheating with other cheaters, not pros.
The solution? The original concept - Crime. As she fucks her way through the vacation she scopes out who has the most to steal or will be the easiest mark or most satisfying if she decides to target the biggest assholes she meets. She lines that up as her final encounter of the trip, either a repeat or someone who's seen her in action and has been desperate for his turn. Then we get to the original ending of her hooking up with her mark on her last day, getting her jollies while he/she gets his/hers/theirs, then slipping the mickey into the celebratory champagne and ripping them off before heading for the airport.
FMC becomes more sympathetic (or at least less unlikable) and the overall amount of sex goes up.

 

[SteelPoint]

I had the same thought about how is she suddenly able to seduce these guys?

The solution? The original concept - Crime. As she fucks her way through the vacation she scopes out who has the most to steal or will be the easiest mark or most satisfying if she decides to target the biggest assholes she meets. She lines that up as her final encounter of the trip, either a repeat or someone who's seen her in action and has been desperate for his turn. Then we get to the original ending of her hooking up with her mark on her last day, getting her jollies while he/she gets his/hers/theirs, then slipping the mickey into the celebratory champagne and ripping them off before heading for the airport.
FMC becomes more sympathetic (or at least less unlikable) and the overall amount of sex goes up.

Can't see how she could risk doing a series of guys. The risk of police reporting increases much more than just doing the one at the very end of her stay, as per the OP.

I see this very much as a short, starting possibly even with an opening scene of her sipping at her champers in bed next to the drugged "mark" and reminiscing cosily over both this holiday and previous triumphs. The story could be told in that way. Room also for her being arrested through some minor act of forgetfulness on her part and a nemesis situation overtaking her finally after several years of "success".

 

[TheWritingGroup]

,,, She's a little cute, maybe a 6, but has trouble competing when back home - lives in a university town with (younger?) hot coeds everywhere, or the big city with more model types around. However, she realizes that when she goes on trips the action heats up. Maybe there aren't enough willing women to go around or the guys are just hornier ...

She picks a type of vacation that appeals more to guys (stereotypically), say hunting or rock climbing. Women do them, but the sex ratio gets unbalanced. Lots of unattached men, and since she does it every year or less, she gets pretty skilled by the time the actual story starts.

-Rocco

 

[Small_Island]

She may get with a variety of people during the vacation, but only rips off the last one at the end. And she doesn't keep going to the same place over and over to set up a pattern for the cops. A week in Hawaii, a weekend rock climbing in Yosemite. This year's spring break in Florida, next year's in Mexico. She doesn't get greedy, this isn't her livelihood, just a way to finance the next vacation or two as she enjoys new encounters. Also, some victims are married cheaters away on business trips, or swinger couples who wouldn't like the folks back home to know, so just how much fuss are they going to raise with the cops? Lots of ways to keep her out of trouble.

 

[LiverpoolMaster]

Can't see how she could risk doing a series of guys. The risk of police reporting increases much more than just doing the one at the very end of her stay, as per the OP.

I see this very much as a short, starting possibly even with an opening scene of her sipping at her champers in bed next to the drugged "mark" and reminiscing cosily over both this holiday and previous triumphs. The story could be told in that way. Room also for her being arrested through some minor act of forgetfulness on her part and a nemesis situation overtaking her finally after several years of "success".

Top idea, this. Very much like your thought for the actual narrative. I'd add the suggestion that it could be done from the woman's POV, i.e. in the first person. I tend to write stuff using my own home area as a background, or I'd be very tempted to have a go at it.

 

[KimAwakened]

Can't see how she could risk doing a series of guys. The risk of police reporting increases much more than just doing the one at the very end of her stay, as per the OP.

I see this very much as a short, starting possibly even with an opening scene of her sipping at her champers in bed next to the drugged "mark" and reminiscing cosily over both this holiday and previous triumphs. The story could be told in that way. Room also for her being arrested through some minor act of forgetfulness on her part and a nemesis situation overtaking her finally after several years of "success".

Yes, the whole story virtually could be told from the position of post-coital, wine-accompanied musing. I like that. No need for dialogue, at which I'm not much good!

It goes without saying I can easily imagine a lesbian take on this.

 

[000zing]

Can't see how she could risk doing a series of guys. The risk of police reporting increases much more than just doing the one at the very end of her stay, as per the OP.

I see this very much as a short, starting possibly even with an opening scene of her sipping at her champers in bed next to the drugged "mark" and reminiscing cosily over both this holiday and previous triumphs. The story could be told in that way. Room also for her being arrested through some minor act of forgetfulness on her part and a nemesis situation overtaking her finally after several years of "success".

It was actually in my mind to have this "reminiscing" thing happening... but as she was seated on her plane waiting for her flight home. Someone said earlier that the loose ends situation here is complicated, which is true, and I'm not sure I can be bothered sorting it all out!

 

[LupusDei]

About her lack of sex back home, but apparent success abroad... It could be some of the reasons for her celibacy are external. Perhaps her job, or reputation. That could be, a very publicly visible role somehow, or one with certain air aroundit. Not necessarily a TV anchor or college professor, rather a janitor, or something very literally shitty somehow. Or maybe she runs a podcast espousing really peculiar views. Maybe she lives with her disabled mother (or sister, or any other relative), or simply vegetate in parent's house, either way her coeds aren't very conducive for sexual relationships to say it mildly (for myriad of possible reasons, from religious to closeted desire led jealousy).

In short, it may be that she's not so much totally unable to get a date, but choose not to even try, because reasons and assumptions. While on vacation she enjoys anonymity and detachment and let her hair down, and may even adopt completely alternative personality, up to including a made up identity that rhymes nicely with her criminal behavior, but wasn't originally for that. She engages in those robberies because she can, not so much because she would necessarily need (although it definitely should be still significant, not just purely for the thrill).

 

[000zing]

In short, it may be that she's not so much totally unable to get a date, but choose not to even try, because reasons and assumptions. While on vacation she enjoys anonymity and detachment and let her hair down, and may even adopt completely alternative personality, up to including a made up identity that rhymes nicely with her criminal behavior, but wasn't originally for that. She engages in those robberies because she can, not so much because she would necessarily need (although it definitely should be still significant, not just purely for the thrill).

Yes, I agree with that entirely. The idea was to have a situation which forced her to seek her sexual thrills by cunning and deceit. My immediate thought was to have her as a kind of involuntary celibate but of course other possibilities are available. I would still prefer to keep this forcing background but, definitely, combining it with your idea that she finds she can do it (and enjoys it very much - to the point of "addiction"?) might form easily part of a decent plot development.

 

[MikeXIrons]

Perhaps she isn't single. She marries a guy who's a con man. Her husband is the thief and one time, while on vacation, he spots a mark. He just needs to have the guy be distracted for a bit and he tells his wife to distract the mark. She's offended that her husband would use her like that and not be jealous of her flirting with another man. She does it... and discovers she likes it - the challenge, the attention, and the extra excitement of the situation.

It works so well, it becomes their normal routine. She keeps upping the ante... moving from flirting to more... to see if her husband gets jealous.

Maybe the husband doesn't like it when his wife starts doing more than flirting... but he likes stealing more, so keeps sending her to distract one mark after the next. She keeps returning with more and more erotic stories of how she distracted the guy.

The husband tells himself that maybe she's exaggerating just to give him a hard time for using her as a distraction for his capers. Or, maybe he finds he likes hearing the stories... and sending his wife out on these "missions" becomes more about hearing her story after than about the theft. Maybe sometimes he doesn't even steal anything.

 

[000zing]

Perhaps she isn't single. She marries a guy who's a con man. Her husband is the thief and one time, while on vacation, he spots a mark. He just needs to have the guy be distracted for a bit and he tells his wife to distract the mark. She's offended that her husband would use her like that and not be jealous of her flirting with another man. She does it... and discovers she likes it - the challenge, the attention, and the extra excitement of the situation.

It works so well, it becomes their normal routine. She keeps upping the ante... moving from flirting to more... to see if her husband gets jealous.

Maybe the husband doesn't like it when his wife starts doing more than flirting... but he likes stealing more, so keeps sending her to distract one mark after the next. She keeps returning with more and more erotic stories of how she distracted the guy.

The husband tells himself that maybe she's exaggerating just to give him a hard time for using her as a distraction for his capers. Or, maybe he finds he likes hearing the stories... and sending his wife out on these "missions" becomes more about hearing her story after than about the theft. Maybe sometimes he doesn't even steal anything.

Rather too many twists and turns for my own liking but certainly all of that is good plot material... could make for a good longer story.