A Little Bit of Feedback Please

[pgbrowngirl]

This is my first story on Literotica (I have 2 others on ES) and it's also my first non-interracial story. I consider it to be a special story because I combined a little fiction with non-fiction experience. I would appreciate any feedback, good or bad, that you can extend.

Thanking you in advance.

Click here and enjoy>>>"Jay and Sonait"

 

[feelingbrave]

I'm impressed. Liked the pacing. Found myself reading faster to keep up with her rising passion. You've managed to blend the fiction and non-fiction well. A nice fantasy.

 

[pgbrowngirl]

Thank you for replying and reading the story, feelingbrave. I appreciate the compliment.

 

[tenyari]

ES?

 

[pgbrowngirl]

I'm sorry. Erotic Stories.

 

[tenyari]

Is that a website with a URL somewhere?

 

[RobynG]

Keep at it, you have some talent! i LIKED the story for what it is worth.