A Highschool Fantasy - Pure Ecstasy

[Sim8425]

My first story has just been accepted. It's called A Highschool Fantasy - Pure Ecstasy, the link to it is:

http://www.chyoo.com:81/index.php/main.story.cover/1311

Check it out, tell me what you think, and add if you want.

Thanks,

Sim8425

 

[Ooohkitty]

Hey honey
I just have to say i thought the story was alright
but there are a few things that just don't make sense to me

In what world would they let a eightteen year old girl adopt one twelve year old child let alone three.

Whose mother or stepmother would fall down on her knees and give her son/stepson a "bj" without a little bit of some kindof something or other.

but then again if your looking for a little incest spank fest its not bad little tale


Well then again my story is far from being War and Peace.
Luv,
Christy

 

[Sim8425]

Thanks for commenting, I appreciate criticism.

"In what world would they let a eighteen year old girl adopt one twelve year old child let alone three."

That is where the fantasy element comes into play. Check out the title! ( :

"Whose mother or stepmother would fall down on her knees and give her son/stepson a "bj" without a little bit of some kindof something or other."

It'll make more sense when I continue the story.

Thanks, Sim8425

 

[jakelyon]

Sounds like fun

Nice start. Sounds like a fun romp with plenty of sex, and lots of possibilities without a great deal of thinking. I love this kind of story.

Only quesiton I have is POV shown in the summary is 1st person, but the introduction seems like it is 2nd person POV. I am going to write in 2nd person and hopefully that is what you want.

I am working on a thread for you right now. Hope to have it soon.

Thanks.

 

[Sim8425]

Re: Sounds like fun

Nice start. Sounds like a fun romp with plenty of sex, and lots of possibilities without a great deal of thinking. I love this kind of story.

Only quesiton I have is POV shown in the summary is 1st person, but the introduction seems like it is 2nd person POV. I am going to write in 2nd person and hopefully that is what you want.

I am working on a thread for you right now. Hope to have it soon.

Thanks.

That'll work, thanks, I'll be looking forward to it! Whoops, it is 2nd person. I'll fix that!

 

[brevdravis]

I think this story is a nice first attempt.

Only suggestion I would make is a little more proofreading....

(Not that I'm perfect about that)

Stuart

 

[Sim8425]

"I think this story is a nice first attempt.

Only suggestion I would make is a little more proofreading....

(Not that I'm perfect about that)"


Thanks for the compliment and the tip. I would check for errors more carefully if I had enough time though!

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The story has been updated with an awsome thread from jakelyon,

Thanks alot!

Sim8425

 

[Sim8425]

There are two new threads added to the story. First there is a thread by SpecialKlown submitting his first entry to the story, Thanks!

jakelyon adds another awsome thread to the story, great thread and idea, thanks!

Sim8425

 

[Sim8425]

There is a new thread added by Juiblex. An awsome idea that situates the character home and sick with his mother, who is thinking about staying home to take care of him.

Thanks Jubilex,

Sim8425

 

[Sim8425]

Another awsome thread from jakelyon. In this thread the main character catches his mother easing tension by watching his porn video.

Thanks jakelyon,

Sim8425

 

[Sim8425]

jakelyon adds another wonderful thread and in it the mother talks about the main character's porno which she found and pleasured herself to.

thanks jakelyon,

Sim8425

 

[Sim8425]

I'm sorry for not updating my story thread recently.

First of all major thanks go out to Athena_e19, Dao2, Imhotep, PMGN, and jakelyon for all recently adding threads to the story.

Thanks a lot,

Sim8425

 

[Sim8425]

New Thread

PMGN submits another great thread continuing from his previous one. In this thread the main character's snobby stepsister is surprised by a faceful.

Thanks, Sim8425

 

[Sim8425]

brevdravis adds an excellent thread to the story. The main character has a one on one encounter with his virginal stepsister.

Thanks,

Sim8425

 

[Sim8425]

Update!

brevdavis adds two great threads. One is about the main character being asked some pretty erotic questions, the questionnaire, his stepmother. The other thread continues with his teacher( Ms. Demaro) continuing to release her sexual frustrations on him.

Thanks brevdavis,

Sim8425

 

[Sim8425]

Imhotep adds a great thread, placing the main character in an oral situation with his drama teacher.

Thanks Imhotep

Sim8425

 

[Sim8425]

Thanks

I'd just like to thank the person who reported an error in the story. I've fixed it up and if anyone sees any more errors they'd like fixed, please post the mistake in this thread.

Thanks,

Sim8425

 

[Sim8425]

QUOTATION BUG FIXED

I've fixed all of the quotation marks in the story that were messed up due to the evolution of CHYOO.

Sim8425

 

[Sim8425]

Story Update

cpttoesucker adds a great thread that leaves the teacher, Ms. Demaro in a sticky situation.

Thanks cpttoesucker

Sim8425

 

[Sim8425]

Another update!

deathofcards adds a wonderful thread which has the main character pleasing his teacher, Ms. Demaro. Good stuff, check it out!

Thanks deathofcards

Sim8425

 

[deathofcards]

My thread

I've managed to post this in the right place this time.

No worries, dude. I enjoyed writing it. All I ask is that you write a thread for my story if it ever gets approved.

 

[Sim8425]

Re: My thread

I've managed to post this in the right place this time.

No worries, dude. I enjoyed writing it. All I ask is that you write a thread for my story if it ever gets approved.

Sure, no problem!

Sim8425

 

[Sim8425]

New thread.

daciasdesire adds an awsome thread that has the sweaty main character, who's in a hurry, waiting for his step-sister, Brittney to finish her shower. What will happen next?

Thanks daciadesire,

Sim8425

 

[Sim8425]

Story update.

deathofcards adds a great thread. The main character's pal Randy, joins in on the fun, by helping him play with his hot, young teacher named Ms. Harris.

Thanks deathofcards,

Sim8425

 

[Sim8425]

New Thread.

argonaut adds an awsome voyeuristic thread. In it the protagonist watches his beautiful teacher, Ms. Lai pleasure herself as he watches.

Thanks argonaut,

Sim8425