A Half Finished Story and A Cry For Help

[Chicklet]

HELP!

Months ago I started a story. It was going great, I liked it, I kept writing it and writing it and enjoying it until one day...I drew a blank. I didn't write anything more. But that was okay, I told myself, I would come back to it later.

For weeks I told myself this, but then I realized that I had lost inspiration. I don't know where my story should go, what should happen next. Every time I open the story I just stare at it, edit a couple of things, and close it or leave it open without touching it.

My request is for someone to read it and help me out with your ideas and feedback; where should it go? What should I change? Maybe changing the begining will give me the inspiration I need to continue my story.

It is 10 or 12 MSWord pages so I don't want to post it here.
PM me or respond here if you're willing to help. I'm willing to take the necessary steps to get this project done, and done right.

Chicklet

 

[Guest]

I'll take a look, Chicklet. It would help me (and you) if you provide a paragraph or two summarizing the WHOLE story if possible, including the bit you haven't written yet, along with the story.
Mail it to me. I use MS Word's annotation feature, which is very useful.
PS I know you said you're not sure of direction it should go -- so even more important to TRY and write the synopsis paragraphs.


Josh.

 

[Chicklet]

Amy is alone at home. Her husband travels often for work and she is left alone in the house during the middle of the hottest summer of her life. She passes the time trying to stay cool by sitting in her little blue wading pool and basically just loafing around.

Amy and husband have a conversation about sex and orgasms and such and Amy says she doesn't usually have orgasms while her husband is gone. She doesn't have orgasms as often as some women, and it's harder for her when she's alone. Her husband is upset by this since he is gone so often and convinces her to buy a vibrating dildo and maybe try that out.

So Amy goes out and buys herself a blue plastic sex toy. She's sort of intimidated by it, but excited at the same time. Her husband calls her again and convinces her to try it out while he's on the phone. She goes upstairs and fills the bathtub, feeling more comfortable in the water, and slips inside.

Here's where it got shaky. It was supposed to be a phone sex type thing, but then it ended up that he has an orgasm on his side of the phone and hangs up, leaving her alone. I don't really know what to do, but I was thinking she'd go outside and finish herself off in her pool, but I really don't know. I'm seriously stumped.

 

[HemlockNredwine]

Hello. I feel your pain!

Perhaps what you should think about changing isn’t necessarily the story itself right now, but the way you in which you write it. Writing, for me, was like hitting my head against a brick wall until I discovered the wonderful freedom of the uninterrupted first draft. I was so bogged down trying to make the story “good” that I ended up never finishing the damn thing in the first place. Like you, I would re-read the first draft before it was done, and then do some editing. This is a very bad thing! I suspect it may arguably be the worst habit that a writer can possibly have. What ends up happening is that you have a polished first few paragraphs, and then when you sit down to write again you have this crazy idea that what you write next should also be smooth and “good,” just like the beginning of the story. It doesn’t work that way, or at least not very well. Who needs that kind of pressure? You end up mixing a second or third draft beginning with a first draft middle, and the result is certainly going to be dissatisfaction sooner or later. The whole thing becomes clunky and forced. Worse, you start second-guessing yourself and lose your way.

Believe me, the ghost of Shakespeare isn’t going to bust in and slap you around for taking your first draft down a lame detour. Keep writing until you get back on the road again, and then edit out the other stuff later. Inspiration isn't all it's made out to be.

I think the first draft should be written from beginning to end without all the hang-ups of trying to make it a good story, because it isn’t a story at all. It’s just a rough framework, a direction to go in. (Or a direction to avoid later, as the case may be.) The actual story itself comes out during the re-write. That’s when you should dig in and start monkeying around with the wiring.

Hope it helps.

 

[entitled]

Here's where it got shaky. It was supposed to be a phone sex type thing, but then it ended up that he has an orgasm on his side of the phone and hangs up, leaving her alone. I don't really know what to do, but I was thinking she'd go outside and finish herself off in her pool, but I really don't know. I'm seriously stumped.

Here's a thought: Amy goes outside to finish herself off in the little pool, when the neighbor just happens by....

 

[Chicklet]

Here's a thought: Amy goes outside to finish herself off in the little pool, when the neighbor just happens by....

this is a definite posiblity

 

[gauchecritic]

Or.. she finds that after he has hung up, it still being warm from the hot talk, she hangs onto the handset of the phone and finds a slightly different use for it.

 

[ladyphoenix]

Stumped....

Okay, here's what I would do...

You originally intended this to be a phone sex story, right? So, let it be just that.

Her hubby cums, and goes. She's lying in the tub, frustrated as hell. Gets up, dries off, goes to bed....she's lying in the dark when the phone rings about ten minutes later.

She smiles to herself, knowing it's him, calling to apologize for being such a jerk...and when she picks it up, she starts off with a very sexy, "Hello?"

The voice, male, on the other end says (haltingly...) "Oh...um...I'm sorry...I must--"

She cuts him off, with something he can't hang up on like "It's okay, baby...my cunt's still dripping for you....wanna play some more?" And of COURSE "he" says yes.

And after she has the greatest orgasm of her life (okay, it's a cliche) she finds out he's some businessman staying in a local hotel trying to get pizza delivered and he got a wrong number...and they have a good laugh after their orgasms, and a friendship begins.

That's what I'd do.

Best,
ladyp

 

[Chicklet]

lady P i like it = ) I don't know if my story is going to go there, though.

a bit of background that's not totally necessary:

the husband, Justin, is the same character from my Gay Male story who is actually out of town cheating on Amy with another man = )

Chicklet

 

[BamaMan]

A Possibility

If she were to check her caller ID, return the call to her husband, catch him in the act so to speak... She just might get off hearing her husband giving or receiving anal or oral sex...
Just a thought. I do agree that the worst thing you can do is edit a very small portion of a story, I was doing that at first, and ruined a few of my own. I posted anyway and the votes were low, so I forced myself to just write the whole story and THEN do the editing. The last story indicated that I am on the right track!
Relax, don't really think... just let the story flow.
Hope this helped.
BamaMan

 

[Wicked-N-Erotic]

Another thought...The phone rings while it's still in her hand and it's a wrong number, a man with a sexy voice and you're still so hot and worked up. You are still toying with your vibe as you speak to him and you moan....You end up having phone sex with him.......
I had started a phone sex story a week ago and havent got around to finishing it yet so maybe I shouldnt have chimmed in here, LOL. Anyway it's an idea for you to think about.
Good Luck
Wicked

 

[Wicked-N-Erotic]

OHHHHHH Crap, I wish I had read all of the other replys before I posted. Looks like ladyP and I had the same idea, sorry for repeating it.
Wicked

 

[Pookie]

lady P i like it = ) I don't know if my story is going to go there, though.

a bit of background that's not totally necessary:

the husband, Justin, is the same character from my Gay Male story who is actually out of town cheating on Amy with another man = )

Chicklet

An idea that popped in my head was maybe have Amy call back and Justin's lover picks up the phone. Amy thinks it is her husband and interrupts the lover before he can say much. She jumps back into the phone sex saying she needs to finish this or she can't go to sleep. The lover thinks it is just a lady calling by chance and ends up having phone sex with her before realizing who she really is. There could be any number of variations to this plot. Work with it until you think of a plot twist that captures your interest.

My suggestion is to just let some ideas spill out on paper and see what sparks your imagination the most. Have fun with it!

 

[Chicklet]

Thank you, everyone, for your responses and GREAT ideas! I'm writing it again!!!

When I finish and it's posted on Lit I'll try to remember to post a link here so that anyone interested can check it out =)

Chicklet

 

[ladyphoenix]

How wicked...

No problem, Wicked. Great minds....

 

[DeepTouch]

I sent a reply in the other section. I've submitted a story that I wrote called "The Arrangment". it's about toys as well. I have lots of ideas about your wonderful start and a great number of possible finishes, including the neighbor friend ( a she) that comes to the door in the middle of your orgasm. Goodness, where could you go with that?

Deeptouch (secret4fun)

 

[Chantal Marchon]

I think at that point I would have her take herself to the wading pool in the yard and play with her toy. Being miffed at her husband for being so inconsiderate. Ends up seducing a convenient electric meter reader man with really nice legs who knows how to treat a hot babe. So she can truthfully tell her husband when he gets home that she has been successful in her search for a good orgasm.