A favour?

[Kitte]

My darling love wrote me the most wonderful poem. I was wondering if some of you poetry folks could give it a peek and maybe a vote. I would much appreciate it. I think he has talent that with encouragement could be developed.

POEM

 

[JUDO]

Your SO does have some talent, but he needs to learn what is trite and cliché. A good place to start that without lots of time on your hands is right here in the Poetry Forum.

We have lots of inpsirational threads, information on meter, structure, etc.

If he were to participate with the other poets here and get involved in their crazy world, he would improve quickly. I have.


- Judo

 

[WickedEve]

I read this poem and there are quite a few clichés.
For example:
lost in a thought
Taking my Breath away
dragons breath
phoenix is reborn

Ezarc's poem would benefit from replacing some words and phrases. He needs to find new ways to express his ideas. The more you read poetry, the more you realize that the same thing is being said in the same way, repeatedly.

I do think he has potential. And he should definitely put some work into his poetry.