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A Comic Strip!

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Sorry for the bad English. I'm learning very slowly....:rolleyes:
 
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It's good. If you want, I've editing the English, by panel.

1) My mother told me, "Pamela, be careful of the boys who ask you out and then take you to a hotel. They'll undress you...

2) ...they'll climb all over you, and you'll dishonor yourself and your family."

That's true, Pamela.

The next day, I met a boy who asked me out.

3) At the movies, he groped me, and then he took me to a hotel.

4) He undressed me...but I moved faster than him.

5) I climbed on top of him, and I dishonored him and his family, instead.
 
Thanks for the translation!

MatthewVett thanks for the translation, my English is very bad, I hope I have not written something incoherent, I appreciate the help, now the work is correct:D
 
MatthewVett said:
It's good. If you want, I've editing the English, by panel.

1) My mother told me, "Pamela, be careful of the boys who ask you out and then take you to a hotel. They'll undress you...

2) ...they'll climb all over you, and you'll dishonor yourself and your family."

That's true, Pamela.

The next day, I met a boy who asked me out.

3) At the movies, he groped me, and then he took me to a hotel.

4) He undressed me...but I moved faster than him.

5) I climbed on top of him, and I dishonored him and his family, instead.
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While it's perfectly good English in this form, I think it would work better in apposition to the last panel if it were "... they'll dishonour you and your family."
 
I really love it.

I was never into the whole 'schoolgirl thing,' and still not really, but I thought this was clever as stated above. The first image caught my attention visually, and I thought the dialogue and progression was interesting. The punchline was gratifying.

I really hope you continue this. You've got a real talent.
 
Thanks!

candyredlips said:
Wonderful and clever!;):rose:
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Thanks Candyredlips, if you like it, then this good job!! :)

HeyAll said:
I really love it.

I was never into the whole 'schoolgirl thing,' and still not really, but I thought this was clever as stated above. The first image caught my attention visually, and I thought the dialogue and progression was interesting. The punchline was gratifying.

I really hope you continue this. You've got a real talent.
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Thank you very much for your comment, and thank you very much for having the patience in correcting translations!

Thanks HeyAll, Thank you very much for your comment, and thank you very much for having the patience in correcting translations!:)
 
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Thank you very much.!!

Thanks for the comments, it is a great satisfaction to me that you liked it, I hope to place many more, and thanks again, especially for the support (and patience) in the translations. :)
 
lupincomic said:
Gee, then the translation is bad?: (
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The translation is good. It's understandable and funny. It does not need to be changed.

He was suggesting slightly different wording to perfect the humor.
I agree with him.
 
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