9/14/2009 "Megan K."

[Idolo]

To my dearest friends, acquaintances, an

I recently decided to try my hand at erotic fiction.

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=439062

"Megan K." is the result.

I am interested in receiving legitimate, thought-out responses to my work.

 

[miss_claremont]

Excellent! This story actually made me cry then turned me on LOL. I think it was very realistic in terms of the male character's feelings toward Megan and reluctance on both sides until they finally admit they love each other. Your description of Megan was great - I could totally see myself in her shoes. I enjoy erotic fiction that has romance in it, and this was a great example of both. I saved it to my favorites. Can't wait to read more of your stories!

 

[York]

I found it odd the way the tenses jumped around so much, that was my main quibble. I couldn't really follow why, if he (you) fancied her so much, you were getting her off you at the first party.

There was some pretty good descriptive language at times though, so it shows promise. Would be nice to have it third person so we could get an idea of what was going on in her head as well.