daughter
Dreamer
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charm--
an intimate view. i hope not a personal experience. most readers want to experience an event not listen to an account. this poem invites the reader in. if it were mine, i think i would re-think the amount of repetition. it isn't needed. cull this to the essentials. maybe add other poignant details. provide descriptions that create even greater intimacy and allow the reader to feel what you feel.
thanks for the read.
peace,
daughter
an intimate view. i hope not a personal experience. most readers want to experience an event not listen to an account. this poem invites the reader in. if it were mine, i think i would re-think the amount of repetition. it isn't needed. cull this to the essentials. maybe add other poignant details. provide descriptions that create even greater intimacy and allow the reader to feel what you feel.
thanks for the read.
peace,
daughter
