$5.99 a minute - nude or naked

[CharleyH]

OK I am drawing and this is merely a spin but rip me apart if you like, too. I enjoy the poetic sadism, and want help anyhow.


$5.99 a minute: nude or naked

I see you trying to tease me
so I ask about you
politely in your Victoria's Secret bra
and matching lace panties.
I want you to be nude.
You want to be naked, so
why don't you undress?
I have a $50.00 credit.

Take it off, love
let me see
your wetness
when I breathe a
fantasy image into me
and a liing word to you
take it off ...

Did I say something?
Not say enough?
Does a whore want?

Take your clothes off baby.
I have fifty bucks.
Get nude and
let me ...

TAKE IT OFF
time is ticking ... let me

ask of you to please me
ask you to get me off
ask you to strip, and twirl your fingers
through the forming wet
whirlpool of
your pussy.

Let me soak you
let me ask and demand
let me tell you what I want
let me let
you
fantasize .... for fifty bucks.

Click.

Was I too femme?
Could I not spend enough for your
nudity?

Ah, work and pleasure, never mix. I have to
believe, because I still have my fifty ... and

You wanted to be naked, not nude-
lubed and not soaked.

Get off on your own.
That's what I came for
wanted to cum for.

 

[The_Fool]

Damn....I though Charley was gonna get nekkid.....

or was that nude?

or maybe naked?

bare all?

 

[WickedEve]

Damn....I though Charley was gonna get nekkid.....

or was that nude?

or maybe naked?

bare all?

I was upset that she was cutting in on my business.
Oh, wait. I haven't even read the poem yet.
By the way, my av: shocking, gross, or weird?
Now, I'll read the poem...

 

[WickedEve]

OK I am drawing and this is merely a spin but rip me apart if you like, too. I enjoy the poetic sadism, and want help anyhow.


$5.99 a minute: nude or naked

I see you trying to tease me
so I ask about you
politely in your Victoria's Secret bra
and matching lace panties.
I want you to be nude.
You want to be naked, so
why don't you undress?
I have a $50.00 credit.

Take it off, love
let me see
your wetness
when I breathe a
fantasy image into me
and a liing word to you
take it off ...

Did I say something?
Not say enough?
Does a whore want?

Take your clothes off baby.
I have fifty bucks.
Get nude and
let me ...

TAKE IT OFF
time is ticking ... let me

ask of you to please me
ask you to get me off
ask you to strip, and twirl your fingers
through the forming wet
whirlpool of
your pussy.

Let me soak you
let me ask and demand
let me tell you what I want
let me let
you
fantasize .... for fifty bucks.

Click.

Was I too femme?
Could I not spend enough for your
nudity?

Ah, work and pleasure, never mix. I have to
believe, because I still have my fifty ... and

You wanted to be naked, not nude-
lubed and not soaked.

Get off on your own.
That's what I came for
wanted to cum for.

This reminds me of one of my older poems: 60 second fuck. It's about a guy trying to get the 60 second fuck he paid for and he feels that he doesn't get his money's worth. Anyway, parts of it read the way this poem does.
I like some of this. Some good lines. I like it better after the first strophe.

 

[The_Fool]

I was upset that she was cutting in on my business.
Oh, wait. I haven't even read the poem yet.
By the way, my av: shocking, gross, or weird?
Now, I'll read the poem...

Yes....since it's not me in the AV.....

I don't think you could shock me anymore.

Of course you couldn't shock me any less either....

 

[CharleyH]

I was upset that she was cutting in on my business.
Oh, wait. I haven't even read the poem yet.
By the way, my av: shocking, gross, or weird?
Now, I'll read the poem...

There is pubic hair and no dick. Are you LOL - secretly lesbian?

PS: is not everyone shaved these days? Discussion and

 

[WickedEve]

There is pubic hair and no dick. Are you LOL - secretly lesbian?

PS: is not everyone shaved these days? Discussion and

Secretly Lesbian has good title possibilities! lol
There are balls there somewhere! Balls!
I'm looking for another av!

 

[Lauren Hynde]

OK I am drawing and this is merely a spin but rip me apart if you like, too. I enjoy the poetic sadism, and want help anyhow.


$5.99 a minute: nude or naked

Hey, it does remind me of Eve's 60 Seconds... - it has that free-flowing rap feeling of your Commercialization audio poem that I love.

The only stanza that really didn't work for me was that

Was I too femme?
Could I not spend enough for your
nudity?​

All the rest was very direct and punchy, but that section just lost me. I understand what you were thinking, but it isn't reflected on the text. There's a leap of logic.

 

[ruminator]

nice av eve.



....while it lasts.

CH- I like the impatience you showed in that. Urgency is a word I can associate with nude or naked.

...a ?

Why do the ones I get cost $7.99 a min and up? Are there coupon books available for frequent callers?

 

[WickedEve]

Hey, it does remind me of Eve's 60 Seconds... - it has that free-flowing rap feeling of your Commercialization audio poem that I love.

The only stanza that really didn't work for me was that

Was I too femme?
Could I not spend enough for your
nudity?​

All the rest was very direct and punchy, but that section just lost me. I understand what you were thinking, but it isn't reflected on the text. There's a leap of logic.

I can't believe you remember that poem!
Charley called me a secret lesbian. Please explain to her that I am excruciatingly straight.
Oh, and what I didn't love in the first stanza was the mention of V.S. It's rather cliche. Don't you think so?

 

[Lauren Hynde]

I can't believe you remember that poem!

I even remember you had a hissy fit because the title was changed to Sixty Seconds instead of 60.

Charley called me a secret lesbian. Please explain to her that I am excruciatingly straight.

Charley, Eve is excruciatingly straight.

Oh, and what I didn't love in the first stanza was the mention of V.S. It's rather cliche. Don't you think so?

I don't know. Personally, the product-placement didn't bother me, especially on a poem about the more artificial, plastic aspect of sex. For $5.99 a minute, she better be wearing something recognizably nice. Or naughty.

 

[My Erotic Tale]

me and my moon <grin>

 

[CharleyH]

This reminds me of one of my older poems: 60 second fuck. It's about a guy trying to get the 60 second fuck he paid for and he feels that he doesn't get his money's worth. Anyway, parts of it read the way this poem does.
I like some of this. Some good lines. I like it better after the first strophe.

Its about a 60 second fuck that is paid for and never happens LOL. Right on tell me more

 

[CharleyH]

Secretly Lesbian has good title possibilities! lol
There are balls there somewhere! Balls!
I'm looking for another av!

Want me to find you some?

 

[CharleyH]

Hey, it does remind me of Eve's 60 Seconds... - it has that free-flowing rap feeling of your Commercialization audio poem that I love.

The only stanza that really didn't work for me was that

Was I too femme?
Could I not spend enough for your
nudity?​

All the rest was very direct and punchy, but that section just lost me. I understand what you were thinking, but it isn't reflected on the text. There's a leap of logic.

Why?

 

[CharleyH]

me and my moon <grin>

Ass is good EroticT

 

[WickedEve]

Want me to find you some?

He's hung like a buffalo. I swear, he is! Sigh... the pic is almost 2 years ago and... I'm sure I found the balls at some point. Maybe that's not him.

 

[Lauren Hynde]

Why?

I don't know. Maybe it was just an awkward way of saying "was I not your type?" or "was my money not good enough for you?"

 

[WickedEve]

I even remember you had a hissy fit because the title was changed to Sixty Seconds instead of 60.


Charley, Eve is excruciatingly straight.


I don't know. Personally, the product-placement didn't bother me, especially on a poem about the more artificial, plastic aspect of sex. For $5.99 a minute, she better be wearing something recognizably nice. Or naughty.

You even remember the hissy fit and title change!!!??? To be young and have a good memory again. What were we talking about?

 

[CharleyH]

He's hung like a buffalo. I swear, he is! Sigh... the pic is almost 2 years ago and... I'm sure I found the balls at some point. Maybe that's not him.

ROFLOL!!!! I - lol - wish I has an emote for that ROFL

 

[WickedEve]

I even remember you had a hissy fit because the title was changed to Sixty Seconds instead of 60.


Charley, Eve is excruciatingly straight.


I don't know. Personally, the product-placement didn't bother me, especially on a poem about the more artificial, plastic aspect of sex. For $5.99 a minute, she better be wearing something recognizably nice. Or naughty.

I think it was the choice of V.S. Everyone mentions V.S. Why not a walmart bra? Okay, never mind.

 

[The_Fool]

Okay Charlie, I'm working on it. My first thought is that this is too high class. When you enter these sights, the idea is for them to taunt you into spending money on them rather that the next girl, guy or couple. Go over to the web cam sight and check out what the girls are wearing there. There may be some VS undies, but I think you find more outrageous apparel that that to be the norm.

Instead of you chatting them up, they are chatting you up. They are trying to get you to spend money on them. Once the clock starts, that is when they are going to want to linger, to make you spend more money. But they are going to bare it, fairly quickly, to keep you interested. It's everything else that takes longer.....

Might be interesting to see one written one from the other side of the screen.

Guys are scum.....

 

[CharleyH]

I don't know. Maybe it was just an awkward way of saying "was I not your type?" or "was my money not good enough for you?"

Well, pehaps I can seduce you for free then? Since Eve, and the Fool are offering only laughter

 

[Lauren Hynde]

Seducing me for free can turn out to be quite expensive.

 

[WickedEve]

Well, pehaps I can seduce you for free then? Since Eve, and the Fool are offering only laughter

Hey, if I can't find those missing balls, then I'm all yours.