SEVERUSMAX
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rgraham666 said:Just your hands?
You got a point there....
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You got a point there....
SweetWitch
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Dire Straits, Chapter 13
So stop fucking reading it, you narcissistic asswipe! What? You think I’m writing this for you? Just reach right out there and grab a life, will ya?
Just for future reference, because you seem to be a bit thick-headed, it’s called “story development.” Can you say “story development?” No, probably not. You’re too busy diddling yourself.
Do me a favor. Go away. If you’re going to hang around insulting the hard work of the writers here and blasting the scores, the least you can do is pay us. No? You don’t want to pay? Fuck you, go away.
So stop fucking reading it, you narcissistic asswipe! What? You think I’m writing this for you? Just reach right out there and grab a life, will ya?
Just for future reference, because you seem to be a bit thick-headed, it’s called “story development.” Can you say “story development?” No, probably not. You’re too busy diddling yourself.
Do me a favor. Go away. If you’re going to hang around insulting the hard work of the writers here and blasting the scores, the least you can do is pay us. No? You don’t want to pay? Fuck you, go away.
RedHairedandFriendly
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This feedback was sent by: XXXXX
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Mom of 3 kids???? So you have to fuck some dogs from streets to be
impregnate...cos i doubet that a man will touch such a sick minded whore.
Have you ever try suicide??? and your 3 bastards kill also???? Just give
a try and let us know how you succed...will be good if your slut mother
will email about your death, anyway nothing to loose...the planet is
full of filthy cunts and idiot whores
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Anon. . .
I have to assume you read Trust in Fate, with a Bit of Help again, since this email almost mirrors the other. It's been a long time since you felt the need to rant at me. Almost, but not quite a year! I hope next year around this time, I'm available to council you. Obviously you still have issues with this story.
Perhaps we should sit down together and work those out. You did leave me your email.
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Fantastic!!! Loved this story (Witnessing)....I've never left feedback
before, but had to for this one.
Thanks for the story!
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Anon. . .
Will you ever know how cool it was to open your email after reading the one dickhead sent me. 
Thanks! I am glad you enjoyed that story.
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Mom of 3 kids???? So you have to fuck some dogs from streets to be
impregnate...cos i doubet that a man will touch such a sick minded whore.
Have you ever try suicide??? and your 3 bastards kill also???? Just give
a try and let us know how you succed...will be good if your slut mother
will email about your death, anyway nothing to loose...the planet is
full of filthy cunts and idiot whores
------------
Anon. . .
I have to assume you read Trust in Fate, with a Bit of Help again, since this email almost mirrors the other. It's been a long time since you felt the need to rant at me. Almost, but not quite a year!
I hope next year around this time, I'm available to council you. Obviously you still have issues with this story. Perhaps we should sit down together and work those out. You did leave me your email.
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Fantastic!!! Loved this story (Witnessing)....I've never left feedback
before, but had to for this one.
Thanks for the story!
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Anon. . .
Will you ever know how cool it was to open your email after reading the one dickhead sent me.
Thanks! I am glad you enjoyed that story.
SweetWitch
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Dire Straits, Chapter 14
I might've told you, but you didn't leave an email address. Thanks for writing.
SW
I might've told you, but you didn't leave an email address. Thanks for writing.
SW
Boxlicker101
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This was a PC on "Mother's Milk".
Gross Use of Skim
03/10/07 By: Anonymous in USA
uge and double yuck
It wasn't skim milk, you asshole. It was whole milk, straight from the source.
Gross Use of Skim
03/10/07 By: Anonymous in USA
uge and double yuck
It wasn't skim milk, you asshole. It was whole milk, straight from the source.
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The following was a comment about my Reluctant Psychic series (comment from Chapter 6).
Thanks Anonymous. It is comments like this that make me keep writing. I think a bit off a bit more than I can chew though, since each girl is demanding her own story, and what kind of a man would I be if I didn't satisfy the girl?
Thanks Anonymous. It is comments like this that make me keep writing. I think a bit off a bit more than I can chew though, since each girl is demanding her own story, and what kind of a man would I be if I didn't satisfy the girl?
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Two chapters are waiting in queue. Thank you.
Actually, nine, but who's counting?
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Jenny_Jackson
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This was posted to my Earth Day story
Thank you
That being your reaction, then the story is a great success, regardless of how it ends up in the contest.
Thank you
That being your reaction, then the story is a great success, regardless of how it ends up in the contest.
SweetWitch
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I would be very interesting in discussing this with you. If you feel up to it, please feel free to contact me.
SW
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Quote:
Characters and Plot in Dire Straits
04/03/07 By: Anonymous
I came upon your work because every submission you have made to this site is rated as "hot". After reading a number of submissions, including a number of Dire Straits chapters, here's my feedback. You are a prolific writer, with great potential, good vocabulary, and a loyal fan club, but in my opinion this extended work requires improvement in both character development (why are these people doing the things they are doing) and plot development (is it realistic or probable that these people are doing the things they are doing)? Yes, I did read below that critique (however friendly) is not welcome, and you obviously have a strong community who have consistently placed you in the "hot" zone on this site. But they can't get you on a best-seller list, no matter how fervent their support here. Listening to criticism and acting on it might. Best of luck!
It always bugs me and amuses me when somebody asks me about the motivation of the people in my stories. Well, they wanna fuck and suck and eat pussy, coz it's fun.
Characters and Plot in Dire Straits
04/03/07 By: Anonymous
I came upon your work because every submission you have made to this site is rated as "hot". After reading a number of submissions, including a number of Dire Straits chapters, here's my feedback. You are a prolific writer, with great potential, good vocabulary, and a loyal fan club, but in my opinion this extended work requires improvement in both character development (why are these people doing the things they are doing) and plot development (is it realistic or probable that these people are doing the things they are doing)? Yes, I did read below that critique (however friendly) is not welcome, and you obviously have a strong community who have consistently placed you in the "hot" zone on this site. But they can't get you on a best-seller list, no matter how fervent their support here. Listening to criticism and acting on it might. Best of luck!
SweetWitch said:
It always bugs me and amuses me when somebody asks me about the motivation of the people in my stories. Well, they wanna fuck and suck and eat pussy, coz it's fun.
SweetWitch
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Boxlicker101 said:Quote:
Characters and Plot in Dire Straits
It always bugs me and amuses me when somebody asks me about the motivation of the people in my stories. Well, they wanna fuck and suck and eat pussy, coz it's fun.
I was just curious as to whether this guy/gal had bothered to read the ENTIRE story. The characters are very well-fleshed out--according to the army of editors I now have, my agent and one little movie producer. I would like to know where he/she got that from. If the person doesn't believe that it's probable these people would act this way, he's never been on a midwestern farm... LOL
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Dear Anonymous Jackass;
I know this might be hard for you to believe, but not everyone who writes for this website is American, so in fact I DO know how to spell.
in Canada it's:
honour, not honor
neighbour, not neighbor
and yes, I am fully aware that there is such a thing as ESPN, but up here in the Great White North, when we're not rebuilding our igloos and racing our dogsledding teams through fifty feet of snow while fighting off polar bears, we watch TSN for our sports highlights.
I'm not a complete idiot - just Canadian.
I know this might be hard for you to believe, but not everyone who writes for this website is American, so in fact I DO know how to spell.
in Canada it's:
honour, not honor
neighbour, not neighbor
and yes, I am fully aware that there is such a thing as ESPN, but up here in the Great White North, when we're not rebuilding our igloos and racing our dogsledding teams through fifty feet of snow while fighting off polar bears, we watch TSN for our sports highlights.
I'm not a complete idiot - just Canadian.
Boxlicker101
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Originally Posted by firstkiss
Dear Anonymous Jackass;
I know this might be hard for you to believe, but not everyone who writes for this website is American, so in fact I DO know how to spell.
in Canada it's:
honour, not honor
neighbour, not neighbor
and yes, I am fully aware that there is such a thing as ESPN, but up here in the Great White North, when we're not rebuilding our igloos and racing our dogsledding teams through fifty feet of snow while fighting off polar bears, we watch TSN for our sports highlights.
I'm not a complete idiot - just Canadian.
You should probably leave out the penguins. Even ignorant jackass might know they are just found in the southern hemisphere.
Dear Anonymous Jackass;
I know this might be hard for you to believe, but not everyone who writes for this website is American, so in fact I DO know how to spell.
in Canada it's:
honour, not honor
neighbour, not neighbor
and yes, I am fully aware that there is such a thing as ESPN, but up here in the Great White North, when we're not rebuilding our igloos and racing our dogsledding teams through fifty feet of snow while fighting off polar bears, we watch TSN for our sports highlights.
I'm not a complete idiot - just Canadian.
cloudy said:you forgot the penquins.
You should probably leave out the penguins. Even ignorant jackass might know they are just found in the southern hemisphere.
SweetWitch
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Umm.....
Jenny_Jackson
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Sound advice, SW. Especially coming from that moronSweetWitch said:Umm.....
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Jenny_Jackson said:Sound advice, SW. Especially coming from that moron
Jenny! I've missed you.
I'm working on it. Trying to sell a story right now--and getting some interesting nibbles.
RedHairedandFriendly
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i would luv to suck your juicy pussy and i bet your pussy jiice would
be sweeter than premium wine.after u cum innumerable times,i would fuck
your cunt till ur exhausted and ur cunt is sore.i hope ur husbnd likes
to watch tje entire scenario.
Um. . . No thank you.
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i would luv to suck your juicy pussy and i bet your pussy jiice would
be sweeter than premium wine.after u cum innumerable times,i would fuck
your cunt till ur exhausted and ur cunt is sore.i hope ur husbnd likes
to watch tje entire scenario.
Um. . . No thank you.
Isn't the world just a lovely place sometimes? I just got this little ditty...
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In your biography, under "Interested In:", you should have said you were
interested in big, black assed dicks in your mouth, ass, and oversized cunt! It
is disgusting and insulting when white women crave Nigger dicks! What a waste of
talent.
This is coming from a person who made a concious decision to select a story in the interracial catagory. I never claimed to be a genius, but does the above comment strike anyone else as being more than slightly retarded? Then again, it would probably be an insult to lump this guy in with the mentally challenged.
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In your biography, under "Interested In:", you should have said you were
interested in big, black assed dicks in your mouth, ass, and oversized cunt! It
is disgusting and insulting when white women crave Nigger dicks! What a waste of
talent.
This is coming from a person who made a concious decision to select a story in the interracial catagory. I never claimed to be a genius, but does the above comment strike anyone else as being more than slightly retarded? Then again, it would probably be an insult to lump this guy in with the mentally challenged.
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ROFLMAO... Welcome to the club, LM. For some odd reason there are readers who haunt that catagory just to slam the author. And it's not just the interacial catagory this happens in either.LonelyMom said:
SweetWitch
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LonelyMom said:
Mom, like Jenny points out, the world is full of hate-mongers. Not a lot you can do about it. Hatred is born of ignorance and that's a disease that there just seems to be no cure for. Don't let the biggot get you down.
CeriseNoire
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Regarding this comment along with a 50 on the thermometer.
Dear Anonymous,
Kindly open a dictionary and look up the term "vignette". That is after all how the author's not characterized the piece.
Sincerely,
Cerise
Dear Anonymous,
Kindly open a dictionary and look up the term "vignette". That is after all how the author's not characterized the piece.
Sincerely,
Cerise
Jenny_Jackson
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Thank you, my friend.
