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About the submission: How to Survive in a Foreign Country
This feedback was sent by: Anonymous

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What does this have to do with sex????????????????????????????????????????????????????
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Absolutely nothing. Have a nice day, dipshit. :D
 
americans abroad
05/17/06 By: Anonymous in ECOSSE
bet advice for all americans going abroad
STAY AT HOME
ESPECIALLY ALL MEMBERS OF THE MILITERY
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This is just too easy... :D
 
I like your stories. I read just one, but I like them.
I enjoy writing but am weak with it just yet. It's been a while for me.

_________________________________________________

I say to that person that I will help them write. I do a decent job at editing, but I'm better at mentoring, aka spurring ideas or helping to rewrite manuscripts.

I seriously doubt that specific anonymous person will see this. A few writers have taken me up on the offer and been surprised and been most thankful by the increased quality of their work. I extend this offer to all those out there, for as long as I can. If you're a skilled writer, seek the best editors like kbate, LadyC, etc. (there are many, I only say their names because they are the most familiar to me and could certainly direct you to another equally qualified editor).

And I secretly LOVE them both <pulsating heart symbol>

I'm an adult educator with much patience and considerable natural writing ability. Don't be too pissed off, I'm the one with the small **** and I'd probably trade what I have for another two inches. Nature compensates and we all learn to deal with it. But I would like to share what nature has given me with those who struggle with the will to write and aren't satisfied with what appears.

First come, first served. Queue please.

My plate's not full, jump quick.

WINK to CBelle.
 
Dear Anonymous who abbreviated his name with the letter A.

I don't know if you are actually reading my work or not because if you did, you might actually look at my name and realize that I am not a dude.
 
OUCH :rolleyes:

Bullshit
01/09/06 by Anonymous in USofA
Fuck you. You are a piss-poor excuse for a writer and you must be a sick motherfucker. Now then, did you enjoy this anonymous comment? Before I forget, fuck you.
 
neonlyte said:
I've resurrected the Thread - it will be needed for the Free Speech Contest


What a Bigot you are Neonlyte
05/17/05 By: Anonymous in Uk
I think that your story describes yourself perfectly as the bigot you are, none of the people that I know who went to the Falklands was anything like the person you described. I do know a lot of bigots like you though, who think that only the artistic have anything to say and everyone else is wrong, a philistine, an idiot.
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I spent 22 years in the army, including a visit 'down south'. In my experience there were people like that down there. In any 'group' of thousands, there has to be a percentage of arseholes.
 
Favourite troll comment. For Librarian

Crap...
04/10/06 By: Anonymous in Usa
Fukin gpiece of mediocre crap, no one knows how to write good erotic stories anymore, thaT was just sex... it needs more. your hero was pathetic and the way he treated the librarian was terrible.
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Favourite positive comment. For Abyss

Unbelieveable!
10/03/05 By: Anonymous in USA-Missouri
Excellent story! Ok, I know it's a porn site, but this read like a great horror novel. Well thought out plot, flowed nicely, enough sex to keep it erotic. This was incredible. Thanks for writing it.
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Favourite WTF comment. For Buzz Me

I've enjoyed all your previous stories, but regrettably, this was an exception. The story was well-written and I know that there will be many who think the story is fabulous; I would have, too, except that there were elements in the tale that bothered me. Yes, I realize that this is fiction - just a story - but even so, those elements nagged enough to detract.

At the beginning, I liked how you painted the relationship as one of mutual trust and regard between equals, rather than dominance (as in far too many of the stories on this site), but after reading further, it I felt that the story would have held together better if it *had* been one in which she was submissive to him, because then I her reactions would have made more sense to me.

The main problem that I had in reading the story was that I thought it was disrespectful of him to do something to do something that could severely and negatively affect her job and/or her standing at her workplace. For him to jeopardize a reputation and esteem that had taken years to build up just for a tease is very irresponsible of him, and if I were in her place, I'd be furious at him. You touched on this reaction briefly, but then took it in another direction; for me, that just didn't ring true.

I would, in fact, be angry enough that in her place, I'd find a way out of the situation without breaking my promise. There were several ways that she could have done that. Since the promise to "keep this here" left a lot to interpretation, she could have interpreted it to keep it in that specific part of those specific pair of panties, both of which would, of course, go into the plastic bag.

Even if the promise to "keep this here" was specified as against that specific part of her body, she could also have placed some padding between the device and her body.

Implied in the promise was that she'd obviously have to remove it for short periods of time, to use the toilet, for example. In those periods, she could have simply removed the battery from the phone, submerged in in water to short out the electronics, or even smashed it against the floor, then replaced an inoperable device into position.

I realize that taking this approach would result in no story, but as I said, it bothers me that he would jeopardize her career for this; if he had had the consideration to make sure to buzz her only when he knew that she was not at risk of damaging her career (some method of surveillance, or an accomplice at work, perhaps), I'd have felt better about it.

Alternatively, if you had established, at the beginning of the story, a leaning toward humiliation or submission in her personality, it might have worked, but as it was, her reaction, as a supposed equal in the relationship, just didn't ring true and so the story didn't work for me.
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At what point in time did the modern workplace start resembling 1984?
 
rgraham666 said:
At what point in time did the modern workplace start resembling 1984?
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Jesus, that reminded me of those feminists who got pissed off at Fatal Attraction because it supposedly said that "all career women" were nuts. :rolleyes:
 
Aurora Black said:
Jesus, that reminded me of those feminists who got pissed off at Fatal Attraction because it supposedly said that "all career women" were nuts. :rolleyes:
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I know. I suspect that commenter was one of two things.

1. A lawyer, judging from the way they went looking for loopholes.

2. Their ego is entirely wrapped up in their career. I shudder to think what will happen if they ever lose their job. On the other hand, they're probably such a fine courtier there's little chance of that happening.
 
Here is a nice, well-written on my entry in the recent Winter Holiday Contest:

fucking no good piece of writing
12/02/05 By: Anonymous in india
hey u fucking ass this piece of writinf is a piece of shit y dont u go and let santa clause go fuck u and suckur little dick that cant even satisfy a baby ,people might even think ur a woman with a tight pussy .fucking no god slut face cock sucking ass like u .

I wonder how this guy knows so much about me.
 
Dear Anonymous,

In my story, "My Danish Daughter", I was being cautious for a reason. The father doesn't really want to knock her up, at least not yet. For one thing, incest is illegal and a lawyer would know that impregnating his own daughter would be waving a sign saying "I broke the law". For another, she is only 18 and he wants her to go to college. He has nothing against sex. He is a lecher, after all. He just wants his daughter to have the best life possible.

If he does cave in and do her before she completes her first year (or before she gets knocked by another guy, which he really hopes that she doesn't resort to), he will probably insist on protection of some sort. It's a contest of wills, complicated by the fact that he is only half-hearted in his position. This puts him at a disadvantage, since he isn't opposed to incest so much as knocking up his own daughter.

You can probably guess how successful he is (or isn't) in the battle to keep from taking that risk. But he isn't giving up without a fight. Think about it, and you'll see why I have written it the way that I did. Plus, it adds to the suspense, don't you think?
 
Oooooh! I HATE ANONYMOUS!!!

FUCKING ARSEHOLE!!!!!

Shove a stick up your nose and fall on it you TWIT!!! What the hell is WITH you!!!! GAH!!!!!

Okay... screaming on hold... ARSEHOLE Anonymous just ripped my only 'H' story with a 1 vote. *kicks something* I understand the right to vote as you please... but a 1? WTF??? If you're going to give me a 1 vote, at least tell me why, other than "What a depressing story."

You DUMBFUCK! It's a VAMPIRE story! The first line is "She was perfect death in black leather and lace.." what clued you in first? It's called a BACKCLICK!!!!! *grumblescussgrowl*

I think everyone at some point read part of A Far Cry From Heaven, it was part of the Cardinal Sins challenge... was it really that freaking bad? GAH!!

I'm going on an Anonymous hunt... I want to rip his little pin head right off his weaselly little shoulders. grrr.....
 
FallingToFly said:
I'm going on an Anonymous hunt... I want to rip his little pin head right off his weaselly little shoulders. grrr.....
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You'll have to wait in line for that pleasure. Care for a pirate sword? It's fun to mentally stab them with it. ;)
 
Aurora Black said:
You'll have to wait in line for that pleasure. Care for a pirate sword? It's fun to mentally stab them with it. ;)
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Thanks... I have a chain whip I'm planning on flaying him with. *goes to find her boots*
 
I'm thinking I should get a chain sword a la "Brotherhood of the Wolf." First I'll skewer them, and then the sword will break up, slicing and dicing them that way.

Trolls: Mercy! Mercy, Captain Rorrie...

Me: Fuck you! *slash*

:devil:
 
Aurora Black said:
I'm thinking I should get a chain sword a la "Brotherhood of the Wolf." First I'll skewer them, and then the sword will break up, slicing and dicing them that way.

Trolls: Mercy! Mercy, Captain Rorrie...

Me: Fuck you! *slash*

:devil:
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Oh oh oh!!! SOUL CALIBER!!!

Ivy's sword, Voldo's claws... my dancer's tambourines. OY!! I can do major damage with those... Oh... oh.. I feel a fluffy evil cannibalistic plot bunny coming on... I shall rape and maim and torture the Trolls and give it as asacrifice to the Erotic Horror Category.
 
FallingToFly said:
Oh oh oh!!! SOUL CALIBER!!!

Ivy's sword, Voldo's claws... my dancer's tambourines. OY!! I can do major damage with those... Oh... oh.. I feel a fluffy evil cannibalistic plot bunny coming on... I shall rape and maim and torture the Trolls and give it as asacrifice to the Erotic Horror Category.
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I :heart: Ivy.

That's the spirit. ;)
 
Boxlicker101 said:
Here is a nice, well-written on my entry in the recent Winter Holiday Contest:

fucking no good piece of writing
12/02/05 By: Anonymous in india
hey u fucking ass this piece of writinf is a piece of shit y dont u go and let santa clause go fuck u and suckur little dick that cant even satisfy a baby ,people might even think ur a woman with a tight pussy .fucking no god slut face cock sucking ass like u .

I wonder how this guy knows so much about me.
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Damn Box, sorry I meant to sign that .... :p
 
FallingToFly said:
*dying laughing*

Damn, I know I'm flat chested, but really now!!!
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Sweetie, I, with the name damp panties, was once asked if I was male or female.

But I can understand that. There are so many incontinent crossdresssers around that I really shouldn't blame anybody for misunderstanding. :rolleyes:
 
damppanties said:
Sweetie, I, with the name damp panties, was once asked if I was male or female.

But I can understand that. There are so many incontinent crossdresssers around that I really shouldn't blame anybody for misunderstanding. :rolleyes:
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Man, I hate that... I pick up a nice, sweet switch player... and they turn out to have no bladder control. You'd think they'd never seen battery cables and a saddle before....
 
FallingToFly said:
FUCKING ARSEHOLE!!!!!

Shove a stick up your nose and fall on it you TWIT!!! What the hell is WITH you!!!! GAH!!!!!

Okay... screaming on hold... ARSEHOLE Anonymous just ripped my only 'H' story with a 1 vote. *kicks something* I understand the right to vote as you please... but a 1? WTF??? If you're going to give me a 1 vote, at least tell me why, other than "What a depressing story."

You DUMBFUCK! It's a VAMPIRE story! The first line is "She was perfect death in black leather and lace.." what clued you in first? It's called a BACKCLICK!!!!! *grumblescussgrowl*

I think everyone at some point read part of A Far Cry From Heaven, it was part of the Cardinal Sins challenge... was it really that freaking bad? GAH!!

I'm going on an Anonymous hunt... I want to rip his little pin head right off his weaselly little shoulders. grrr.....
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and breathe..................................... now caaaaaaaaaaalm. :)

all this anger? deep breaths....... :)
 
geronimo_appleby said:
and breathe..................................... now caaaaaaaaaaalm. :)

all this anger? deep breaths....... :)
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Yeah, well, I worked hard for my one and only H... not to mention it's the only NonCelebrity story I have up, thereby being my only worthwhile contribution to Lit....

*deep breath* Grrr... yes, it pissed me right off.
 
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