Fantasy prison story feedback request

[rebelxcarpenter]

Hey there, first time posting on the forums so be gentle
I've been posting stories since Sept 2022 and gotten some great feedback. One of my story threads is about a kinkster visiting a fantasy prison who gets an immersive hard bondage experience. I've just written a chapter that is super intense and I'm hesitant to post it because of the theme.
I love writing for so many reasons, but the non-con and prison/justice themed stories are me working out my fears and exploring darker themes. One of my greatest fears is getting offed by the government in the sparky chair. This would be part three of the Colony series on my author's page.
This chapter is two female characters who explore that dark sparky chair fantasy. Nothing bad happens for real, and at every point the dom gets consent from the sub. I realize how badly this sort of story could be taken, I just want some general feedback before I submit. I'd hate to have it taken down or my profile to get deleted.
I'd love some more detailed feedback too if someone wants to read the chapter.

 

[countdowntolov3]

I'd be happy to beta read for you. These sound like themes I am interested in.

Can you be a little more specific on the kind of feedback you're looking for? Are you looking for an editing pass, analysis, or just focused on the "is it too extreme?" question?

 

[AwkwardlySet]

An advice for both of you. Click on your forum profile and click on signature. Then paste your author's page there(not your control panel, but the author's page the way readers see it) and save. That way, the link to your stories will be displayed below every post you make, and everyone will be able to go to your stories with one click, rather than searching for them

 

[ElectricBlue]

it's more the 'two extreme' issue, but any feedback is helpful.
I put the PDF in a file sharing site here:
https://we.tl/t-yqVJEhVDNC

You should remove that link - it's unapproved content with a link coming from Literotica - that's contrary to Lit policy.

 

[rebelxcarpenter]

You should remove that link - it's unapproved content with a link coming from Literotica - that's contrary to Lit policy.

Done sorry