My first stories!

[lilbit_kittykat011]

Hi everyone!
My name is Katrina but everyone calls me Kat for short. I have been on this site since I was a teenager. Starting reading then first the joined the board at the age of 18 back in 2008! So been on and off since then. Just recently I finally wrote my first stories and currently on a streak for more chapters.

My story is about the Duchess of Cornwall Camillia. Now I know her past and what not. This is non political and it’s only a fantasy. It starts off slow and it’s gaining momentum. I want to give the readers a tease and a thrill.

I have the links in my signature and feel free to comment and give feedback. I have always love to write and this is where I can write and not get judge.

Thanks y’all for reading! Happy Holidays!!!

 

[Rustyoznail]

Welcome , and well done on your stories.

Sit back, relax with a cup of your favourite hot beverage, and soak up the atmosphere.

Cheers

 

[litfan10]

Congrats and welcome! Have fun, ignore the trolls and enjoy yourself!

 

[Handley_Page]

Hi everyone!
My name is Katrina but everyone calls me Kat for short. I have been on this site since I was a teenager. Starting reading then first the joined the board at the age of 18 back in 2008! So been on and off since then. Just recently I finally wrote my first stories and currently on a streak for more chapters.

My story is about the Duchess of Cornwall Camillia. Now I know her past and what not. This is non political and it’s only a fantasy. It starts off slow and it’s gaining momentum. I want to give the readers a tease and a thrill.

I have the links in my signature and feel free to comment and give feedback. I have always love to write and this is where I can write and not get judge.

Thanks y’all for reading! Happy Holidays!!!

I think that using a real, live person [such as Camilla] is very unwise.
A different name, perhaps, or a mythical location, but not the real thing.
The legal wrangle could be huge.

Would you do it for, say, the relative/s of your President ??

 

[Emirus]

I think that using a real, live person [such as Camilla] is very unwise.
A different name, perhaps, or a mythical location, but not the real thing.
The legal wrangle could be huge.

Would you do it for, say, the relative/s of your President ??

I have to agree with Handley Page about your choice of subject matter and his asking if you would write the same story about members of your President’s family? I haven’t read any of the three chapters you’ve submitted so far so I don’t know the storyline but the title seems to give an indication.

Harvey Krein is Biden’s son-in-law. Would you write a story in a similar vein about him? How about a British writer, like myself, writing a story titled “Harvey Krein Seducing.”

The ratings for your stories are low. Could that be because of the writing or the subject matter? Not all readers on this site are American and maybe the British ones aren’t very keen on giving 4’s?

 

[lovecraft68]

I have to agree with Handley Page about your choice of subject matter and his asking if you would write the same story about members of your President’s family? I haven’t read any of the three chapters you’ve submitted so far so I don’t know the storyline but the title seems to give an indication.

Harvey Krein is Biden’s son-in-law. Would you write a story in a similar vein about him? How about a British writer, like myself, writing a story titled “Harvey Krein Seducing.”

The ratings for your stories are low. Could that be because of the writing or the subject matter? Not all readers on this site are American and maybe the British ones aren’t very keen on giving 4’s?

Been on the internet? People say far worse things about The President, their family, and all politicians than you'll find in an erotic story, and this is on a minute by minute basis.

And all very much deserved I'll add.

As for the "Royals?" starting with the Queen they're nothing short of a pile of wealthy crooked murderous filth. Good for Megan for escaping royal sex trafficking and slavery and her husband for running with her.

Fact is, we have it backwards, these people deserve the least respect in our current world.

Notice you didn't use Hunter Biden as an example.

Fate took the wrong Biden brother, that's for damn sure.

 

[lilbit_kittykat011]

Hi everyone!

Thank all so much for the feedback! I am actually really happy I am using her name and there is a celebrity fan fiction section. I have looked into it and people have used actual real names. I understand where most of you are coming from and thank you so much for the feedback. And for the presidents the only one I would truly write about is Jill Biden. Why? Because she is beautiful and plus how she carries herself and also she’s also a school teacher on top of being a First Lady. How cool! But that’s at a later time. This one I know how people feel about her and stuff and I completely understand but this is all fantasy.

 

[Emirus]

Been on the internet? People say far worse things about The President, their family, and all politicians than you'll find in an erotic story, and this is on a minute by minute basis.

And all very much deserved I'll add.

As for the "Royals?" starting with the Queen they're nothing short of a pile of wealthy crooked murderous filth. Good for Megan for escaping royal sex trafficking and slavery and her husband for running with her.

Fact is, we have it backwards, these people deserve the least respect in our current world.

Notice you didn't use Hunter Biden as an example.

Fate took the wrong Biden brother, that's for damn sure.

I have, as you know, great respect for you as a writer of fiction but your comments on this subject are laughable. I’m sure you’ve only made your comments to stir the shit but I’ll respond as if you were serious.

I’ll gladly add the name of Hunter Biden. Camilla is the daughter-in-law of Her Majesty the Queen (not her High Majesty ) so, if it was a story about the Biden family it would be about Krein or Melissa Biden, or both. But if such a story had been written about the Biden family by a British writer no matter how bad they might be they wouldn’t be able to match this crap.

As for Meghan (note I’ve spelled her name correctly) Markle she’s shown she’s a narcissistic control freak. There’s no doubt Harry is submissive. One only has to look at the farce of the Oprah Winfrey set up. There’s also no doubt that at some time, when she considers she’s financially secure for the rest of her life, she’ll get rid of Harry and find herself a wealthy American submissive.

As for the Oprah interview, every word of which was believed by many Americans, so many of her statements and allegations have since been proved to be lies. None of which will have been acknowledged by the American media.

Finally:

“As for the "Royals?" starting with the Queen they're nothing short of a pile of wealthy crooked murderous filth. Good for Megan for escaping royal sex trafficking and slavery and her husband for running with her.”

I eagerly await your story woven around this statement. One thing about it, whether I agree with it or not, is that it will be better researched, better edited, better grammar, better punctuation and written far better than anything the delusional lilbit_kittykat011 will be able to produce no matter how long her “writing ” career lasts. Maybe she’s a good writer who’s written this rubbish to see what the response would be and be able to laugh about all the gullible readers and their remarks.

 

[Emirus]

I’m thinking I should write a story about Camilla having an affair with an American girl who comes to work at Buckingham Palace to show how it should be done.

 

[KeithD]

I would (and sometimes do) write to "type" of current notable person, but the only ones I've included by name in stories are ones no longer with us and known/revealed to have acted within the bounds of what I'm writing about them (e.g., Rock Hudson, Gore Vidal, and, most recently, Tennessee Williams). I most definitely would not include Camilla by name and the personality I observe in a story.

 

[Handley_Page]

Been on the internet? People say far worse things about The President, their family, and all politicians than you'll find in an erotic story, and this is on a minute by minute basis.

And all very much deserved I'll add.

As for the "Royals?" starting with the Queen they're nothing short of a pile of wealthy crooked murderous filth. Good for Megan for escaping royal sex trafficking and slavery and her husband for running with her.
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1] "Been on the internet?"
Well anyone armed with the right kit can access it, but you'd have to look Very Closely and in some really obscure corners to find a 'short story'.
I look forward to reading a story based round the POTUS family.

2] "As for the "Royals?" starting with the Queen they're nothing short of a pile of wealthy crooked murderous filth."

What the 'eck would you know about our Royal Family (unless you've read some of the more salacious cr@p in some of the less reliable papers).
And the Queen (God Bless 'er) pays her taxes.

So please, just shut it. You are a very competent Author. I recommend you stick with it.

 

[lilbit_kittykat011]

Thank you all for the feedback! I know it’s not the greatest or the best but I’m trying and it’s my first story series. In grade school I was really never good at English. Never really got it. But I guess I’m writing on how I say things. I know it’s not right but when I read it I think it sounds really good. No not the best writing but at least I’m trying.

About Camilla it’s not that I’m writing about how the England is or how the Queen is. My story is just fictional and yes I use her because when I see pictures of her or video I see a mistress side so I’m taking that and putting my own spin on it. Yes the Queen or the High Majesty is not correct on how it is so it’s just a fan fictional.

I know a lot of you are going to either love or hate it and I completely understand that and I know I got to work on my English but I am going to try to get there.

I don’t know how long of a series I’m going to take this but I have other stories in my head that I am going to write and actually one of them is going to have 2 names in them. So just bare with me and enjoy the story.

 

[Athalia]

Hi everyone!

And for the presidents the only one I would truly write about is Jill Biden. Why? Because she is beautiful and plus how she carries herself and also she’s also a school teacher on top of being a First Lady. How cool!

I think I would write my story about Melania Trump. Now there's a subject with a riverful of sexual undercurrents! Is she a master seductress or a Little Girl Lost? Or maybe both? Is she even capable of an orgasm? If she doesn't give a fuck about Christmas, what does she give a fuck about?

As for incorporating real people into a fictional setting, the rules are less strict if it's historical. (Historical fiction is a genre all its own.) And you can play pretty fast and loose. In the movie "Wonder Woman," one of the baddies was a German general named Erich Ludendorff, who oversaw the "mad scientist" division of the army, and who was killed by Wonder Woman as he was on the verge of launching a devastating poison gas attack on England. I was surprised to find in a book on the history of World War I that there really was an Erich Ludendorff who, according to Wikipedia, "... became the architect of Germany's entire military strategy and war effort until the end of the conflict." I doubt if the heirs of Ludendorff had much reason to complain, since the character in the film had so many fictional elements (and the real Ludendorff lived until 1937, having done much to bring Hitler to power).

 

[water_moutina]

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But I guess I’m writing on how I say things. I know it’s not right but when I read it I think it sounds really good. No not the best writing but at least I’m trying.
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I like these lines. You're amazing

I haven't read your stories yet, but I will soon
Hope you get lots of views and reader interactions

 

[JGittes]

I think I would write my story about Melania Trump. Now there's a subject with a riverful of sexual undercurrents! Is she a master seductress or a Little Girl Lost? Or maybe both? Is she even capable of an orgasm? If she doesn't give a fuck about Christmas, what does she give a fuck about?

As for incorporating real people into a fictional setting, the rules are less strict if it's historical. (Historical fiction is a genre all its own.) And you can play pretty fast and loose. In the movie "Wonder Woman," one of the baddies was a German general named Erich Ludendorff, who oversaw the "mad scientist" division of the army, and who was killed by Wonder Woman as he was on the verge of launching a devastating poison gas attack on England. I was surprised to find in a book on the history of World War I that there really was an Erich Ludendorff who, according to Wikipedia, "... became the architect of Germany's entire military strategy and war effort until the end of the conflict." I doubt if the heirs of Ludendorff had much reason to complain, since the character in the film had so many fictional elements (and the real Ludendorff lived until 1937, having done much to bring Hitler to power).

Illegal-immigrant sex worker becomes First Lady of the US. There's a story that couldn't be done in fiction.

Inglourious Basterds received a significant amount of criticism for changing history. I do believe that Tarantino explicitly claimed it to be fiction.

More digital ink has been spilled over the canonical validity of the third Star Wars trilogy than any other entertainment criticism except, of course, the MCU Multiverse. Again, both fictional creations, and fantasy to boot.

Strange world we live in.

 

[LAHomedog]

I think that using a real, live person [such as Camilla] is very unwise.
A different name, perhaps, or a mythical location, but not the real thing.
The legal wrangle could be huge.

Would you do it for, say, the relative/s of your President ??

Sorry, I 100% completely disagree with you. Anyone who is a public figure is fair game for fiction. Also satire and parody. There is no defamation in that. It not smearing the public figure stating that it is some kind of fact like a tabloid might do.

They are fair game!!!

HEY KIITYKAT! GO FOR IT!!!!!!!!!!!

 

[LAHomedog]

I have to agree with Handley Page about your choice of subject matter and his asking if you would write the same story about members of your President’s family? I haven’t read any of the three chapters you’ve submitted so far so I don’t know the storyline but the title seems to give an indication.

Harvey Krein is Biden’s son-in-law. Would you write a story in a similar vein about him? How about a British writer, like myself, writing a story titled “Harvey Krein Seducing.”

The ratings for your stories are low. Could that be because of the writing or the subject matter? Not all readers on this site are American and maybe the British ones aren’t very keen on giving 4’s?

Who cares??!!! Write the story you want to write. That's what artists do. If the story is good, the subject matter does not matter. First, it must be a compelling story!!

To prove the point, I might write a story about Jill giving Joe Biden a blow job and then a good ass fucking in the Lincoln Bedroom of the White House.

I know people who have been invited guests in the White House and in the excitement before they left to go there, we'd ask what are they going to do and everybody said, "Oh!!! We are going to fuck in the Lincoln Bedroom!!"

Oh course the voting from US readers will be political. Like, "Do you really think that old Joe Biden can really get it up??!! Get real."

Maybe I'll have him take a Viagra or Cialis first. Yeah, Jill blows him and then assfucks the Prez riding him cowgirl in the private residence. That works!

 

[LAHomedog]

Illegal-immigrant sex worker becomes First Lady of the US. There's a story that couldn't be done in fiction.

Inglourious Basterds received a significant amount of criticism for changing history. I do believe that Tarantino explicitly claimed it to be fiction.

More digital ink has been spilled over the canonical validity of the third Star Wars trilogy than any other entertainment criticism except, of course, the MCU Multiverse. Again, both fictional creations, and fantasy to boot.

Strange world we live in.

And he also changed history in "Once Upon A Time In Hollywood." I won't say what he did in case it would be a spoiler alert.

How about a story on how Melania and Hillary have a lesbian affair while she's the first lady. Two First Lady's eating each other. That could be hot.

 

[LAHomedog]

Iif you would write the same story about members of your President’s family?

The First Lady knelt down in the bedroom of the White House's private residence and looking at President Biden's huge missile.

"Oh, I had no idea you arsenal was so large."

"You have been declared a strategic target and I have no choice but to bomb you!"

And Jill took the presidential cock in her mouth.

One could say that only 46 women had done that, but then again you would have to ignore Marilyn Monroe and the presidential mistresses -- like Monica Lewinsky -- throughout the years.

But Jill was not Marilyn. She was the First Lady and wanted the president's cum in her mouth.

She loved to swallow. It was something she always loved. She LOVED the taste of cum. But eating the President of the United States cum, now that was the greatest of all time!!!!!!!!!

--#--#--

See, very easy.

 

[Handley_Page]

Sorry, I 100% completely disagree with you. Anyone who is a public figure is fair game for fiction. Also satire and parody. There is no defamation in that. It not smearing the public figure stating that it is some kind of fact like a tabloid might do.

They are fair game!!!

HEY KIITYKAT! GO FOR IT!!!!!!!!!!!

So let's read your story about the high-ups in the President's office.

 

[Agiel]

Sorry, I 100% completely disagree with you. Anyone who is a public figure is fair game for fiction. Also satire and parody. There is no defamation in that. It not smearing the public figure stating that it is some kind of fact like a tabloid might do.

They are fair game!!!

HEY KIITYKAT! GO FOR IT!!!!!!!!!!!

Okay. Write the story. Choose any living person and write a story about them to go in whichever category you choose.

I have one proviso. Make sure you have a decent plot, research the background, spell people’s names correctly, generally spell all words correctly, make sure your punctuation is okay. Not necessarily perfect but okay. Don’t make stupid mistakes which indicate you are stupid.

The OP has taken none of this into account as is obvious from reading the chapters published so far. A score of 1 is too high because everything is crap.

 

[LAHomedog]

Okay. Write the story. Choose any living person and write a story about them to go in whichever category you choose.

I have one proviso. Make sure you have a decent plot, research the background, spell people’s names correctly, generally spell all words correctly, make sure your punctuation is okay. Not necessarily perfect but okay.

--#--#--

Well, you have obviously not read any of my stories since they all have a decent plot, are deeply researched and click the rest of the gobbledygook you listed.

Sheeeesh.

 

[windar]

I wrote a story in early 2017 set a couple of years in the future in "Great America". Feminists, including the main character, were being sent for re-education and then dispatched to the southern border to entertain the workers building the wall. The President made an appearance. I didn't name him, but it was obvious who it was. He flew the main character and a friend of hers back to DC on Air Force One. He had to leave them for a while to take a call from Putin...

Expect to get strong reactions that will have nothing to do with your story. Most people on the site are liberal and loved it, but one Limbaugh fan was really pissed off and told me Trump could sue me for libel. I said, "I could only dream of that. The story would make me famous then".

 

[windar]

Funny; did you use the name Putin? Some people are very selective in being sensitive...

I had the aide say, "Vladimir is on the line". The story was hilarious.

I noted that: Under Executive Order #33 of March 19, 2019, any and all intimate encounters
involving the President of the United States, real or completely fictional, are hereby simply to be
described by any and all participants as ”It was the best. Absolutely the best, believe me.”

 

[Emirus]

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