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[WhiteTailDarkTip]

Hi, I’m new to Literotica. I’ve published a couple of stories.
They’re longer than the -wham-bam-thank you ma’am stuff purely because I couldn’t leave my characters in the lurch & then they started going off and doing things on their own.
So I ended up writing a trio of novellas with linked characters. Now what I need is someone that likes the more romantic story with (hopefully) sexy bits to tell me if I’ve done a reasonable job. The third instalment is waiting on some constructive criticism.
Thanks

https://www.literotica.com/s/david-and-jen
https://www.literotica.com/s/piper-plus
https://www.literotica.com/s/all-of-us-fit-in-our-places

 

[MsIndependent]

Love

I really love these stories and the long form is great. You kept my occupied yesterday on what was a shitty day so thank you.

 

[WhiteTailDarkTip]

Love

You’re very welcome. I hope you enjoy the next instalment which should be going live any day now. A fourth chapter is taking shape

 

[desecration]

This won me over:

Work was the usual ghastly drudgery. How was it that his colleagues got such fulfilment out of what was ultimately a vast box ticking exercise?

It's fantasy, but it's real.

 

[WhiteTailDarkTip]

Drudgery

They say you should write what you know about and I have lots of experience of that kind of work. Sadly.

 

[Melyssaha]

Hi, I’m new to Literotica. I’ve published a couple of stories.
They’re longer than the -wham-bam-thank you ma’am stuff purely because I couldn’t leave my characters in the lurch & then they started going off and doing things on their own.
So I ended up writing a trio of novellas with linked characters. Now what I need is someone that likes the more romantic story with (hopefully) sexy bits to tell me if I’ve done a reasonable job. The third instalment is waiting on some constructive criticism.
Thanks

https://www.literotica.com/s/david-and-jen
https://www.literotica.com/s/piper-plus

Will you look at mine if I look at yours? ;-}
tit-for-tat ?
https://www.literotica.com/stories/memberpage.php?uid=6145919&page=submissions

 

[WhiteTailDarkTip]

Sure, I’ll take a look