Editing Help Please

[NikiVien]

Hi,

I have just finished my first ever story - it's a true story but I gather that's not particularly relevant. Anyway, I would love for an editor to have a look at it for me, it's only very short at 2276 words.

The category under which I intend to publish is voyeur/exhibitionism - and it contains nothing that is likely to offend, at a push, I'd even let my mother read it

I have it written in Open Office.

English is not my first language but has been the language I've mostly spoken in the last sixteen years or so.

I hope that's enough to pique someone's interest.

Thanks in advance.

 

[AlphaLyon]

I'd be willing to give it a look, provided the content is as you say.
What specifically are you looking for from your editor?
- someone to proof read?
- someone to help with the story beats/structure?
- someone to help with the English language of it?

It sounds like a short project which is perfect for my schedule these days.
Let me know if you need help!

 

[NikiVien]

I'd be willing to give it a look, provided the content is as you say.
What specifically are you looking for from your editor?
- someone to proof read?
- someone to help with the story beats/structure?
- someone to help with the English language of it?

It sounds like a short project which is perfect for my schedule these days.
Let me know if you need help!

Thanks for your reply AlphaLyon

My husband is English and he reckons the language and grammar are okay but is no expert (his words).

So I think, for the most part, it's the story content. I've written it as accurately as I remember it but reading several posts within the editor's thread, accuracy and truth aren't particularly, if at all relevant to the reader.

So although I think it's a hot story it might seem lacking to the reader - I don't mind it leaving the reader wanting more, but I don't want to leave the reader needing more.

So, yes to all the above

 

[AlphaLyon]

So I think, for the most part, it's the story content. I've written it as accurately as I remember it but reading several posts within the editor's thread, accuracy and truth aren't particularly, if at all relevant to the reader.

haha. Sounds great. Please feel free to contact me privately and I'll give it a read and feedback.

 

[Bramblethorn]

FWIW, better not to label it as a "true story" when you post it. Some authors have mentioned getting rejected for that - the official line is that all stories posted here are fictional.

 

[jason28053]

Send me the story and I’ll help you out. I have help others.

 

[AlphaLyon]

Hi,
English is not my first language but has been the language I've mostly spoken in the last sixteen years or so.

I hope that's enough to pique someone's interest.

I just finished doing an editing pass and I have to say, your English is better than that of many native speakers. Heck, you even knew how to use the word "pique" when many think the word is "peak"!

Niki shows a lot of potential as a writer and I expect many great stories from her in the future if she continues to hone her craft.

 

[NikiVien]

FWIW, better not to label it as a "true story" when you post it. Some authors have mentioned getting rejected for that - the official line is that all stories posted here are fictional.

Thanks for the heads-up, I'll drop that from the title. It about a pivotal moment for me, so important to me, but I've now come to understand that it's irrelevant to the reader

 

[NikiVien]

Send me the story and I’ll help you out. I have help others.

Thanks for the offer, but I've got it sorted now x

 

[NikiVien]

I just finished doing an editing pass and I have to say, your English is better than that of many native speakers. Heck, you even knew how to use the word "pique" when many think the word is "peak"!

Niki shows a lot of potential as a writer and I expect many great stories from her in the future if she continues to hone her craft.

Pique is an easy one - especially with Grammarly installed

Thanks very much for your help AlphaLyon, I didn't really know what to expect, but it has been really helpful and constructive.