A Bully Targeting a Delusional Girl

[shin1gani]

Hello! I'm a relatively new writer and I've been formulating prompts for quite a while, so I want to see how others see my ideas.

The prompt begins in a community college where a bully targets a deadpan girl. Since she doesn't react to his antics, he ends up repeatedly targeting her to get a reaction out of her for his catharsis; the bully has an inferiority complex that is linked to neglect as a child, so he seeks attention from others through their reactions to his bullying. The girl, on the other hand, has love delusions and minor dissociative identity disorder stemming from a history of abuse. Eventually, she misregisters the boy's repeated bullying of her as love and emotionally gets "blue-balled" from his constant harassment of her, eventually resulting in her stalker alter manifesting. When push comes to shove, the girl immediately breaks into the boy's home late at night, has her rapist introject alter manifest, and ends up raping him because of her pent up frustration.

Again, I'm still relatively new to writing so any sort of feedback would be appreciated. Thank you!

 

[Lost_Yonder]

Hello! I'm a relatively new writer and I've been formulating prompts for quite a while, so I want to see how others see my ideas.

The prompt begins in a community college where a bully targets a deadpan girl. Since she doesn't react to his antics, he ends up repeatedly targeting her to get a reaction out of her for his catharsis; the bully has an inferiority complex that is linked to neglect as a child, so he seeks attention from others through their reactions to his bullying. The girl, on the other hand, has love delusions and minor dissociative identity disorder stemming from a history of abuse. Eventually, she misregisters the boy's repeated bullying of her as love and emotionally gets "blue-balled" from his constant harassment of her, eventually resulting in her stalker alter manifesting. When push comes to shove, the girl immediately breaks into the boy's home late at night, has her rapist introject alter manifest, and ends up raping him because of her pent up frustration.

Again, I'm still relatively new to writing so any sort of feedback would be appreciated. Thank you!

The idea is potentially interesting - the victim of bullying becoming the aggressor in the end and raping him. However, I do get lost in all the psychological roots of their problems and ultimately it does take away from any pretense of eroticism, if that is at all something you are interested in, by so much negativity, abuse, bullying, rape, etc...

 

[Hypoxia]

Delusionally innocent girl Josie, repeatedly targeted by bully Biff, weeps out her woes to her auntie Alicia, a former martial arts instructor now selling restraint gear and sex toys online. Can you guess where this is going?

Alicia trains Josie with All The Right Moves. The next time Biff bothers her at school, she cuffs his hands behind his back, pushes him inside an empty classroom, locks the door, shoves him on his back (ouch, that hurts a bit), slips off her modest panties, and sits on his face -- not that he really minds, especially if she hasn't cleansed Down There lately.

Thus begins a beautiful relationship, with a HEA (Happy Ever After) ending.

NOTE: Her delusion? She thinks the best of people.