Ugly Jeannie

[fuck_jannies]

Hi Everyone,

I'm a bit new here, learning as I go. Seems like a fun community.

I'm working on a few ideas and the one I'm trying to put on paper is about a woman who has been told she's ugly her whole life. According to traditional beauty standards, she's unattractive, and the worst part is she agrees.

She's intelligent and adaptable. During a private moment of near-perfect clarity alone in her apartment, she speaks the words she's never heard anyone say to her, "I love you." And in this moment of transformation, she sheds her old downtrodden self image, forgiving herself and deciding from that moment onward she is going to love herself first and hopefully find love of another.

Jeannie is calculating and rigorous, so she's going to tackle the love idea methodically, like a scientist. She cultivates a friendship with an older female she trusts to help her learn to find pleasure in her own body. Ultimately, however, she seeks the pleasure of another's flesh. To feel a man put his hands on her in love and in lust for her is her goal.

Maybe she ends up teaching at a school for people who have lost their sight and falls in love with a fellow teacher or student?

I'm struggling to find the sexy angle in this story idea.

If Jeannie finds love with a blind person is that too obvious or even silly?

Other feedback on this idea? Right now I feel like banishing it to the back of my head where it can ruminate longer...

 

[Carnevil9]

Hi Everyone,

I'm a bit new here, learning as I go. Seems like a fun community.

I'm working on a few ideas and the one I'm trying to put on paper is about a woman who has been told she's ugly her whole life. According to traditional beauty standards, she's unattractive, and the worst part is she agrees.

She's intelligent and adaptable. During a private moment of near-perfect clarity alone in her apartment, she speaks the words she's never heard anyone say to her, "I love you." And in this moment of transformation, she sheds her old downtrodden self image, forgiving herself and deciding from that moment onward she is going to love herself first and hopefully find love of another.

Jeannie is calculating and rigorous, so she's going to tackle the love idea methodically, like a scientist. She cultivates a friendship with an older female she trusts to help her learn to find pleasure in her own body. Ultimately, however, she seeks the pleasure of another's flesh. To feel a man put his hands on her in love and in lust for her is her goal.

Maybe she ends up teaching at a school for people who have lost their sight and falls in love with a fellow teacher or student?

I'm struggling to find the sexy angle in this story idea.

If Jeannie finds love with a blind person is that too obvious or even silly?

Other feedback on this idea? Right now I feel like banishing it to the back of my head where it can ruminate longer...

Welcome to the forum! You have certainly got the spirit of the place already. Better than some who have been here for years.

Your idea has merit. I suggest you pursue it, try to write a story around it, and see where it goes. If it doesn't go anywhere, no problem. Try something else! Every attempt gets you one notch closer to success. On the other hand, if your idea leads you to a story you kind of like, submit it. Good or bad, you will learn from the experience.

Good luck! And happy writing!!......Carney

 

[davion2308]

Nice

It's creative and interesting and you can use that background to build a believable, realistic story. Those do better if you get into keeping stats for yourself.

I think she goes through personality tests, learns and understands the 5 Love languages, and approaches love and relationships from a purely academic method.

Then, because it works, she ends up bagging the hottest guy in the room much to everyone else's chagrin, and he's solely focused on her because they are matched up so well.

And the sex is great because they have a good relationship.

It shouldn't be just "unattractive girl gets hot guy because she does butt stuff for him." Add some flavor of real relationship dynamics and you have a winner.

 

[astuffedshirt_perv]

Part of the question is if she really is ugly. Could be, or she could be pretty but bought into the perfect lives she sees on TV and thinks she is ugly. In a fantasy world, reading about unhappy, unattractive people learning to feel better is a hard sell. This is why so many movies/shows revolve around the idea that a girl who does not think she is pretty actually is. Like in Amy Shumer's "I feel pretty" movie, or Janeane Garofalo in "The truth about cats and dogs"

 

[Nouh_Bdee]

I agree with a lot of the comments here. I think it sounds like a great idea, but the blind guy angle sounds like a bit of a cop out. Maybe she thinks she has to resort to pursuing blind guys, but then a hot, sighted guy she met earlier pursues her because she's beautiful to him. It's your story, though, so you should do what you want.

 

[fuck_jannies]

I think the blind guy thing is a cop out as well, so I need to move in a different direction. Jeannie is not really ugly, but she's not a 10 either. I don't want to write an "ugly duckling" story, but I want this to be about beauty from within, seeing her move from a place where she is saddled with a poor self image, and I want her to break out of it herself and begin to explore.

 

[jaF0]

Submitted for your consideration, 'Eye of the Beholder':

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Eye_of_the_Beholder_(The_Twilight_Zone,_1959)


https://attractionsmagazine.com/wp-content/uploads/2019/09/Twilight-Zone-Eye-of-the-Beholder.jpg

 

[fuck_jannies]

I like the idea of a woman's confidence and ownership of her own self and self-image being the sexiest thing about her. When a woman owns who she is and doesn't let the world define who she is or should be, it's hot as hell.

 

[Nouh_Bdee]

I like the idea of a woman's confidence and ownership of her own self and self-image being the sexiest thing about her. When a woman owns who she is and doesn't let the world define who she is or should be, it's hot as hell.

That right there. That’s what the guy in your story should notice about her that makes him different than all the people telling her she’s ugly.

If you want my advice that is, which is not a given. Do your thing.

 

[Carnevil9]

I like the idea of a woman's confidence and ownership of her own self and self-image being the sexiest thing about her. When a woman owns who she is and doesn't let the world define who she is or should be, it's hot as hell.

I completely agree. No woman is ugly to a man who understands her and loves her and feels good when he is with her.