New to writing and looking for some helpful feedback

[Jessereynolds469]

I would like to ask all of you on this forum to give me feedback on my first story. I have several more that I am working on and would like for you to give feedback on them too.

[Posting Stories prohibited as per forum guidelines]

 

[NotWise]

Posting long bits of stories violates the forum rules. Here, you're limited to a few paragraphs and the forum moderator will probably do something about it. If you want feedback, the normal course is to get the story published on Lit, post a link here, and then ask for feedback.

While the story is too long for the forum, it is very short by Lit standards, and that would probably earn you down votes. And while the story is short, many of the paragraphs are very long, which makes them hard to read given Lit's normal story format.

I read maybe half of the story. You really don't give readers much of a chance to get to know the characters. I didn't feel any connection to them or particularly care about them or what they did. Taking more time to develop the story and the characters will help expand the length of the story.

 

[gunhilltrain]

I see you did publish it today in Fetish. So far you've gotten a 3.86, which isn't bad right out of the gate; I've had many stories where I've gotten far below that. In Fetish, if you give the audience the kinks they want, you should do okay.

And you got 4.37 on your first BDSM story. So maybe your minimalist approach is the way to go. Cutting the length of the paragraphs would indeed be a good idea however.

You do know how to link the stories to the bulletin board, I assume? If not, just copy the story URL and use the links tag offered above. A dialogue box will come up, and you can paste the URL into that.

https://www.literotica.com/s/teacher-and-student-6

Also, if you link it you'll get more readers who are just browsing around.

 

[Jessereynolds469]

Thank you for the feedback. I wasnt aware of the rule, I will be sure to post a link in the future!

 

[Jessereynolds469]

I didn't know how to link my story or that I even had to. I'll be sure to do that in the future, I'm still new to this forum and all it's rules. I really appreciate the feedback.

 

[NotWise]

I didn't know how to link my story or that I even had to. I'll be sure to do that in the future, I'm still new to this forum and all it's rules. I really appreciate the feedback.

I didn't say this before because there were a lot of structural problems, but you express yourself well. Don't even pause your writing. I'm sure you'll get an audience. The readers are out there, and all they need is someone who writes what they want to read.