WIP for a story of mine

[WintersCaress]

I think this little corner of the Lit forum could be a little livelier, so I’m sharing one of the images I’m working on for the sequel to a story I just submitted. I’m still practicing how to render skin contours, but let me know what you guys think! I’d love to hear some feedback whether it’s good/bad/terrible/awful so long as it helps me improve!

This is still a WIP so a lot of things can change before it gets thrown into my “finished” folder and bundled into the story.

https://i.imgur.com/OgBCc9w.jpg

 

[29wordsforsnow]

I think this little corner of the Lit forum could be a little livelier, so I’m sharing one of the images I’m working on for the sequel to a story I just submitted. I’m still practicing how to render skin contours, but let me know what you guys think! I’d love to hear some feedback whether it’s good/bad/terrible/awful so long as it helps me improve!

This is still a WIP so a lot of things can change before it gets thrown into my “finished” folder and bundled into the story.

First things first: Please use a smaller pic size, width by height should have a maximum of 800 x 600 pixels herein the forum. Thanks in advance.

Now thoughtful seconds: the contours and shades of the back look very well - from my point of view. The nape of the neck could use a little more shade. It looks like there's less and less contours with distance from the back, is that on intent?

Some proportions look a bit strange on second look:
* the ratio between hips and shoulders is really extreme
* the neck seems a bit small in width compared to shoulders/upper arms
* the line indicating the inside of the elbow is a tad too long
* sure that breasts really start that way close to the back? I feel there should be some more 'side' of the torso

 

[WintersCaress]

First things first: Please use a smaller pic size, width by height should have a maximum of 800 x 600 pixels herein the forum. Thanks in advance.

Now thoughtful seconds: the contours and shades of the back look very well - from my point of view. The nape of the neck could use a little more shade. It looks like there's less and less contours with distance from the back, is that on intent?

Some proportions look a bit strange on second look:
* the ratio between hips and shoulders is really extreme
* the neck seems a bit small in width compared to shoulders/upper arms
* the line indicating the inside of the elbow is a tad too long
* sure that breasts really start that way close to the back? I feel there should be some more 'side' of the torso

Oh, I’m so sorry. I thought 1,500 was going to be small enough when I resized it from my tablet. I’ll make sure to size my future submissions appropriately.

Thank you I appreciate the input very much so! I intentionally exaggerated the hip width since I didn’t want to fall into plain realism so I guess you can say it’s a stylistic choice. I will take out your suggestions down as I work more on this picture.

The portions where I haven’t finished the rendering yet is where I stopped since I wanted to get input from a trained eye before going too deep in it and being stuck with a project that was doomed from the start.

Thanks again! I super duper appreciate you taking the time to give input.

 

[29wordsforsnow]

How about resizing the shoulders a bit, so it will tend a bit more to an 'hourglass' figure?

Can you tell a bit about the story in the background? Currently, the back and arms look very defined like your character spends a lot of time on those in the gym while hips and thighs look like a contrast to that. Seems like there's a story to be told about her body alone... does she need the muscular back to support her heavy front?

 

[WintersCaress]

How about resizing the shoulders a bit, so it will tend a bit more to an 'hourglass' figure?

Can you tell a bit about the story in the background? Currently, the back and arms look very defined like your character spends a lot of time on those in the gym while hips and thighs look like a contrast to that. Seems like there's a story to be told about her body alone... does she need the muscular back to support her heavy front?

Thanks! I’ll incorporate that suggestion into the picture when I work on it tonight.

Nothing fancy, but she’s a royal that finds herself fighting for her kingdom alongside hardened men. A princess-knight (yeah, super cheesy) and while she knows how to handle a sword and she started out with a shiny suit of rose-gold armor, the war grinds on and she has to overcome her own weaknesses or perish. Luckily she has a goblin sidekick to help her along.

If in case you’re interested the story was just published yesterday in the Illustrated section, but be warned! I’m still awful at drawing.