Bull moves into Neighborhood.

[jharp]

Had this idea I wanted to share. A young man, early to mid 20s, moves into a new neighborhood. Good looking, really fit and well hung and a strong dominant personality. The Neighborhood is Fairly small, about 5 houses in a Cul de sac and very private. There are 4 women here and they quickly take note of the new guy. All 4 are married and range in age from late 30s to early 20s.

And before long all 4 really want to sleep with him. Being the dominant personality he is he makes impressions on both the wives and Husbands, gaining their respect and trust. Before long, through a series of events he begins sleeping with each wife with the blessing and sometimes eager anticipation of their husbands. These wives quickly become his harem as the story progresses.

Thoughts?

 

[Carnevil9]

Well, since you asked for thoughts: where is the drama? Where is the conflict? A story without drama doesn't have any tension, and therefore nothing to hold anyone's interest. Well, except for the sex, of course, but even sex is better if there is something at stake.

 

[SimonDoom]

Agree with Carnevil. For this idea to be turned into a really good story, it has to be more than just projection of wish fulfillment. Many men like the idea of being the stud that women crave, but that's not a great STORY.

So what's your STORY?

An alternative idea would be for the bull to be a somewhat innocent and naive bull, who doesn't realize his own appeal. But he's so appealing (and well endowed) that the neighborhood women recruit him for his talents, and he finally realizes his destiny. That's more interesting than a guy who knows up front that he's a stud and does what is predictable.

Or another idea: he's an experienced and self confident bull, but he's moved into a neighborhood that is very religious and straight-laced. The men and women around him must overcome their inhibitions to let him him. Problem with this scenario: it may not provide growth from him, which is most important.

The steps to a story:

1. A good character is introduced
2. The character has an unfulfilled need
3. There is an obstacle to meeting that need
4. Something happens that triggers the start of the character on his path to fulfilling the need
5. Twists and turns happen on the path
6. Finally, after many external obstacles and internal conflicts and doubt, the character's need is met

 

[Hypoxia]

Handsome youngish systems designer Studley Stewright holds a terrible gruesome secret that one of the neighborhood cuckholds discovers and exploits. Meanwhile, Studley's sleek Slavic stepsister Serenka skateboards nude around the cul-de-sac during morning and evening commute times to distract the salarymen whose paths are manipulated by hacked traffic-cam AIs. A senior official presses a button releasing pheromone-spraying drones. Hilarity ensues.

Then, tentacles appear...

 

[UsuallyPresent]

Can someone get the tranq gun for Hypoxia, please?

Possible conflicts - Hubbies don't know they're being cuckholded and wonder why the wives are sprucing up/airing out never-worn or only worn once unmentionables.

- Wives compete for time with protag while trying to keep hubbs in the dark

- Protag has all the above, plus whatever else their goals are.


Add in fantasy or mind control and you've got Stepford Wives type scenario, or Children of the Corn

Add in ulterior motives, you could have LW or EH

Add in the 2nd generation getting seduced (either grannies and/or daughters) and you get IT

Change the families to different races, IW

etc. Lot of stretch here possible, depending on how you grab your plot bunny

 

[shewantsmore]

All bulls are dominant anyway,i would have thought also the age range should be a bit widder 20s to 40s be more realistic, and not every husband would be a cuckold or into it,true the wifes would either be friends or talking to each other and i can understand he would be a talking point but the bull would want more those who dont say yes straight away,has to be some effort

 

[jharp]

Agree with Carnevil. For this idea to be turned into a really good story, it has to be more than just projection of wish fulfillment. Many men like the idea of being the stud that women crave, but that's not a great STORY.

So what's your STORY?

An alternative idea would be for the bull to be a somewhat innocent and naive bull, who doesn't realize his own appeal. But he's so appealing (and well endowed) that the neighborhood women recruit him for his talents, and he finally realizes his destiny. That's more interesting than a guy who knows up front that he's a stud and does what is predictable.

Or another idea: he's an experienced and self confident bull, but he's moved into a neighborhood that is very religious and straight-laced. The men and women around him must overcome their inhibitions to let him him. Problem with this scenario: it may not provide growth from him, which is most important.

The steps to a story:

1. A good character is introduced
2. The character has an unfulfilled need
3. There is an obstacle to meeting that need
4. Something happens that triggers the start of the character on his path to fulfilling the need
5. Twists and turns happen on the path
6. Finally, after many external obstacles and internal conflicts and doubt, the character's need is met

Ah, my mistake. I didn't mean to imply he was a bull straight away. It's kind of a journey of discover for him. Guy is former Military and recently divorced. He comes to the new neighborhood for a fresh start. He was unsatisfied in the Marriage but stuck with it to try and make it work, which it obviously didn't.

Here he goes on a road of discovery by first becoming the bull for one of the couples, and then, over the course of the story, the rest seek him out when his bedroom skills become common knowledge.

He's reluctant at first as he views sleeping with a married woman cheating. But with the coaxing and blessing of both the Husband and Wife, he gets more comfortable with the situation. As he grows more dominant and assertive over the wife the other wives take notice and grow curious. Their curiosity leads to desire and from there things expand.

Thoughts?

 

[DarkPleasures]

Then, tentacles appear...

Well hung tentacles... lol

 

[ElectricBlue]

Handsome youngish systems designer Studley Stewright holds a terrible gruesome secret that one of the neighborhood cuckholds discovers and exploits. Meanwhile, Studley's sleek Slavic stepsister Serenka skateboards nude around the cul-de-sac during morning and evening commute times to distract the salarymen whose paths are manipulated by hacked traffic-cam AIs. A senior official presses a button releasing pheromone-spraying drones. Hilarity ensues.

Then, tentacles appear...

You live in the strangest neighbourhood, Hypoxia. Mind you, Serenka... .

 

[Hypoxia]

You live in the strangest neighbourhood, Hypoxia.

I *must* fictionalize it. The reality includes a retired married couple of military bomb de-fusers (she left him after exiting Iraq alive); a drug+alcoholism counselor who brings his subjects home; folks attacking me when I stroll, which is why I carry a steel pennywhistle for defense; bears and pumas; a meth lab at the golf course the local Indian tribe didn't buy; dead folksingers; and no cell service.

Fiction merely smooths-out reality. Reality sickens; fantasy soothes.

 

[gordo12]

Can someone get the tranq gun for Hypoxia, please?

Elephant size please!

There was a very similar story on LW some years back. The husbands took exception after a couple of wives were screwed (if memory serves me)

They set up an assignation with one of the wives he was making moves on and then scared him where he ran out the front door straight into a sheet of plexiglass and knocked himself out. It was quite funny. There was a host of other things they did to him but I can't remember it all.

Decent plot, but as Carnevil9 mentioned it needs some kind of drama.

 

[screwher]

Great story idea and a long time fantasy of mine. My wife and I are a hotwife couple. But all the men in our neighbourhood my wife wouldn't look at twice. So Id love nothing more than a charming Ladies Man to move in. Then have him set his sights on my wife. Then soon he's got my wife naked in his bed!

 

[matto123]

Great story idea and a long time fantasy of mine. My wife and I are a hotwife couple. But all the men in our neighbourhood my wife wouldn't look at twice. So Id love nothing more than a charming Ladies Man to move in. Then have him set his sights on my wife. Then soon he's got my wife naked in his bed!

Use your wife’s name as one of the characters that the bull fucks

Even bass the women on our wives and girlfriends

 

[screwher]

Use your wife’s name as one of the characters that the bull fucks

Even bass the women on our wives and girlfriends

Yes, if I were to write a story like this, my wife would be the lead female.

 

[matto123]

Yes, if I were to write a story like this, my wife would be the lead female.

Would be so hot

 

[LupusDei]

Meanwhile, Studley's sleek Slavic stepsister Serenka skateboards nude around the cul-de-sac during morning and evening commute times...

For me that single sentence might make almost any story worth reading, almost.

 

[loquere]

Make him a serial killer

Well, since you asked for thoughts: where is the drama? Where is the conflict? A story without drama doesn't have any tension, and therefore nothing to hold anyone's interest. Well, except for the sex, of course, but even sex is better if there is something at stake.

 

[Hypoxia]

For me that single sentence might make almost any story worth reading, almost.

I would pad it out a bit for production. A few more phat words, that's all.

 

[Hypoxia]

Make him a serial killer

Or a cereal killer. Or both. Police in several jurisdictions are baffled by the trail of bodies stuffed with breakfast flakes and wafers -- different products in each smiling corpse. No locals are suspicious when the new neighbor unloads cartons of raisin bran from his SUV. Nobody near his last home heard the deadly snap-crackle-and-pop of homicide. How long can this continue?

 

[loquere]

Or a cereal killer. Or both. Police in several jurisdictions are baffled by the trail of bodies stuffed with breakfast flakes and wafers -- different products in each smiling corpse. No locals are suspicious when the new neighbor unloads cartons of raisin bran from his SUV. Nobody near his last home heard the deadly snap-crackle-and-pop of homicide. How long can this continue?

How about he's an environmental lawyer, these women work as executives for a high polluting energy company. After loosing in court he decides to start seducing & killing. The killing starts on Holloween.

 

[jharp]

Yes, if I were to write a story like this, my wife would be the lead female.

Well if I write it, and there is a strong possibility that I will, I could use your wife and you as characters if you like?

 

[screwher]

Well if I write it, and there is a strong possibility that I will, I could use your wife and you as characters if you like?

I would be absolutely thrilled. I'll pm you some details when you're ready.

 

[matto123]

Well if I write it, and there is a strong possibility that I will, I could use your wife and you as characters if you like?

Any chance my girlfriend and I could make appearance

 

[jharp]

Any chance my girlfriend and I could make appearance

Sure. Could do that too.

The thing is, I've never written Erotica before. I'm good with character work in other stuff but I've never written sex scenes. So this would be a first for me.

 

[jaF0]

Had this idea I wanted to share. A young man, early to mid 20s, moves into a new neighborhood. Good looking, really fit and well hung and a strong dominant personality.

Or maybe not. Think Ron Jeremy.

Your 'conflict' is they really can't stand to see him, but they go on reputation and do it anyways.