Question about death in an erotic story

[BlinkenLights93]

I have several stories that I have been creating, however I do not know if death is allowed in stories. The deaths in question are not snuff, they are plot related and essential to the story(I.e. bad guys/villains.) The stories are not really erotic but do have erotic elements, and they are story and character based. I just need to know if the deaths would be allowed in this way, or if I'm just wasting my time.

 

[oggbashan]

AS long as there is no sexual excitement about the death there should be no problem but you can't use 'death' as a tag.

I have several deaths in my stories.

 

[LexxRuthless]

Ogg has hit the main points: No sexual excitement tied to those deaths, "death" can't be a tag.

I would suggest posting the story, since you've already written it. Even if it doesn't fare well on this site, you will learn from the experience. It wouldn't be a waste of your time if you learn something useful.

My first submission here was rejected. I got an explanation why it was rejected, fixed it, and my story went through quickly after that. If you want people to read your story, there aren't many better platforms than this one.

 

[MayorReynolds]

I've successfully submitted stories with death on here. They were plot related, not sex related. And I always had something optimistic come of it, i.e. it circled back to a happy ending because of time travel, or he continued on as a ghost.

As others have said, as long as it's not snuff or central to a kink it should be fine here. Another rule of thumb that I've learned, for the sake of my own style anyway, is not to end the story on a down, sour note. The reader shouldn't feel bad after they've had an orgasm.

It's why I never liked Taboo: American Style.

 

[Zeb_Carter]

I have a lot of stories that I have killed people because that's what was called for. Bad guy, good guy, makes no difference. People die. People get killed. As long as it's part of the story no problem.

 

[YDB95]

The only problem you're likely to run into is that your story's ratings might take a hit. Some readers don't appreciate losing a character they've come to like.

 

[MelissaBaby]

The only problem you're likely to run into is that your story's ratings might take a hit. Some readers don't appreciate losing a character they've come to like.

I have not found that to be true. Of course, it depends on how the death is presented. It can't come off cheap, cavalier, or as nothing more than a plot device. Handled right, the death of a character will heighten the readers emotional involvement in the story.

 

[Hypoxia]

I have not found that to be true. Of course, it depends on how the death is presented. It can't come off cheap, cavalier, or as nothing more than a plot device. Handled right, the death of a character will heighten the readers emotional involvement in the story.

Nothing like a major sympathetic character's tragic demise to moisten eyeballs and grab votes. Nothing like fatal payback to arouse feelings of justice attained. But Laurel doesn't like mayhem so don't chop-up your victims except for comedy.

I put tragic death in my first posted series and in my highest-rated I/T piece. I put vengeful death in a popular series. I put absurd explosive deaths in an EH parody. Other players croak along the way but never in sexual situations, not until the lovers' plane crashes whilst they fuck. I may write that some day.

Laurel bans snuff (sexual death) but not other disincorporations. Except with demons, and maybe aliens or monsters. They can fuck players to death. You can get away with vore, too. I don't know about other cannibalisms. And even if allowed, such may not gain popular approval. I.e. prepare for trolls.

 

[SimonDoom]

I have a hard time figuring out the "no snuff" rule and how to apply it.

I'm working on a story concept in which the protagonist/narrator unwittingly is drawn into a ritual that involves both sex and death. He is drugged and only partially aware of what's going on. He is enjoying the sexual aspect of the ritual, which gives him pleasure. But he becomes aware that some others around him are killed as part of a ritual sacrifice. It's not snuff; there's nothing arousing about the death itself. It's meant to be horrifying and surprising amid what up to that point had seemed to be an enjoyable bacchanale. The protagonist/narrator does not die. It seems to me that this should be OK under the Site's rule about sex and death, but I'm not sure. Thoughts?

 

[KeithD]

Except with demons, and maybe aliens or monsters. They can fuck players to death.

And vampires.

 

[TarnishedPenny]

Some people get away with snuff, even when it's reported.

As in who?

 

[BiscuitHammer]

I kill people constantly in certain stories, especially The Great Khan. It's usually death in battle, and often graphic, but I've never done snuff directly.

Death is fine, just include a tag that comes as close to the nature of the incident as possible, like 'graphic violence', 'battles' or such.

And make sure nobody's getting dewy or sprouting wood as a result, I guess.

 

[ElectricBlue]

It's meant to be horrifying and surprising amid what up to that point had seemed to be an enjoyable bacchanale. The protagonist/narrator does not die. It seems to me that this should be OK under the Site's rule about sex and death, but I'm not sure. Thoughts?

Keep the last sexual shenanigans a thousand words away, and write the scene intelligently and non-gratuitously, and you should be okay.

I have a seppuku style disembowelment in my Arthurian yarn where Lilith despatches her brother. Artur has just died with an arrow through the chest, and the snow is covered with his blood. The two scenes are back to back, graphic, essential to the plot, but don't go on for pages. They passed without comment or any rework.

 

[BlinkenLights93]

Thank you all for the advice, it seems that the deaths in my stories would be perfectly acceptable.

 

[MelissaBaby]

Thank you all for the advice, it seems that the deaths in my stories would be perfectly acceptable.

Well, except to the characters who die...

 

[Hypoxia]

I did have to resubmit one story (Randy's Revenge) a few times, turning tragicomic sexual death into absurdist malformation, before approval. In the original, she explodes. Edited, she becomes a circus clown car. Yes, I earned that 3.61 rating.

I'm cooking a tale of WWI pilots. Expect many deaths, not in bed. It'll pass.

 

[TarnishedPenny]

Well, except to the characters who die...

I forget who it was who pointed out - maybe somebody in Oglaf? - that fairy-tale endings generally suck for about half the cast.

 

[ElectricBlue]

I forget who it was who pointed out - maybe somebody in Oglaf? - that fairy-tales generally suck about half the cast.

A quick edit for you, TP. It's Lit, remember .

 

[Hypoxia]

I forget who it was who pointed out - maybe somebody in Oglaf? - that fairy-tales generally suck about half the cast.

A quick edit for you, TP. It's Lit, remember .

You beat me to it. Darn.

But it's already been done. Erotic Adventures of Pinnocchio. Jack and the Cock Stalk. Cinderella, Sex Slave. And go back to the Grimms' originals, with much abuse of captive maids and dwarves. Fucked-Up Fairy Tails are easy.

 

[PennameWombat]

Keep the last sexual shenanigans a thousand words away, and write the scene intelligently and non-gratuitously, and you should be okay.

I have a seppuku style disembowelment in my Arthurian yarn where Lilith despatches her brother. Artur has just died with an arrow through the chest, and the snow is covered with his blood. The two scenes are back to back, graphic, essential to the plot, but don't go on for pages. They passed without comment or any rework.

My Nude Day entry is in Erotic Horror and my lead character is, for want of a better description, an alien energy vampire. She only caused one on-screen death but that was immediately after the culmination of sexual intercourse with her victim (who also happened to be a Reverend) by draining him of his life force. Passed without comment or change. As a note, the story doesn't say he's dead at that time, it's written from her point of view and she just goes past "his still form". It's not until the next scene that his death is confirmed. Her two previous victims of the same attack had both been described as having been left alive.

She and her male equivalent (her mate) each described causing a few more deaths off-screen (the story is them trying to find each other.) She uses the intercourse to lull her victims as she lacks superstrength but has sensuality going for her.

So far the only stories I've had with onscreen deaths have been in Erotic Horror and NonHuman, and there the rules seem relaxed. But as I describe above, the text leaves the reader hanging for a while before confirming the death. My lead character simply doesn't care one way or the other so she has no thoughts on it.

 

[jaF0]

The only way I'd ever even consider it would in the way of a 'Death Becomes Her' type story line.

 

[TxRad]

And never kill off everyone in the story. It makes writing a sequel a bitch but you will still be asked for one. Been there, done that.

 

[KeithD]

One of my summer contest stories will be a murder mystery. I placed in the April Fools contest a couple of years ago with a murder mystery. (It's mostly what I write in the mainstream). I won't try to used "murder" or "death" as a tag, though.

 

[Hypoxia]

And never kill off everyone in the story. It makes writing a sequel a bitch but you will still be asked for one. Been there, done that.

Prequels and spinoffs are usually possible.

 

[RetroFan]

I wrote a story once where one of the three main characters was dead all along. The readers with one exception seemed to like the story.