Embracing Our Truths Ch. 4
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ElectricBlue
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ElectricBlue
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You need to check your dialogue punctuation.
"Well, this time I want to do that again, and I won't be stopping you from fucking me until we can't walk," she said, with a naughty grin and a blush.
You're inconsistent with your dialogue punctuation - but the mistake noted above is very common. It's a minor thing, but it gets in the way of a smooth read - sometimes it IS right, but it's mostly wrong, and the inconsistency drove me nuts.
should read:
"Well, this time I want to do that again, and I won't be stopping you from fucking me until we can't walk," she said, with a naughty grin and a blush.
You're inconsistent with your dialogue punctuation - but the mistake noted above is very common. It's a minor thing, but it gets in the way of a smooth read - sometimes it IS right, but it's mostly wrong, and the inconsistency drove me nuts.
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