Any tips on writing a sexual roleplay scene?

[DragonCat91]

Just wondering if anyone more experienced can give me a few pointers. My latest idea involves an established couple (so they've banged each other before) doing a cop/naughty criminal roleplay complete with toy handcuffs. I can either make it so this is the first time they've done said roleplay, or they've done it before a time or two. Whatever's easier I guess, or whatever would be more interesting. Basically, is there anything I need to know or keep in mind for this kind of thing? Any tips for writing characters who are playing roles that aren't them? Because I'll pretty much have to have double "in character" if that makes sense.

I'd assume I'll have to write slightly differently depending on whether they're doing the roleplay for the first time or not. First time, they might be more scripted/come up with dialogue beforehand, not, they'd be more likely to improvise. Am I on the right track here? Anything else?

 

[PuckIt]

More as a reader than a writer (since I've read a whole lot more than I've tried to write), the biggest piece of advice I would offer is the scene you describe worrying about IS a scene. Good story writing is good story writing whether it's sexy, or to try to push Clive Cussler off the list.

Don't get bogged down in the fact that it's a sexual roleplay scenario and ignore the basics of story telling because you're too worried about bringing the "luv machine".

 

[HandsInTheDark]

If it's their first time rojeplaying ever, and you want either comedy or realism, have them fall in and out of character. "Your character wouldn't say that!" Etc. some people take to role play naturally, but some just don't.

In a cop scene, "what do you mean the key's gone missing" might be a cliche, but it's still got scope. Maybe they're both laughing and dying of embarrassment. Maybe the still-free party starts stretching limits. Maybe it turns out she's the one who somehow managed to hide the key...

I knew a girl for whom pirates were the hottest thing ever. And plenty who wanted to be gorean slaves. Sometimes interesting things emerge the first time a girl is tied up in character - might be hot, might be awful. For a lot of people, role play involves a whole lot of self-discovery.

 

[litfan10]

If it's their first time rojeplaying ever, and you want either comedy or realism, have them fall in and out of character. "Your character wouldn't say that!" Etc. some people take to role play naturally, but some just don't.

In a cop scene, "what do you mean the key's gone missing" might be a cliche, but it's still got scope. Maybe they're both laughing and dying of embarrassment. Maybe the still-free party starts stretching limits. Maybe it turns out she's the one who somehow managed to hide the key...

I knew a girl for whom pirates were the hottest thing ever. And plenty who wanted to be gorean slaves. Sometimes interesting things emerge the first time a girl is tied up in character - might be hot, might be awful. For a lot of people, role play involves a whole lot of self-discovery.

"Gorean slaves" wow, does that bring back memories. John Norman - such a bizarre mind.

 

[litfan10]

Hey DragonCat91

My advice, for what it's worth, is spend a decent time imaging the characters and let them go. Watch where they take you as they play. Run it like a movie in your head - they might take you in surprising directions, and it should read as pretty natural.

 

[DragonCat91]

In a cop scene, "what do you mean the key's gone missing" might be a cliche, but it's still got scope. Maybe they're both laughing and dying of embarrassment. Maybe the still-free party starts stretching limits. Maybe it turns out she's the one who somehow managed to hide the key...

LOL that's ironic, because I actually plan on having the handcuffs malfunction and they have to break them. They're toy handcuffs. Yeah.

Solid advice from all of you but what the heck is a gorean slave?

I do have a teeny bit written:

"Stop this nonsense, Fire Eyes!" His face didn't match his tone. His tone was accurate, he sounded enough like an angry cop resisting the advances of a slutty criminal, but his face said "I want to nail you." She wasn't going to critique, he wasn't an actor after all. God, those silver eyes of his...so hot, so sexy when they met hers like this.

He continued his line. "I will have you jailed. Without bail! You hear me?!" She felt an oozing wetness in her crotch. Usually by the time she noticed she was wet, he was hard and ready to go. The visible bulge in his pants confirmed this.

"You'd be lying if you said you didn't want me, Sheriff." She said in her best sultry tone. "Just look at you, you're rock hard. Give in. You know you want to." She reached for him with her free hand, undid the snap on his pants, and grabbed his erection and maneuvered it so it poked out of his boxer fly. He had the perfect penis in her opinion, about seven inches with a smooth, adorable tip. Could've been thicker, but he was her champion stud, he'd figured out how to drive her wild with experience. Nobody could drill like he could. Nobody. It didn't matter that she had no one to compare him too. All that mattered was how well HER man drilled.

Complete with in character names! "Fire Eyes" because her eyes are red, yeah. It's a name they came up with for the villainess she's supposed to be. Natural hair/eye colors can be pretty much anything in this world, so that's not an issue.

She's got one hand in the cuffs. Would being able to undo a snap with one hand be realistic or should I switch it to a zipper or something?

 

[litfan10]

Solid advice from all of you but what the heck is a gorean slave?

Back in the seventies John Norman wrote a series of fantasy novels on the planet Gor. It was a very male dominated culture. Norman was a philosophy professor and this leaked out in his books a lot

The very real BDSM community embraced his philosophies regarding male domination and women being subservient sex slaves. It's called the Gorean Society and it is a very real thing to this day with practicing Male Doms and female Gorean slaves. It is a surprisingly fully developed culture.

 

[HandsInTheDark]

Back in the seventies John Norman wrote a series of fantasy novels on the planet Gor. It was a very male dominated culture. Norman was a philosophy professor and this leaked out in his books a lot

"Leaked out" is charitable. He had a thing about feminism and wrote the series to provoke a response from feminists. The books themselves were not very good; but then his premise was a bunch of super-intelligent bugs on another planet kidnapped bunches of humans as slaves, so you got what you paid for. Plenty of women found the book's premise appealing. I didn't; the idea that men are just intrinsically destined to rule over women - a sort of "they always have and they always will" mindset - doesn't hold up.

If you want some idea of the style, google Houseplants of Gor. It's not one of Norman's of course, but it captures the style better than you'd expect.

 

[litfan10]

"Leaked out" is charitable. He had a thing about feminism and wrote the series to provoke a response from feminists. The books themselves were not very good; but then his premise was a bunch of super-intelligent bugs on another planet kidnapped bunches of humans as slaves, so you got what you paid for. Plenty of women found the book's premise appealing. I didn't; the idea that men are just intrinsically destined to rule over women - a sort of "they always have and they always will" mindset - doesn't hold up.

If you want some idea of the style, google Houseplants of Gor. It's not one of Norman's of course, but it captures the style better than you'd expect.

Yeah I was feeling generous. His one sided message did take things over.

I tried to read him, didn't get too far. I prefer Robert E. Howard or Fritz Leiber for classic sword and sorcery.

 

[DragonCat91]

Okay, I see.

But back on topic...should I change to him wearing zipper fastened pants or keep the snap?

 

[litfan10]

Okay, I see.

But back on topic...should I change to him wearing zipper fastened pants or keep the snap?

could she use her teeth?

one handed could go either way.

Also, sorry for the derail

 

[PuckIt]

Okay, I see.

But back on topic...should I change to him wearing zipper fastened pants or keep the snap?

I almost hate to say it, but it depends on just when in time this happened.

As an example, most of the current crop of crap... er, I mean "stories" I'm gestating happen in the 80s. Cell phones didn't exist unless you count the car mounted bricks only the really wealthy farmers could afford. Levi 501s with a button fly were "a thing", at least in my region. So, I typically add in a bit with popping the buttons instead of the rip of a zipper as a little background time stamp.

But, seriously, thinking like that is going to bog you down and keep you from finishing. (Or it would me!) Leave it as is and move along with the story. Wait to check for stuff like "snap or zip" on your first proofread when the story has hit it's natural, wait for it, climax.

 

[DragonCat91]

I almost hate to say it, but it depends on just when in time this happened.

As an example, most of the current crop of crap... er, I mean "stories" I'm gestating happen in the 80s. Cell phones didn't exist unless you count the car mounted bricks only the really wealthy farmers could afford. Levi 501s with a button fly were "a thing", at least in my region. So, I typically add in a bit with popping the buttons instead of the rip of a zipper as a little background time stamp.

But, seriously, thinking like that is going to bog you down and keep you from finishing. (Or it would me!) Leave it as is and move along with the story. Wait to check for stuff like "snap or zip" on your first proofread when the story has hit it's natural, wait for it, climax.

Oh that's a good point! It's modern, like...late 90s to now. Not our world persay, but close enough to it.

I had her unzip him though, and then he broke character for a second to kiss her and take the pants off completely. Because zippers can pinch and that would hurt.

Using her teeth though...lol, I might have to consider that during editing.