A young Couple's forbidden Love

[bustyblondebitch]

a young couples forbidden love a beautiful rich man's daughter falls in love with a middle class young man, they are forced to meet in secret because if they are caught their will be hell to pay.

Eventually they marry in secret but while they are on they are on their honeymoon her father who is so wealthy he thinks he is above the law.

he hires his own private army to kill them both so they have to shoot their way out their is a great deal of gore violence bloodshed.

I tired to do this as a roleplay but it did not work out so i thought i would try it as a story idea.

 

[Carnevil9]

Why is their love forbidden? That seems to be an important element, which you have not specified.

 

[LeandraNyx]

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[geronimo_appleby]

Yeah, I am intrigued; why is their love forbidden?

Sounds like an awesome story; I'd read it!

religion?

 

[rutger5]

Possibly class difference? Being she is rich and he is, the horror, only middle class. I did use that reason in a story of mine and the daddy wasn't happy.

 

[Carnevil9]

If it is just class difference, that seems a bit minor to justify the extreme reaction of the rich daddy. If he is going to be "private army mad" over the marriage, it would have to be something more extreme like religion, or possibly a family blood feud.

 

[bustyblondebitch]

It if forbidden because she is a rich man's daughter and he is a poor man and comes from a poor family and her father hates poor people and thought of his on daughter dating and later marrying a poor man is so shocking and so upsetting that he goes full blow private army mad.

 

[bustyblondebitch]

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[Carnevil9]

It if forbidden because she is a rich man's daughter and he is a poor man and comes from a poor family.........

That just made "Bohemian Rhapsody" pop into my head!

 

[EquinoxRising]

What is "full blow private army mad"?

 

[rutger5]

If it is just class difference, that seems a bit minor to justify the extreme reaction of the rich daddy. If he is going to be "private army mad" over the marriage, it would have to be something more extreme like religion, or possibly a family blood feud.

Throughout history this was taken very seriously, though in US less so. But even in modern times look at the comments made when Prince William married Kate Middleton, a commoner, egads. A death squad seems a bit extreme to me, in my story the father only hired some thugs to beat him up but I'm a reasonable man.

 

[Ldy_Sea]

Could be Rich man is afraid that some con man will take advantageof his naieve daughter and leave her penniless after he dies.

Could be a race thing. Rich Black man doesn't want his wealth to fall back into "whiteys" hands. Or White man believes Mexicans are for gardening and cleaning, not mating with his pretty princess.

Could be a former school rival (different frats or adversaries on football team) who never liked each other. One became a Doc, the other a teacher. Doesn't want his daughter to marry into the hated family.

 

[bustyblondebitch]

"full blow private army mad"? basically when her father finds out that she married the poor man he gets so mad that he uses his vast fortune to build his own private army to kill the young couple.

 

[Ldy_Sea]

Unless the guy she married is some kind of combination Rambo, Robo-Cop, and the Terminator an army is going a bit overboard. No tonly would it be hard to keep a secret with so many people, it would likely catch the attention of the authorities.

It would be simpler to hire someone to plant a bomb on their car, or to kill the one spouse and frame to other, or even just frame the husband for a crime.

Hell anyone with that much money could hire a sniper who could take them out, no need to hire an entire army...

Reminds me of the old joke. Guy goes to a gun shop near his house to buy a scope. Shop owner shows him a scope and he looks through it to find his wife cheating on him with another guy. Cuckold says "I'll give you 5 grand for two shots. Shoot her in the head and shoot his dick off. Owner looks through the scope and says I can do that in one shot.

 

[EquinoxRising]

"full blow private army mad"? basically when her father finds out that she married the poor man he gets so mad that he uses his vast fortune to build his own private army to kill the young couple.

Wow. .

 

[bustyblondebitch]

Well i considered a car bomb or a well trained Sniper even murder of one spouse and framing the other for the crime, but i thought that it was to simple and not violent enough.

Regarding the authorities the father has them in his pocket but no literally of course.

 

[EquinoxRising]

So, the father hates the poor man so much he's willing to murder his daughter?

 

[bustyblondebitch]

Yes! because the father know's that she would never divorce or leave the man she love's so the father figures "Well then i will just have to kill them both".

 

[EquinoxRising]

Nice, erotic ending.

 

[bustyblondebitch]

I honestly have no idea what kind of ending i am going to put on it.

 

[PureEvil88]

It could always turn out their fathers are from rival crime families. The richer one more established in the community the other intruding upon his territory.

 

[likehotstorys]

no idea what kind of ending

I honestly have no idea what kind of ending i am going to put on it.

Well you could have a confrontation ending. Where the farther has been raising the daughter to be his fuck toy and her guy has a bigger dick than him.

With the final being the Farther is bi does his daughter while the guy does the father.

 

[bustyblondebitch]

I suppose i could have that i have kind of an ending but i am still not sure how i am going to end it.

 

[Hypoxia]

I suppose i could have that i have kind of an ending but i am still not sure how i am going to end it.

ROMEO AND JULIET is your structural model. Their love is forbidden because they're of rival families. Mutual death is their only prospect -- unless they migrate to Bolivia or the like. For fun, they're from fractious Nazi factions after WWII, or otherwise escaping political turbulences.