Maria goes to college

[rojoburro]

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First story so far

Maria In College
Part 1
Mariana, Maria to her friends which were so far away from her college. She had been so homesick for the first year watching her roommate duck in and out to go and experience life and all the things Maria could only imagine. She yearned to see them or even...experience something for herself.

She had gone to catholic school growing up and her mother was very strict on her seeing any boys, after she had gotten pregnant with Maria at a young age. She felt like her mother had created a prison that she was determined to break through in her second year of college.

She had been working up the courage to ask her roommate, Tasha, to take her along. She knew Tasha knew people that were open to experimenting and every time she left Maria masturbated to the thoughts racing through her head. What Tasha was doing, with who, where??? She then would do classwork and go on a run around campus.


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Anyone want to take over for a bit? Or any tips?

 

[_Lynn_]

This post violates forum guideline #10 found here.

Please remove the excess portion or as a moderator, I will.

 

[rojoburro]

This post violates forum guideline #10 found here.

Please remove the excess portion or as a moderator, I will.

I am just asking for help its first time I started a story

 

[_Lynn_]

I am just asking for help its first time I started a story

That's irrelevant. The post went against forum guidelines.

 

[rojoburro]

My bad I didn't see 3 paragraphs part

 

[Carnevil9]

Think of the Story Ideas forum as what we call in the business world "the elevator pitch." You have a great idea for your company, but you can't get anyone to listen to you. Then, through shear luck, you happen to get into an elevator with the Vice President of Finance. You have like twenty seconds of a captive audience! How are you going to sell him on your brilliant idea before he walks out at his floor?

 

[Hypoxia]

Think of the Story Ideas forum as what we call in the business world "the elevator pitch." You have a great idea for your company, but you can't get anyone to listen to you. Then, through shear luck, you happen to get into an elevator with the Vice President of Finance. You have like twenty seconds of a captive audience! How are you going to sell him on your brilliant idea before he walks out at his floor?

Exactly. Too many 'ideas' presented here are long and detailed... and I tend to scan and move on, stepping from the SI elevator.

Types of idea plugs:

* High concept, a single sentence: Flesh Gordon is captured by Rigelians and anally probed and implanted but with the help of a sexy Venusian he saves humankind.

* Elevator pitch, a single paragraph, no more than 4-6 lines. If the first 1-para pitch is snappy, add one or two more on variants -- it's like you caught the exec's attention and s/he waits to hear your next idea.

* Executive summary, no more than 3 paragraphs outlining one concept and its ramifications. That's a single-page brief the exec requests for further review.

* Anything longer is a treatment, not a pitch.

I've been out of the business world awhile but I think I got that about right.

 

[rojoburro]

Yeah I just hacked off fingers instead

Once I read it. Watched some porn. Oh my god does Tory Lane put effort into each scene or what? Cam and came back I realized that it was like I was writing for a 20 year old girl's, kinda edgy, birthday gift her Aunt got from her old friend from high school that spends all day in a bar. It just took way too long to start up the sex and so I started writing about a maid who forces her employers be dominant and generally has hard sex with her and put things in her butt. They have her as a status symbol. It's more fun than teenage angst.

Thank you and remember to masturbate in public to support Halloween! Try to be safe and go in pairs or with a group but going on your own to a well lit area and masturbating on your own is fine too. The important thing is tradition.

MASTURBATE FOR THE SAKE OF HALLOWEEN! Remember those that fought for this MFH and the 200 years of tradition that follow it.


My kik is Gersh805

 

[EquinoxRising]

Think of the Story Ideas forum...

This was in Story Discussion Circle before being dumped here.

 

[EquinoxRising]

My kik is ...

Why do we need to know this? Did you mean to place a personal ad instead?