The hussy in town

[atariblue]

This one's a little out there but I'll see what everyone thinks.

A quiet little community is turned on it's head when a crop top, Daisy Duke shorts wearing hussy moves into town. She smokes, drives a fancy sports car, she's trouble...or at least that's what the town's folk say.

A group of women meet at the church to discuss the "problem" and with them are their sexually frustrated husbands.

"We must do something about this smoking sexual heathen." the leader yells.

"Yes, yes" the crowd calls back.

"Her shirt barely covers her breasts, and those shorts show it all" adds another woman.

"We should teach her a lesson" one husband chimes in.

"Here, here." A chorus of male voices ring throughout.

Fast Forward to Friday night, a group of husbands wait patiently inside the church. The clock strikes eight and out comes the hussy dressed in an altar robe. Hopping up on the altar she starts playing with herself for the enjoyment of the men.

After getting off, she disrobes and patiently waits for the first wave of guys to fill her holes over and over again, giving her thanks many times over.

Sitting in the middle of the men, cum dripping from pussy, off her breasts, splashed onto her face she very thankful for the punishment she has a received but she won't be repenting anytime soon.

 

[Carnevil9]

I like it!

It rings of "improbable at best," so it would most likely only work if you wrote it as a bit of a farce. But it could definitely work on that level.

 

[Sean Renaud]

It shows how crazy the ideas have been lately. This is the least crazy idea I've encountered in some time.

Actually I have to agree with Carne. You want to keep this story light and fluffy, like 90's Skinemax stuff. The ones where drive in movies were saved from going out of business because some girl didn't realize she was fucking in front of the projector and everybody got a shadow show or the ones where the restaurant was one bad inspection from going out of business but the girls kept him distracted. And at the end they send a woman because she'll do the job. . .only she's a bisexual who's always wanted an orgy and everybody lives happily ever after.

This could be comedy GOLD.

 

[maria1966]

I have a few thoughts on this story idea.

What if their is a second outcast in the town? A disabled man who became disabled during military service.

And the other people in the town treat him like shit even though he sacrificed the use of his legs so that they could enjoy the freedoms that they take for granted.


And the only friend that he has is the hussy and they must make a stand against these horrible people.

 

[atariblue]

I have a few thoughts on this story idea.

What if their is a second outcast in the town? A disabled man who became disabled during military service.

And the other people in the town treat him like shit even though he sacrificed the use of his legs so that they could enjoy the freedoms that they take for granted.


And the only friend that he has is the hussy and they must make a stand against these horrible people.

As long as there's a gangbang in the church leaving the hussy covered in cum I'm fine with whatever.

 

[Sean Renaud]

You need a pretty damn good explanation for why he's an outcast. In most of America a vet of any sort, much less a disabled vet is a goddamn rockstar. Nobody is willing to give to charity or raise taxes to pay for them but that's a political issue and deals with to paraphrase Stalin "One person is a tragedy, a million is a statistic."

 

[atariblue]

You need a pretty damn good explanation for why he's an outcast. In most of America a vet of any sort, much less a disabled vet is a goddamn rockstar. Nobody is willing to give to charity or raise taxes to pay for them but that's a political issue and deals with to paraphrase Stalin "One person is a tragedy, a million is a statistic."

That's true today, but if this was set in the late 60's early 70's where returning Vietnam vets were met with disdain and resentment then no. And the story of a hussy experiencing harassment in a small community could definitely work in that era. I don't know where or how the vet would fit in and personally I like the story playing out as a comedy/farce. The women of the town get their comeuppance is too good to pass up.

 

[maria1966]

atraiblue I like the history part for this story idea now how do we begin the story after all a good story has to have a beginning or it won't make sense.

 

[Strangebuddy]

I don't know if it has to be in the past necessarily. Could be a HOA who is trying to bring her down and get her to move. She ends up seducing each member while getting the whole neighborhood to toss away their inhibitions.

 

[divacarolina]

The clock strikes eight and out comes the hussy dressed in an altar robe. Hopping up on the altar she starts playing with herself for the enjoyment of the men.

Im in favor of church orgies in general lol. seems like you've created an opportunity to carry the original idea a bit farther, doing it in a church sort of shows how much more she opposes their conventions.

 

[maria1966]

I have another thought what if its a sweet story the young woman dresses like a hussy because she works some where and she is required to dress like that and she falls in love with the disabled veteran character that I previously suggested.

He rescues her from the mean church ladies they fall in love It could turn into a great love story.

that ends sadly she leaves town never to return and he is left broken hearted because the only woman that he ever truly loved has broken his heart.

And he lives the rest of his life miserable and unhappy and when he dies many years later he dies from a broken heart

 

[maria1966]

What if this story was interracial? For many years African American were treated worse than shit!

It could be an African American lady and a white man he falls in love with her but the town is full of bigots who despise her because of her race.

But this one young man loves her despite their different races.

 

[Sean Renaud]

I think that changes the dynamic of the story a whole lot.