I'm new here, and I'm working on a series of stories

[Lost_In_Eden]

Hey everyone, I'm new here, and I just wanted to run an idea for a series of stories I've been thinking about writing by everyone here, get some feedback, suggestions and comments about it.

The story revolves around two main characters. The first is a woman in her mid to late twenties named Angela. She's an extremely intelligent, highly sexual, fairly dominant and drop dead gorgeous woman who has a thing for younger guys. The idea I have for her is that she's a college professor. I'm thinking an English or psychology professor.

The second character is Spencer. He's eighteen, small, frail and timid. Angela seduces him and wants to mold him into her perfect lover. I don't really have too much of a personality built around him yet, but I'm working on it. I'm thinking that their families are close, and that's how they know each other. He's had a crush on Angela for years, and since she took his virginity, he's fallen in love with her.

I wrote sort of a teaser for the story just now. I'm including the entire thing below. It takes place shortly after the sexual side of their relationship starts. This is told from her perspective.


“This is really doing it for me,” I said in my best phone sex voice as I held Spencer closer to me, burying his face in my breasts. All my sweet little Spencey could do is moan into my breasts as he dry humped my leg like a desperate dog unable to control himself. “No, no, you bad little boy,” I said with a chuckle. “You'll blow your load too fast if you keep that up.” He would, too. Up until a couple days ago, Spencer had no experience with women. Not surprising, really. Not that Spencer's ugly or unpleasant to be around or anything. To the contrary. He's sweet, gentle, small, frail... Everything a girl his age finds boring. Women my age do too, but I'm different. I find that to be very arousing. You might call me a bit of a predator and I won't deny that, but my “prey” certainly enjoys the... companionship I provide. Spencer's my perfect fucktoy, though. He's about five feet tall, barely over 120 pounds, he has a somewhat girly voice... He's the perfect submissive plaything from a physical standpoint. And he's eighteen and still in high school, which really gets me going. I love the younger guys. And he's hung too. Nine inches, to be exact. Given how tiny he is otherwise, the thing looks cartoonishly huge.

If he kept humping against me, he'd cream his jeans and I wouldn't get any of that cum where I wanted it, which is anywhere outside of his pants. He hadn't masturbated since our last time together, which was two days ago. He was ready to pop at any moment.

So, I pushed him onto the bed and started taking off my clothes. “Angela?” he piped up in that girly, nasal voice of his. I felt my pussy twitch a bit. He's so sweet and innocent sounding. As I dropped the last item of clothing I was wearing onto the floor, I crawled onto the bed and started getting his pants off. “What's on your mind, sweetie?” I asked. He averted eye contact bashfully. “Look at me,” I said in a stern, but gentle tone as I finally got his jeans off. He wasn't wearing underpants. Little pervert. His big, fat cock was fully erect and pointing right at me. He still hadn't said what he wanted to say, so I gave him an ultimatum.

“If you don't say what you wanted to say, I won't touch it. I have all day, Spencer.” He still wouldn't say it. “Or maybe I could just stop what we're doing if you're gonna keep secrets from me.” He still hesitated. Little bastard knew I was bluffing. I grabbed the base of his dick in my hand and lowered myself onto him. He grabbed my breasts and started pawing them. “So... big!” he moaned, obviously trying to hold himself back from cumming. “I know, you are,” I replied through a smirk. Then he tensed up. Orgasm. I felt his first blast inside of me, and with the second, he screamed out at the top of his lungs, “I love you, Angela!”

As I finished fucking the cum out of him, I collapsed on top of him and fed my right breast into his mouth. “I love you too,” I said. I was just telling him what he wanted to hear, but it felt nice hearing him say it and it felt nice saying it back.

 

[stlgoddessfreya]

So, where's the tension? She's a perfect 10 in all aspects, he's less than her in every department. If she could have anyone, why does she choose this guy? His malleability? Why doesn't he jump at the chance to do whatever she says right away? By all means, two people who want to fuck each other getting exactly what they want can be a story, just not a very long one before my mind would wander if that's all that's happening.

 

[Hypoxia]

Throw in some bi-swingers, some aliens, and some unicorns, and it'll be just fine.

 

[Lost_In_Eden]

So, where's the tension? She's a perfect 10 in all aspects, he's less than her in every department. If she could have anyone, why does she choose this guy? His malleability? Why doesn't he jump at the chance to do whatever she says right away? By all means, two people who want to fuck each other getting exactly what they want can be a story, just not a very long one before my mind would wander if that's all that's happening.

Thanks for the reply and the feedback. I appreciate it.

I'm thinking that, yes, she chooses him because of his malleability. She's molding him into a perfect fucktoy. Also, he's easily available to her due to the connection between their families. Besides, he's not the only person she's screwing around with.

As for the tension, that will come about from a few areas. She doesn't take him seriously and treats him like a kid. This frustrates him like it would anyone. He's fallen in love with her, and she's only using him for sex. She thinks it's silly for him to want more and it should be enough for a guy like him to just be having sex with a woman like her regularly. He also doesn't like that she's fucking other people. And since I want this to be a love story as well, she's in denial that her lust for him might be turning into love as well.

And of course, she's a college professor and she's sleeping with at least one eighteen year old student. That could damage a reputation pretty badly.

There's a few other ideas I have, but at the moment, these are the ones I'm figuring out how to work with.

 

[stlgoddessfreya]

Ah, so you have a story where she's a real alpha female, used to having a string of men do what she wants, when she wants, which either makes her blind to the risks she's taking (sex with students, sex in places where she could be caught at work, being careless with men who are jealous) and her weakest link is Spencer. She underestimates him because she thinks she's in total control of him because she dominates him physically and sexually, but he has other plans to make her his alone. I like it.

 

[Lost_In_Eden]

So, I've been writing a lot with this project over the weekend and intend to do some more in the coming days. I've written a few "scenes" and I'm not sure if I'm going to use them or not, but I haven't gotten into the meat of the story yet.

The thing is that I feel like it might help if I had someone to bounce some ideas off of, and perhaps have someone read what I write to provide feedback. I'd certainly be willing to do the same for anyone who wants to help me out. So, if anyone wants to help a newbie out, send me a PM or reply here on this thread.

 

[eunicebabegirl]

I really liked the sample. I think it would make a really good series that shows her growth to loving only him and maybe how they try to be accepted among family because of the age difference. Personally, I would still love her dominating nature to be present as well as him being sexually submissive as the grow together.

 

[JAMESBJOHNSON]

Hey everyone, I'm new here, and I just wanted to run an idea for a series of stories I've been thinking about writing by everyone here, get some feedback, suggestions and comments about it.

The story revolves around two main characters. The first is a woman in her mid to late twenties named Angela. She's an extremely intelligent, highly sexual, fairly dominant and drop dead gorgeous woman who has a thing for younger guys. The idea I have for her is that she's a college professor. I'm thinking an English or psychology professor.

The second character is Spencer. He's eighteen, small, frail and timid. Angela seduces him and wants to mold him into her perfect lover. I don't really have too much of a personality built around him yet, but I'm working on it. I'm thinking that their families are close, and that's how they know each other. He's had a crush on Angela for years, and since she took his virginity, he's fallen in love with her.

I wrote sort of a teaser for the story just now. I'm including the entire thing below. It takes place shortly after the sexual side of their relationship starts. This is told from her perspective.


“This is really doing it for me,” I said in my best phone sex voice as I held Spencer closer to me, burying his face in my breasts. All my sweet little Spencey could do is moan into my breasts as he dry humped my leg like a desperate dog unable to control himself. “No, no, you bad little boy,” I said with a chuckle. “You'll blow your load too fast if you keep that up.” He would, too. Up until a couple days ago, Spencer had no experience with women. Not surprising, really. Not that Spencer's ugly or unpleasant to be around or anything. To the contrary. He's sweet, gentle, small, frail... Everything a girl his age finds boring. Women my age do too, but I'm different. I find that to be very arousing. You might call me a bit of a predator and I won't deny that, but my “prey” certainly enjoys the... companionship I provide. Spencer's my perfect fucktoy, though. He's about five feet tall, barely over 120 pounds, he has a somewhat girly voice... He's the perfect submissive plaything from a physical standpoint. And he's eighteen and still in high school, which really gets me going. I love the younger guys. And he's hung too. Nine inches, to be exact. Given how tiny he is otherwise, the thing looks cartoonishly huge.

If he kept humping against me, he'd cream his jeans and I wouldn't get any of that cum where I wanted it, which is anywhere outside of his pants. He hadn't masturbated since our last time together, which was two days ago. He was ready to pop at any moment.

So, I pushed him onto the bed and started taking off my clothes. “Angela?” he piped up in that girly, nasal voice of his. I felt my pussy twitch a bit. He's so sweet and innocent sounding. As I dropped the last item of clothing I was wearing onto the floor, I crawled onto the bed and started getting his pants off. “What's on your mind, sweetie?” I asked. He averted eye contact bashfully. “Look at me,” I said in a stern, but gentle tone as I finally got his jeans off. He wasn't wearing underpants. Little pervert. His big, fat cock was fully erect and pointing right at me. He still hadn't said what he wanted to say, so I gave him an ultimatum.

“If you don't say what you wanted to say, I won't touch it. I have all day, Spencer.” He still wouldn't say it. “Or maybe I could just stop what we're doing if you're gonna keep secrets from me.” He still hesitated. Little bastard knew I was bluffing. I grabbed the base of his dick in my hand and lowered myself onto him. He grabbed my breasts and started pawing them. “So... big!” he moaned, obviously trying to hold himself back from cumming. “I know, you are,” I replied through a smirk. Then he tensed up. Orgasm. I felt his first blast inside of me, and with the second, he screamed out at the top of his lungs, “I love you, Angela!”

As I finished fucking the cum out of him, I collapsed on top of him and fed my right breast into his mouth. “I love you too,” I said. I was just telling him what he wanted to hear, but it felt nice hearing him say it and it felt nice saying it back.

I like it, it isn't any good but I like it a lot. It isn't any good means its an uncut, unpolished gem. It has flaws and blemishes but is a gem all the same. It doesn't suck, and that's a lot around here. So! Do something with it. Make it better.

 

[lovecraft68]

Not bad, I have to admit I had a feeling at the start this was going to be a mother/son story. Had that feel to it.

I like the idea of a woman enjoying the young controllable shy boys the way the men like to "take" the inexperienced little girls. I'm all about women on top in porn.

The only thing that bugged me, and take this as what it is which is my opinion, is the 5 foot squirt having the 9" cock. I know its porn and if he had 4 inches the story wouldn't be any fun, but it through me a bit. I know it can happen is possible, but... and the statistic in "9 inches" is a peeve of mine I think it would be better leaving the inches out and going with "Everything about him was tiny and frail except for his huge cock which looked out of place on his small frame....

 

[BonnevilleFlats]

Not bad, I have to admit I had a feeling at the start this was going to be a mother/son story. Had that feel to it.

I like the idea of a woman enjoying the young controllable shy boys the way the men like to "take" the inexperienced little girls. I'm all about women on top in porn.

The only thing that bugged me, and take this as what it is which is my opinion, is the 5 foot squirt having the 9" cock. I know its porn and if he had 4 inches the story wouldn't be any fun, but it through me a bit. I know it can happen is possible, but... and the statistic in "9 inches" is a peeve of mine I think it would be better leaving the inches out and going with "Everything about him was tiny and frail except for his huge cock which looked out of place on his small frame....

Why not except the challenge of creating an erotic story where the male character has a smaller cock? Vaginas vary in size. I've met some women -- especially those who never had children -- with vaginas too small for an above average size cock to get inside.

Perhaps the woman likes smaller cocks because she loves anal and a smaller cock can slip in and out much easier.

 

[stlgoddessfreya]

A Tremendous Wang

As Vonnegut said, you never know who will get one.

 

[lovecraft68]

Why not except the challenge of creating an erotic story where the male character has a smaller cock? Vaginas vary in size. I've met some women -- especially those who never had children -- with vaginas too small for an above average size cock to get inside.

Perhaps the woman likes smaller cocks because she loves anal and a smaller cock can slip in and out much easier.

I'd be all for that, it would be different. Now of course there is a fetish for everything including small cocks so....

But something that comes to mind is as you said there are women for whom large cocks-or sometimes even cocks in the "upper average" range can be painful and they would enjoy sex more with a smaller one.

 

[BonnevilleFlats]

I'd be all for that, it would be different. Now of course there is a fetish for everything including small cocks so....

But something that comes to mind is as you said there are women for whom large cocks-or sometimes even cocks in the "upper average" range can be painful and they would enjoy sex more with a smaller one.

Plus this woman already has a thing for prepubescent looking young men.

"He's about five feet tall, barely over 120 pounds, he has a somewhat girly voice... He's the perfect submissive plaything from a physical standpoint. And he's eighteen and still in high school, which really gets me going. I love the younger guys."

In the very next sentence the author gives the guy a gigantic schlong. It kind of ruins the effect. IMO, you are hedging your bets when you do that. Kind of like writing a story about a 65 year old woman for the Mature section and describing her as not looking a day over 40, no wrinkles, perky breasts, etc...

 

[lovecraft68]

Plus this woman already has a thing for prepubescent looking young men.

"He's about five feet tall, barely over 120 pounds, he has a somewhat girly voice... He's the perfect submissive plaything from a physical standpoint. And he's eighteen and still in high school, which really gets me going. I love the younger guys."

In the very next sentence the author gives the guy a gigantic schlong. It kind of ruins the effect. IMO, you are hedging your bets when you do that. Kind of like writing a story about a 65 year old woman for the Mature section and describing her as not looking a day over 40, no wrinkles, perky breasts, etc...

The only thing is if the boy is that "petite" for lack of a better term and you give him a small dick you're getting close to flirting with under age aspects.

Let's face it when you watch porn some of these 18 year old girls are tiny, smooth all over and some have tiny tits and it always strikes me that they could pass for 14 and how many men are thinking that same thing?

 

[BonnevilleFlats]

The only thing is if the boy is that "petite" for lack of a better term and you give him a small dick you're getting close to flirting with under age aspects.

Let's face it when you watch porn some of these 18 year old girls are tiny, smooth all over and some have tiny tits and it always strikes me that they could pass for 14 and how many men are thinking that same thing?

That is true. I've always gone the opposite way -- had a thing for older women since I was a teenager. But a year ago I submitted a story about a "petite" man and his mother who had a thing for "twinks". I looked at some of the twink sites to research the story and thought exactly the same thing. And if those videos are shot overseas there is no way to prove the actors are over the age of eighteen.

 

[lovecraft68]

That is true. I've always gone the opposite way -- had a thing for older women since I was a teenager. But a year ago I submitted a story about a "petite" man and his mother who had a thing for "twinks". I looked at some of the twink sites to research the story and thought exactly the same thing. And if those videos are shot overseas there is no way to prove the actors are over the age of eighteen.

Yeah and when the balls are shaved its downright disturbing with how much it adds to the "little boy" look. Like the girls with barely any tits.

 

[Lost_In_Eden]

Plus this woman already has a thing for prepubescent looking young men.

"He's about five feet tall, barely over 120 pounds, he has a somewhat girly voice... He's the perfect submissive plaything from a physical standpoint. And he's eighteen and still in high school, which really gets me going. I love the younger guys."

I don't think I implied prepubescent looking here. The guy's really small, physically weak and kind of feminine, and I don't think I implied that she's into prepubescent looking men. I was going for her being really into guys who she can control from a physical standpoint.

In the very next sentence the author gives the guy a gigantic schlong.

I mean... this is porn we're talking about here. I'm intending to write something with more character development and a deeper story than most of your "Insert peg A into slot B, repeat for fifteen minutes" porn videos, but at it's core, the story is still going to be pornographic in nature. So, we're gonna have big tits and big dicks.

 

[BonnevilleFlats]

I don't think I implied prepubescent looking here. The guy's really small, physically weak and kind of feminine, and I don't think I implied that she's into prepubescent looking men. I was going for her being really into guys who she can control from a physical standpoint.



I mean... this is porn we're talking about here. I'm intending to write something with more character development and a deeper story than most of your "Insert peg A into slot B, repeat for fifteen minutes" porn videos, but at it's core, the story is still going to be pornographic in nature. So, we're gonna have big tits and big dicks.

No problem with that. Not everybody who posts stories here, however, considers their work to be "porn". I try to explore the psychological underpinnings of sexual expression and try to create realistic characters whose sexual kinks or whatever are an extension of who they are. Pretentious? Maybe, but this is a huge site and all kinds of writers are attempting to find a readership, both large and niche.

 

[Lost_In_Eden]

No problem with that. Not everybody who posts stories here, however, considers their work to be "porn". I try to explore the psychological underpinnings of sexual expression and try to create realistic characters whose sexual kinks or whatever are an extension of who they are. Pretentious? Maybe, but this is a huge site and all kinds of writers are attempting to find a readership, both large and niche.

Absolutely. I probably see what I'm trying to do similarly to what you see in your own stories. I just don't have any illusions about why people are reading these stories to start with. They may stick around because they get invested in the characters. I certainly have with some of the stories on this site.

I don't see porn as a negative label. It just means something with depictions of sexual acts made to provide sexual arousal to an audience. Sometimes porn is just "insert peg A into slot B," and there's nothing wrong with that. But you can go beyond that and make a smart, interesting piece of literature or film out of what is, at it's core, a story about people fucking.

That's what I'm aiming for. Of course, I'll probably still write a few "Insert peg A into slot B" stories, because those can be fun too.

 

[Trixareforkids]

Absolutely. I probably see what I'm trying to do similarly to what you see in your own stories. I just don't have any illusions about why people are reading these stories to start with.

I don't see porn as a negative label. It just means something with depictions of sexual acts made to provide sexual arousal to an audience. Sometimes porn is just "insert peg A into slot B," and there's nothing wrong with that. But you can go beyond that and make a smart, interesting piece of literature or film out of what is, at it's core, a story about people fucking.

That's what I'm aiming for. Of course, I'll probably still write a few "Insert peg A into slot B" stories, because those can be fun too.

While I agree that there's nothing wrong with porn I don't agree that porn and erotica are the same thing. Porn is all about the sex, erotica is a story that contains sex. I would say that in porn the story is only to set up the sex whereas erotica is truly a story that contains graphic sex. The difference may sound subtle but it"s really not. If the sex enhances the story but the story would still stand without it or with just R rated hints of it, then it's erotica. If on the other hand the story wouldn't exist without the sex then it's porn. Both have their merits and their place but they are not the same.