How to tell if a story I submitted was well received

[Euphony]

Again, you have the Holy Grail on what one must write in writing erotica at home in a bedroom closet?

Where are you getting "must write" from?

Or is Plt just in a mood to be argumentative.? Surprise surprise.

I have faith in the OP that he can understand "choices" whereas all you want to see is commands.

 

[Bramblethorn]

I saw a guy on Howard Stern a couple years back that had a documented 13 1/2 inch wiener (9 inches when flaccid.)

Since I found this website, I noticed that the stories I enjoyed the most had a lot of specific details. Realism didn't bug me but the lack of details & when the characters got to the fucking stage with a flimsy excuse or extremely implausible trick did. I'm a visual guy (I use photoshop all day for my job) and I liked how those details helped me visualize characters in my mind's eye. Here's an example from my story:

"I want all of it Baxter. Don't pull back anymore. Just keep pushing in until you're balls deep!"

She wants all of my cock, I will give her all of my cock. I continued pushing deeper into Alexa's asshole in a slow, but constant motion. Eight 1/2 inches. Nine inches. Alexa is hugging Talia for dear life, their breasts mashed tightly together. Alexa is kissing her deeply but she keeps coming up for air to moan or yelp the deeper I go. Ten inches, ten 1/2 inches now! Alexa is reeling!!!

How much deeper can he go?!? How much more can I take?!? She thought to herself. "I can feel it pulsing deep inside my body like a white-hot steel beam!"

I'm amazed that I have eleven inches of my cock stuffed into my beautiful sister's ass! I am more amazed that I can still push even further inside! It feels so hot and tight! Eleven 1/2 inches now...

Twelve inches...

Twelve and 1/2 inches!!! We freeze in this moment for a good 30 seconds. She is laying against Talia as I lay on top of Alexa's back. We are all breathing heavily. I lean and whisper in Alexa's ear:

"It's all in Alexa. All twelve and 1/2 inches of my fat cock is impaled completely in your perfect ass right now."

In unison, Alexa and Talia, still blindfolded, respond with:

"Twelve and 1/2 inches?!?"

I have to ask. Does he have tattoos marking the half-inch measurements?

 

[Mello_SixtyNine]

The guy's name is Jonah Falcon. He's a white, struggling actor from New York. Google him.

Hell, maybe I should write a story that has him as the main character. This way, people couldn't bitch about it being unrealistic since the dude actually has an enormous wang.

 

[robertreams]

I only had two kinds of negative comments:

First) There were those that hated the story because I switched from 1st-person perspective to 3rd & back again.

My excuse was that it was my first story ever & I was not an english major in college so I didn't know that was a major no-no.

Second) There were those that couldn't stand that the protagonist had a very large penis (12 1/2 inches) & that the twins were unnaturally hot.

I have no excuse for that one. Why write a fantasy sex story about a guy with an average sized dick that fucks his average looking twin sisters? That may be more realistic but I don't think that's hot. If I had to choose between reading a story where Kate Beckinsale gets fucked or Sandra Bernhard, I would literally choose Kate Beckinsale a million times for the simple reason that SHE IS FUCKING HOT! Technically I could visualize Sandra Bernhard getting plowed, but why would I or anyone else want to?

I have actually seen a penis that large. My best friend, my roommate for a while, used to have all the giggly rich girls bring their friends by just to see it. He was 5'2" tall so his cock was almost 20% of his total height. He also had very small hands and feet. he was much younger than I and e came to me for advice on how to make love to womn without hurting them. Apparently this was a problem. I advised him to always keep one hand on his cock.

 

[robertreams]

If you have a reason to use measurements, then do.

It's when people throw huge numbers out there for no other reason then them being out there it seems to fall flat.

When you back them up with a purpose, you actually enhance the story (as you've shown)

But as you've seen in your comments, some people get taken out of the story by extremes. You don't have to cater to them, or me, or anybody.

But if your story wouldn't suffer by dialing it back some, you may end up including more readers than you might otherwise... but only if that's something you wanted to do.

Again, it's all about knowing the landscape and allowing you to make the choice you wanted for the reasons you wished.

I almost always have one character with a very large cock. However, I don't usually refer to inches, it can sometimes sound childish. (see my other comment) But don't let comments like that affect you, especially if they are from my worse critic, anonym-ass. Good luck sounds like you are doig great 33 comments is a lot. Now just hope the Catholic Church bans your stories, lol.

 

[Mello_SixtyNine]

I have actually seen a penis that large. My best friend, my roommate for a while, used to have all the giggly rich girls bring their friends by just to see it. He was 5'2" tall so his cock was almost 20% of his total height. He also had very small hands and feet. he was much younger than I and e came to me for advice on how to make love to womn without hurting them. Apparently this was a problem. I advised him to always keep one hand on his cock.

5'2", Damn! I thought I was pushing it by making my character 5'5". You should write a story about your buddy.

 

[RejectReality]

If that's what turns you on, then by all means, write it. There's absolutely a readership for "bigguns" here. As you've already discovered, such stories also have their detractors, though -- and they're quite loud, obnoxious ones.

Incest/Taboo seems to be especially rife with said detractors.

The number of favorites you have counterbalances those detractors quite nicely, though.

The suggestions to bring it down an inch or two aren't rules, but rather suggestions on reaching an even broader audience. Same goes for the suggestions to avoid direct measurements at all.

You can keep the measurements a little closer to the average or even imply them by other non-numerical means without losing that "Louisville Slugger in his pants" appeal for the majority of those readers you've already drawn in.

Avoiding the direct measurements altogether is especially effective, because it gives the reader more latitude to decide what's "huge" within their own range of suspending disbelief.

It's something to think about in future stories and possibly experiment with as a way to retain the majority of the readers you already have, while picking up new ones who may roll their eyes and back-click upon seeing a 12 incher in a story.

It's always going to be a give and take, though. There are no doubt some who are directly attracted to those measurements, and they may fall by the wayside if you stop using them. On the whole, I think it would end up as a net gain.

 

[StrangeLife]

Avoiding the direct measurements altogether is especially effective, because it gives the reader more latitude to decide what's "huge" within their own range of suspending disbelief.

Second that.

In fact, avoid bodily measurements of any kind - except maybe for height and weight of a character.

 

[lovecraft68]

Where are you getting "must write" from?

Or is Plt just in a mood to be argumentative.? Surprise surprise.

I have faith in the OP that he can understand "choices" whereas all you want to see is commands.

You haven't seen the pattern yet?

No one responded to his first snotty remark so he will repeat himself until someone acknowledges him.

I have not read past this post, but I assume he will now say you are attacking him

 

[A_Little_Show]

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[lovecraft68]

Penis size kinks abound. Some few of us like them small. Unless the size is a critical plot point, I'd not mention it. Then some readers can imagine 15 inches if they want and others can imagine 3. It widens your audience at no cost - even a savings.

When it comes to your taste in women -all I can say is Bleh I may be weird, but I enjoy imagining ordinary people having extraordinary sex. I guess maybe I assume extraordinary people already get it, so there is no story. It's like a news report that says, "There were no traffic accidents in town today." I prefer the "Local gal wins the lottery" kind of story.

I would imagine sex between extraordinary people in real life would suck because they both think they're the shit and why make an effort?

My older cousin once made a remark that although honestly pretty crude and sexist had some merit(and it applies to guys as well)

"average girls are more fun because they try harder."

Like I said, rude, but there is something to it.

And when he said it it struck me because I have always been more of the type to look at the girl next door cute type than the smoking hot bombshell.

 

[JAMESBJOHNSON]

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I would imagine sex between extraordinary people in real life would suck because they both think they're the shit and why make an effort?

My older cousin once made a remark that although honestly pretty crude and sexist had some merit(and it applies to guys as well)

"average girls are more fun because they try harder."

Like I said, rude, but there is something to it.

And when he said it it struck me because I have always been more of the type to look at the girl next door cute type than the smoking hot bombshell.

I wuz lookin at THE NEW SNOOKI last night. She dropped 50 pounds or so, and ruined her hawtness, in my opinion. My eyeballs see the cosmetic changes, but my balls aren't impressed.

 

[lovecraft68]

I wuz lookin at THE NEW SNOOKI last night. She dropped 50 pounds or so, and ruined her hawtness, in my opinion. My eyeballs see the cosmetic changes, but my balls aren't impressed.

Snooki has never done anything for me.

I've always gone for the actresses who are attractive yet not known for "hawtness" a couple of examples from awhile back were Rebecca Demornay Holly Hunter that type.

One woman who drives me nuts is Charisma Carpenter who played the bitchy girl on Buffy.

 

[JAMESBJOHNSON]

Snooki has never done anything for me.

I've always gone for the actresses who are attractive yet not known for "hawtness" a couple of examples from awhile back were Rebecca Demornay Holly Hunter that type.

One woman who drives me nuts is Charisma Carpenter who played the bitchy girl on Buffy.

I'll check her out but my point is ONE SIZE DOESNT FIT ALL. I married a petite Irish redhead who threw the cake at me during the reception. We all know I didn't deserve such rude treatment but a dollop of spirit is good in a girl.

Yum, I could suffer some Charisma Carpenter if I hadda do it.

 

[Euphony]

I've always gone for the actresses who are attractive yet not known for "hawtness" a couple of examples from awhile back were Rebecca Demornay

Risky Business. That is all.

One woman who drives me nuts is Charisma Carpenter who played the bitchy girl on Buffy.

I've not watched Buffy but she was on Veronica Mars (a SERIOUSLY underrated show. No way would I allow myself to like it and damn it, I did and still do)

She played the stepmom who slept with EVERYONE.

Hard to look away it was.

 

[patientlee]

I'll check her out but my point is ONE SIZE DOESNT FIT ALL. I married a petite Irish redhead who threw the cake at me during the reception. We all know I didn't deserve such rude treatment but a dollop of spirit is good in a girl.

Thanks for making me laugh right out loud.

At my wedding I flicked a piece of cake out from under my fake fingernail. It landed in hubby's eye. There was smeared cake across my face afterward, and I didn't know why.

 

[lovecraft68]

I'll check her out but my point is ONE SIZE DOESNT FIT ALL. I married a petite Irish redhead who threw the cake at me during the reception. We all know I didn't deserve such rude treatment but a dollop of spirit is good in a girl.

I married a Sicilian redhead.

The only thing she tries to force on me is food. Her family is not the mobster Italians they are the Mangia Italians.

She's failing miserable. We've been together close to 13 years and I am still a 32 waist

 

[Setanta84]

Second that.

In fact, avoid bodily measurements of any kind - except maybe for height and weight of a character.

I'd avoid that, too, for the most part. Elmore Leonard and Ernest Hemingway both avoided direct description and urged other writers to also avoid it. Their basic reasoning for this is solid.

Think of how is story is literally told. Unless the friend telling you the story is in law enforcement, he isn't likely to offer much in the way of description and especially not extremely specific description. In most stories, you get more of an idea of what a person looks like through characterization and stray observations than a clinical rundown of attributes. E.g. effective writing in fiction isn't 'Betsy was blonde, 5'11'', with 40DD tits, and an ass like an onion' it's more like 'Betsy was a buxom girl and always twisting her hair in that blonde kind of way.'

 

[lovecraft68]

I'd avoid that, too, for the most part. Elmore Leonard and Ernest Hemingway both avoided direct description and urged other writers to also avoid it. Their basic reasoning for this is solid.

Think of how is story is literally told. Unless the friend telling you the story is in law enforcement, he isn't likely to offer much in the way of description and especially not extremely specific description. In most stories, you get more of an idea of what a person looks like through characterization and stray observations than a clinical rundown of attributes. E.g. effective writing in fiction isn't 'Betsy was blonde, 5'11'', with 40DD tits, and an ass like an onion' it's more like 'Betsy was a buxom girl and always twisting her hair in that blonde kind of way.'

I agree.

I stay away from height and weight.

She was tall for a woman and on the slender side

They can decide what is tall for a woman (my guess in my mind is the 5'8" or so range) and picture slender.

I've done "just under six feet" or powerfully built....

I avoid the stats.

 

[JAMESBJOHNSON]

Thanks for making me laugh right out loud.

At my wedding I flicked a piece of cake out from under my fake fingernail. It landed in hubby's eye. There was smeared cake across my face afterward, and I didn't know why.

Do I amuse you? Are you thinking maybe Ima clown? Huh?

At the reception a kid had an allergic reaction to some meat that was tenderized with a popular marinade made from papaya juice. The kid looked like a clown! So everyone stampeded over to the hospital, and left their kids with me and my bride. I hadda problem with THAT. And the bride and I hadda heated quarrel about my attitude, and I ended up wearing the cake. It was like the next day before anyone came back for their children, and they weren't at the hospital keeping vigil.

 

[Blind_Justice]

*pokes head in to see what this is about*
*sees OP's view, vote and fave count, for a debut, of all things*
*leaves quietly to cry in a dark corner*

 

[lovecraft68]

*pokes head in to see what this is about*
*sees OP's view, vote and fave count, for a debut, of all things*
*leaves quietly to cry in a dark corner*

No kidding my debut story in incest was bro/sis and it scored lower in every category especially favs.

Then again when the sex scene consists of an encounter more like a fight than sex and its in a room Marque Desade would be proud of that is bound to not go over well.

 

[RejectReality]

*pokes head in to see what this is about*
*sees OP's view, vote and fave count, for a debut, of all things*
*leaves quietly to cry in a dark corner*

If you pit yourself against Incest numbers in the Sci-Fi&Fantasy category, you'll spend the rest of your life in that dark corner

 

[Blind_Justice]

But I prefer dungeons (the not-BDSM kind), dragons and spaceships over Daddy and the gang porking Little Suzie all at once (who is of course 18 and still hasn't seen a dick before in her life). The former requires much less suspension of disbelief

 

[patientlee]

Do I amuse you? Are you thinking maybe Ima clown? Huh?

At the reception a kid had an allergic reaction to some meat that was tenderized with a popular marinade made from papaya juice. The kid looked like a clown! So everyone stampeded over to the hospital, and left their kids with me and my bride. I hadda problem with THAT. And the bride and I hadda heated quarrel about my attitude, and I ended up wearing the cake. It was like the next day before anyone came back for their children, and they weren't at the hospital keeping vigil.

Oh, my. Allergies suck. My daughter had a reaction to cheese when she was 18 months old. She looked like a picasso for days until she went on steroids. Babysitting on your wedding night. There's birth control for ya.