Divorced woman discovers a sex club/society - WIP

[wishingyou]

I had an idea/fantasy in mind that I wanted to see play out. I started thinking about it in the evenings and playing it out so I decided to try and write it. I haven't written any story on Lit before but I've read a bunch. It's basically a story about a divorced woman who gets a pass to a secret society of pleasure seeking individuals.

Here's a quick snippet. If you're interested in more let me know and I'll share it.

Thanks.

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Lisa was completely caught off guard. Her jaw dropped as a tall handsome man walked into the room wearing only a mask and a small pear of black underwear stepped into the room. As he walked in she noticed another man dressed exactly the same following close behind. The second gentleman was slightly shorter with his hair pulled back into a pony tail. His abs were even more we'll define than the first man. Behind him was a young woman wearing a skimpy thong and bra. They all must have been in their thirties.

"Oh god" Lisa thought to herself. "Strippers." She whispered to herself. She was waiting for the music to kick in like shed experienced at one of her friends bachelorette showers. But instead they walked in complete silence. All in line and the stopped right in front of her. They were in a line facing her.

Lisa's heart began to pound and she felt her cheeks turn bright red. She was immediately bashful. It took her a second before she could look one of them in the eye. She glanced quickly up and the man in the middle was staring past her. She glanced at the other two and they too we're staring across the room. She looked over at the host and as he closed the door and walked up next to the girl at the end. He adjusted her mask a little then turned to face Lisa.

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[_Lynn_]

Three paragraphs is the maximum allowed to post on the forum. If you're looking for someone to continue the piece, you might want to check one of the role playing forums or the story ideas forum.

Please edit your story to three paragraphs.

 

[wishingyou]

Oh. Three paragraphs is so little... I'll see what I can do.

 

[PennLady]

Oh. Three paragraphs is so little... I'll see what I can do.

I think we get the general idea, but this isn't the place to post stories. If you want to write this, then do, and you could go to the Editor's Forum to see if you can find an editor (if you'd like one). Once you've finished, you can submit it for posting and ask for feedback.

FWIW, your basic idea is fine, and I know there are other stories with that same type of idea, so it won't be too "far out" for anyone to believe.

But what it comes down to if is you want to write it, then write it.

 

[wishingyou]

I guess I'm confused with the process. I've got a good portion done and I'm looking for an editor to pair up with and make it better. And get feedback. Is this not the thread for that?

 

[LadyVer]

I guess I'm confused with the process. I've got a good portion done and I'm looking for an editor to pair up with and make it better. And get feedback. Is this not the thread for that?

It's helpful when the writer states in the beginning of their thread that they're looking for an editor and provides the information editors usually find helpful, such as story category, story premise, word count, and what kind of editing the writer is looking for.

If a writer is looking for a co-writer, that information needs to be given as well.

Some writers look for copy editors, those who edit for mechanics. Some look for developmental editors, those who edit for plot, characters, theme, etc. Some editors do both copy and developmental editing, although I think on Lit most editors focus on either copy editing or developmental editing.

For writers wanting story feedback, the best forum for that is the Story Feedback forum, although the Story Idea forum is useful for new story ideas.

 

[wishingyou]

Initially I'd like a fresh pair of eyes on the story as it unfolds to make sure the way it unfolds makes sense. Since I know where the story goes it's hard to be objective about whether leading into situations made sense and were clear. If there are slow or fluff that should be cut I'd like to cut those.

 

[LadyVer]

Initially I'd like a fresh pair of eyes on the story as it unfolds to make sure the way it unfolds makes sense. Since I know where the story goes it's hard to be objective about whether leading into situations made sense and were clear. If there are slow or fluff that should be cut I'd like to cut those.

What is the word count, or expected word count?

 

[wishingyou]

Right now it's just about to 3,000. I'm thinking it will end up being 4,000 to 4,500.

 

[wishingyou]

What is the word count, or expected word count?

A huge thank you to LadyVer for helping edit my story! She did a phenomenal job helping me with my story.

Lisa and the society:
http://www.literotica.com/s/lisa-and-the-society

 

[LadyVer]

You're welcome, WY. Looking forward to a sequel.

 

[sr71plt]

I guess I'm confused with the process. I've got a good portion done and I'm looking for an editor to pair up with and make it better. And get feedback. Is this not the thread for that?

Editing comes after you've finished writing (and polishing as best you can) the story. There are both Story Discussion and Story Ideas forums here for bouncing around ideas earlier than that in the process. And then there's a Story Feedback forum for asking for discussion on it after it's been posted to the Literotica story file.