Muslim Cleric's daughter

[Scheherazade88]

Hi There,

I am new here. I was thinking of Muslim cleric's daughter gone bad kinda story. Her family moves to the United States- and she goes bad. But I am not sure how, what happens to her and what she does? What would your suggests for a story be? What would you like to happen? I want the story to be hot, so any kind of feedback would be great. I am also happy to co-author if anyones interested?

 

[Setanta84]

What, exactly, does 'go bad; mean in this context and how quickly do you want her to make that progression? Does she start by showing an ankle or strand of hair in public? Does she pilfer the car keys and take a 5 minute drive around the block?

 

[Scheherazade88]

Thanks for getting back to me. Bad is in going from a good girl who wears a headscarf into a nympho- that is basically the idea. I my idea is she starts off by having sex (possible) while she still wears the headscarf- but eventually takes it off and then goes even more wild.

 

[Setanta84]

Besides 'becomes a nympho,' do you have any ideas about what motivates her to break the rules? What she might find attractive? Scary? Pleasuring? Unpleasant?

 

[Scheherazade88]

Well I thought it would start of as she comes of age. She is secretly in love with a more American lifestyle- her hidden sexual desires become to much to control. She starts off secretly viewing Porn- but this is not enough. And eventually, as she starts off at her local college she meets a guy who works on her.

But I am quiet open to alternative plot lines. If anyone has others.

 

[Setanta84]

I'm open to developing this. Turn your PMs on and send one over.

 

[Valentina93]

So you want her to be a slut? Nice. She could even go around the country having sex. Does she like being used? Or does she want gentle guys?

 

[Scheherazade88]

It could be a progression from gentle to being used

 

[Sean Renaud]

Do not use PMs for story ideas! The only time you should ever do this is if you are sharing sensitive information. Otherwise this is the ideal place to hold the conversation so other people can jump in with ideas.

Just so that's not the only thing I say in this thread let me add.

Here's the catch here. First the vast majority of readers and writers don't really know anything about Islam and it's culture. Certianly nothing that you can't glean by watching a season of 24. I know that with this story we are starting (kinda) from an Islam=Bad point of view but that generally leads to a poor story if you're story is supposed to be about growth and not just smut. And if she's just smutty well leave her in an Islamic Country, let her get slutty with her local military lads and end the story with a big America Fuck Yeah sequence where she's about to be stoned for her sins but they swoop in on a helicopter shoot everybody and ride out into the sunset making out on a rope ladder. (Actually that sounds pretty fucking epic.)

If that's not the case and you want a more balanced look you gotta dig a little deeper and slow her burn a little or a lot.

 

[MatthewVett]

I had a cute Muslim friend who was like this. Good little Muslim girl about everything but sex. Didn't drink, didn't eat pork, but she loved showing off her perfect DDs and using those plump, thick, luscious lips of hers. It was such a turn on to see her with a hijab on and a top off. I love the story idea.

If I wrote it, I'd probably have her stumble across some sort of sexual situation that makes her curious. She starts out pure. Her family moved to the US when she was young, so she's grown up here, but her family's still strict, and doesn't let her date. One day while she's out with some friends, and one of them mentions glory holes. She doesn't believe them, so they take her to a place nearby that has a reputation, and she sees her first cock, and she's struck. Her friends laugh, but she can't get it out of her mind. She starts looking up porn, but it doesn't satisfy her. She has to try it out herself...

I'd probably go from there. Maybe she ends up sucking off a friend, who ends up blackmailing her to keep it a secret from her family.

 

[Scheherazade88]

So Sean, that being the case how should this story grow? How does one vary away from what you discussed.


Good Idea Matthew

 

[Dazzle1]

Hi There,

I am new here. I was thinking of Muslim cleric's daughter gone bad kinda story. Her family moves to the United States- and she goes bad. But I am not sure how, what happens to her and what she does? What would your suggests for a story be? What would you like to happen? I want the story to be hot, so any kind of feedback would be great. I am also happy to co-author if anyones interested?

How about:

The woman sees that in a free society the restriction of the sharia life style are not for her.

so she defies her father's primitive dictates and became a modern woman. Perhaps each chapter have her exploring a different type of experience.

 

[sirhugs]

All I know is that my cock throbs just at the thought of reading the part where the full body burqa is unwrapped from around her to reveal her lush body...

 

[Tmmldr]

All I know is that my cock throbs just at the thought of reading the part where the full body burqa is unwrapped from around her to reveal her lush body...

Aw hell yeah!

What's cool about this idea is that it reads natural for the girl to swing in the direction of full nympo just as far as she was repressed!

And there's the day when she introduces her three hot girlfriends in full cover to the hard cocks sticking through the holes.

 

[Sean Renaud]

Honestly by listening to Matthew who other than I think I would have her move as a young adult rather than a young child and by disregarding Dazzle.

Again if the point is that Islam is a primitive religion of cave people lets just play soldiers and Taliban.

I would have the woman have at least one or two negative consequences. A guy who's only with her because he wants that thing and when she goes crying home to Mommy and Daddy they both point out that if you're walking around in a halter top, mini skirt and fuck-me boots that you're going to attract men who are more interested in your body than you mind. I wasn't excluding myself when I said most Americans know nothing about Islam though. I'm sure there is at least one more Islamic rule that makes sense within context.

 

[Tmmldr]

Honestly by listening to Matthew who other than I think I would have her move as a young adult rather than a young child and by disregarding Dazzle.

Again if the point is that Islam is a primitive religion of cave people lets just play soldiers and Taliban.

I would have the woman have at least one or two negative consequences. A guy who's only with her because he wants that thing and when she goes crying home to Mommy and Daddy they both point out that if you're walking around in a halter top, mini skirt and fuck-me boots that you're going to attract men who are more interested in your body than you mind....

that's not the way it would work - they'd be shouting at her for associating with infidels and they'd go stark raving nuts if they thought one had touched her...

likely as not beating her up, maybe kicking her out of the house.

 

[Sean Renaud]

that's not the way it would work - they'd be shouting at her for associating with infidels and they'd go stark raving nuts if they thought one had touched her...

likely as not beating her up, maybe kicking her out of the house.

Assuming you're going with a sterotypical muslim family, which like I said if that's the story lets just skip to the America Fuck Yeah theme song and blow up a few rag head countries while we're at it.

They aren't all evil barbarians you know.

 

[astuffedshirt_perv]

LOVE the idea. Culture clash can be fun, and like Sean points out no one knows anything about Islam anyway, so you can make the belief system anything you want. Heck, put her in Purdah, but as the eldest the family lets her out to buy milk at the the corner store. Meets this guy, he says he has something to show her in the back, shows her...

 

[Slashed_Pearl]

My approach would be
-She meets her man through College, as it's one of the few places where she's exposed to many different people and their ideas, but her father must accept that risk.

-Her man is a hustler, is someone deep into excess, who is also a gentleman--a dark prince--pagan and hedonist, but who ultimately feels trapped by the thought of life as a hustle.
By contrast, she comes from a faith that believes in modesty and self-discipline--but feels her body is controlled. Their romance stems from a curiosity towards each other.

And yes I mentioned romance.

SP

 

[Tmmldr]

Assuming you're going with a sterotypical muslim family, which like I said if that's the story lets just skip to the America Fuck Yeah theme song and blow up a few rag head countries while we're at it.

They aren't all evil barbarians you know.

Why? Your statement is clearly false and unduly polarizing. Replace 'strict fundamentalist Christian' for 'Muslim' in my comment and the statement is equally true. And in that case no one would argue 'let's just skip to the ...."

There isn't anything wrong with looking at these people the way they actually are. What I said in opposition to your argument that Westerners typically know little about Islam, was simply that that is very easy to research.

The only problem with that is that what you find is going to tend to be disgusting if not totally revolting. The sorts of family conflict that arise are not and will not provide nice comfy settings for porn.

 

[Scheherazade88]

All very interesting ideas, here is what I think everyone's agreed on. It should be built up, innocence and the loss of innocence, cultural clash and should lead her to self-discovery and a new life.

Have I summed it up correctly and does anyone else have anything to add?

 

[Scheherazade88]

And as an Arab Female Writer, I will try and capture these cultural aspects right. So there is very little worry there.

 

[Sean Renaud]

Why? Your statement is clearly false and unduly polarizing. Replace 'strict fundamentalist Christian' for 'Muslim' in my comment and the statement is equally true. And in that case no one would argue 'let's just skip to the ...."

There isn't anything wrong with looking at these people the way they actually are. What I said in opposition to your argument that Westerners typically know little about Islam, was simply that that is very easy to research.

The only problem with that is that what you find is going to tend to be disgusting if not totally revolting. The sorts of family conflict that arise are not and will not provide nice comfy settings for porn.

No it's not. Nobody would expect a Strict Fundamentalist family to kill the daughter for her actions. She'd get sent off to Boarding school or to live at a convent. Not STONED. (Which in all fairness can and does happen in the real world today.) So there is a difference.

I wasn't arguing that people shouldn't do the research, I was arging specifically against that's not the way it would happen.

Your last paragraph conflicts with your first by the by. Like I said if that is that attitude we are heading in with lets just skip to the fun part and blow up some people. Same story, same ugliness, same complete failure to note any of the positives of the religion more feel good pro-west murder! It'll be like 24 with sex. Hell we should throw in a terrorist plot while we're at it for good measure.

 

[sirhugs]

No it's not. Nobody would expect a Strict Fundamentalist family to kill the daughter for her actions. She'd get sent off to Boarding school or to live at a convent. Not STONED. (Which in all fairness can and does happen in the real world today.) So there is a difference.

I wasn't arguing that people shouldn't do the research, I was arging specifically against that's not the way it would happen.

Your last paragraph conflicts with your first by the by. Like I said if that is that attitude we are heading in with lets just skip to the fun part and blow up some people. Same story, same ugliness, same complete failure to note any of the positives of the religion more feel good pro-west murder! It'll be like 24 with sex. Hell we should throw in a terrorist plot while we're at it for good measure.

real life honour killings even occur in N America- the family from Montreal who sent the women off the bridge in Kingston being a famous example:
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Shafia_family_murders

 

[Sean Renaud]

real life honour killings even occur in N America- the family from Montreal who sent the women off the bridge in Kingston being a famous example:
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Shafia_family_murders

While I may have implied it a bit I didn't say they didn't. That's kind of my point about why you can't substitute Islam for Strict Catholisism in this case. A Muslim family doing something horrible is not only believable it's as TMMM pointed out expected. Nobody really expects the same of the Catholics.