Collective story

[littlelulu30]

Hi doms and subs! I find collective writing fascinating. I happen to be inclined towards the D/s side and I would like to develop a story of that kind. So I have just started with the following passage. If someone feels like contributing, please feel free. I hope that writers and readers enjoy this initiative.

They met on a working day. At a pub he regularly attended with his workmates. They were introduced by one of his male associates, a sociable handy man. She was new to the city. She was a foreigner too and was trying to blend in with the British folks. He followed her form all the way down to the counter when she went to ask for an apple juice. She was an average sight, small thin brown haired girl. Her slim body and complexion made her look at least ten years younger. He felt frustrated when he tried to determine the curve of her hips and the size of her breasts. She was wearing a long loose summer dress. She moved back to the table where the group was chatting animatedly. Her voice sounded soft and low when she answered a typical question by one of the guys. He didn´t like this course of events though. He had already made his decision. He wasn´t letting her flirt with any of those morons. His gaze hardened involuntarily at her. She was drawn to meet the eyes that had set on her so intensely. She looked puzzled, even frightened for a few seconds. Then, she tried to hide her lack of confidence behind a flashing smile, which he took as a deviant gesture. The next ten minutes, while the rest was engaged in a mindless conversation, he set up a complete scheme for her. His mind was racing at 100 miles per minute, fixing her with his gaze. The plan started right then and there.
When the assembly began to tidy up and stand to leave, he stayed in place, casually finishing his drink. He knew she didn´t have a chance to leave without asking him to move. He smiled at her wickedly. The poor creature looked startled. She resolved to end that scene and stood in a swift quick movement. “Excuseme”, her demanding tone echoed loudly in the cubicle that formed their table.
- Are you in a hurry? – He was mocking her. He still didn´t move.
He looked up baldly and buried his sight into the curve of her breasts. She clearly felt his aggressive approach. However, she chose to stop having second thoughts about the guy’s intentions. It was just a casual meeting after work. Nothing remarkable was happening. She sat down again and she started taking out her scarf and put it around her neck. She wanted to show him that she hadn´t abandoned her iniciative to leave. Only when he took the last exasperatingly small sip of his drink it was obvious to her how oblivious he was being to her purpose. It felt even more awkward when the last of the guys waved to them from the front door. She would have felt better if there was some reason to be held back, some conversation going. That would have been normal. However, the man was freakingly silent.
- Well, I´m working tomorrow and there is always so much traffic after…
- Hush, baby, we’ll be leaving in a minute. – he had jerked down her upper arm with his paw and showed no intention of releasing her.

 

[Stella_Omega]

This is not BDSM, as it is currently practiced. We start with people who already know that they are kinky, and we begin their relationship with informed consent.

We don't go finding "poor creatures" and physically restraining them from leaving. That's non-consent and the beginnings of rape.

 

[MeekMe]

( =.=#) Does he stalk her and go to her work to buy zip ties? If so, I've read part of this story and it's all the warning signs of a serial killer.

 

[littlelulu30]

I didn´t mean this story to fall into the category of non-consent and i don´t think i did. I was just trying to build a strong male character and the classic helpless girl. The fact that he is so pushy is just to enhance the atmosphere of domination. And this is only fiction, of course. The magic about writing is that you could make anything happen. It doesn´t have to be politically correct or stick to whatever rules of the stablishment. Hope this clears the path for anyone who finds it good enough and wishes to participate.

 

[Stella_Omega]

She tore her arm out of his grasp. Then she tore his arm off -- and beat him about the head and shoulders with it.

"What made you think you could ever dominate me?" she demanded. "Don't you know how I am?" I am Madame Domme Countessa De Duchesse, and you have forfeited your freedom. You poor one-armed bastard, you will be my toilet slave forever more. Worship your goddess!"

He would have fallen to his knees and moaned his assent except he'd already fainted at the sight of his own blood.

***


(This forum is full of people who play and practice and live the lifestyle. Try the SRP forum, you might find people who don't give a fuck about actual BDSM there.)

 

[lovecraft68]

( =.=#) Does he stalk her and go to her work to buy zip ties? If so, I've read part of this story and it's all the warning signs of a serial killer.

Damn, beat me to it!

 

[lovecraft68]

She tore her arm out of his grasp. Then she tore his arm off -- and beat him about the head and shoulders with it.

"What made you think you could ever dominate me?" she demanded. "Don't you know how I am?" I am Madame Domme Countessa De Duchesse, and you have forfeited your freedom. You poor one-armed bastard, you will be my toilet slave forever more. Worship your goddess!"

He would have fallen to his knees and moaned his assent except he'd already fainted at the sight of his own blood.

***


(This forum is full of people who play and practice and live the lifestyle. Try the SRP forum, you might find people who don't give a fuck about actual BDSM there.)

I think this person has been reading those books I was telling you about

 

[lovecraft68]

I didn´t mean this story to fall into the category of non-consent and i don´t think i did. I was just trying to build a strong male character and the classic helpless girl. The fact that he is so pushy is just to enhance the atmosphere of domination. And this is only fiction, of course. The magic about writing is that you could make anything happen. It doesn´t have to be politically correct or stick to whatever rules of the stablishment. Hope this clears the path for anyone who finds it good enough and wishes to participate.

What you're missing is that no matter how submissive a woman(or man) is, they give consent.

It is a huge myth that a master will find a girl with no experience whatsoever and start in on her. They cannot give consent if they have no real idea what they are in for.

Real d/s is practiced between two informed adults who know exactly what is wanted and expected of them.

And yes, of course it is fiction, but....

You're in the forum that is designed around the true lifestyle and this will not get a warm welcome as Stella said, head on over to the SRP thread, you'll get some bites over there I am sure.

 

[Stella_Omega]

I think this person has been reading those books I was telling you about

I was thinking the same thing.

"Classic," my classical asshole.

 

[Sweetdaisymae]

Why should the sub be a classic helpless girl? Most subs I know are far from that and are in reality intelligent, articulate and often downright bolshy.
Not many Doms want a complete doormat. How boring would that be?

 

[MeekMe]

She tore her arm out of his grasp. Then she tore his arm off -- and beat him about the head and shoulders with it.

"What made you think you could ever dominate me?" she demanded. "Don't you know how I am?" I am Madame Domme Countessa De Duchesse, and you have forfeited your freedom. You poor one-armed bastard, you will be my toilet slave forever more. Worship your goddess!"

He would have fallen to his knees and moaned his assent except he'd already fainted at the sight of his own blood.

***


(This forum is full of people who play and practice and live the lifestyle. Try the SRP forum, you might find people who don't give a fuck about actual BDSM there.)

(⌒▽⌒) LMFAO! I want a name like Madame Domme Contessa De Duchese!

 

[lovecraft68]

Why should the sub be a classic helpless girl? Most subs I know are far from that and are in reality intelligent, articulate and often downright bolshy.
Not many Doms want a complete doormat. How boring would that be?

It would be disconcerting to someone who is pretty much looking to deal out a beating.

The classic helpless female trope has been magnified to the Nth degree by 50 Shades-and Twilight for the younger girls- and that is certainly not the only book and no where near the "worst" for portraying doms as being abusive and subs being victims, but is by far the biggest and because it became so mainstream, these tropes are going to get worse and worse.

 

[Sweetdaisymae]

It would be disconcerting to someone who is pretty much looking to deal out a beating.

The classic helpless female trope has been magnified to the Nth degree by 50 Shades-and Twilight for the younger girls- and that is certainly not the only book and no where near the "worst" for portraying doms as being abusive and subs being victims, but is by far the biggest and because it became so mainstream, these tropes are going to get worse and worse.

That is the trouble, very many so called BDSM stories, bear so little resemblance to reality, they should be reclassified as romantic fiction (with whips) bah humbug!!

 

[littlelulu30]

Yep, again, I am fully aware about the prerequisites regarding consent and so do readers who turn to this kind of literature. Thanks for taking the time to write such a delightful turn of events Thanks for your advice too but SNC does not interest me. Of course, I wouldn´t dare to say that all subs are the shy type, let alone doormats, or that doms do act in this manner. I think you’re making too many assumptions just after a few lines. You don´t seem to understand that in fiction, character traits may be magnified to enhance intensity. Ok, not your thing, but how would that affect people’s views about bdsm? Don´t you enjoy action movies? These characters and this scene provide a frame for the domination, that’s all it intends to do. And yes, literary speaking, I didn´t want to come up with something different to the popular fiction erotica you’re referring to, I enjoy reading it. I think they do fall into the category of romantic fiction but then, couldn’t bdsm be romantic?

 

[Bramblethorn]

I didn´t mean this story to fall into the category of non-consent and i don´t think i did. I was just trying to build a strong male character and the classic helpless girl. The fact that he is so pushy is just to enhance the atmosphere of domination. And this is only fiction, of course. The magic about writing is that you could make anything happen. It doesn´t have to be politically correct or stick to whatever rules of the stablishment.

No, you don't. You can write about Captain Kirk in a PVC nurse's outfit knocking back pina coladas if that's what floats your boat.

But if you call it "The Adventures of Jim Kirk" and the "Kirk" character is a shy orphan who lives under the stairs in his uncle's place, suspension of disbelief won't save you from readers who are grumpy that your story's been misrepresented. And so it is with labelling "obnoxious creep who grabs a woman without her consent" as BDSM.

 

[Sweetdaisymae]

It is more, when you choose to, or feel compelled to live a certain way and feel deeply about the way of life you have chosen, albeit alternative, edgy, marginalised, misunderstood, vilified, demonised, need I go on.
When the very misrepresented lifestyle I lead, is portrayed in such a way as to further misrepresent it, I care.
I care because it holds up a false image to the general public, and says "look, this is BDSM, this is what those deviants do behind closed doors, these are their values and their moralities."
Take, for example, the non con argument. In reality I do not know a single lifestyle BDSMer who would do this. It is abuse. We do much that the mainstream world would consider abusive, I actually enjoy being flogged for example, but always ensuring that it is consensual. No consent = abuse.
I would no more write an article about climbing everest, without first talking to climbers and understanding how they would undertake an extreme climb. Researching thoroughly the subject.
BDSM is the same. It isn't just kinky sex. It is so very multi faceted and filled with profound meaning for its participants. I do not want to be portrayed as broken or weak or naieve or as a victim. As a submissive, I am none of those things.
Before writing, do something that E.L. James didn't do, research!

 

[Oubliette123]

It is more, when you choose to, or feel compelled to live a certain way and feel deeply about the way of life you have chosen, albeit alternative, edgy, marginalised, misunderstood, vilified, demonised, need I go on.
When the very misrepresented lifestyle I lead, is portrayed in such a way as to further misrepresent it, I care.
I care because it holds up a false image to the general public, and says "look, this is BDSM, this is what those deviants do behind closed doors, these are their values and their moralities."
Take, for example, the non con argument. In reality I do not know a single lifestyle BDSMer who would do this. It is abuse. We do much that the mainstream world would consider abusive, I actually enjoy being flogged for example, but always ensuring that it is consensual. No consent = abuse.
I would no more write an article about climbing everest, without first talking to climbers and understanding how they would undertake an extreme climb. Researching thoroughly the subject.
BDSM is the same. It isn't just kinky sex. It is so very multi faceted and filled with profound meaning for its participants. I do not want to be portrayed as broken or weak or naieve or as a victim. As a submissive, I am none of those things.
Before writing, do something that E.L. James didn't do, research!

Absolutely agree with this.

I really feel these stories (including the well known grey one's) are straight from a persons head and not spoken with an experience of reality. There is a world of difference between the stereotypical weak willed, shy and broken submissive and most subs in real life. It takes great strength to submit to someone, whether its for love or pure play. Physical strength and mental strength in my opinion, is essential for stamina in scenes/play.

I am a very strong willed person, naturally quite feisty and run my own business, a mother, a housewife and study at uni. I can be a challenge (he likes this) and a headache-but that's another story lol. The point is, I am strong enough to submit to his will, and I think most subs will agree there is great strength in what we chose to do.

It pains me to think that society view the submissive as being abused, belittled and used. But even worse is to see the sub as being rescued and reformed. Ugh!

 

[Stella_Omega]

You don´t seem to understand that in fiction, character traits may be magnified to enhance intensity. Ok, not your thing, but how would that affect people’s views about bdsm?

It's affected yours. You seem to think that grabbing a strange woman by the arm is romantic. What gave you that idea? I can tell you-- it's all of the BDSM novels that you've read, all of them written by ignorant writers.

Don´t you enjoy action movies?

Not as much as you'd think, since I am always forcibly made aware of the fact that they never have me in them. People like me get mocked in action movies, we get killed, we get served right. Mainstream white men win, every time.

These characters and this scene provide a frame for the domination, that’s all it intends to do.

You've set up a frame for a stranger to rape a timid girl.

And yes, literary speaking, I didn´t want to come up with something different to the popular fiction erotica you’re referring to, I enjoy reading it. I think they do fall into the category of romantic fiction but then, couldn’t bdsm be romantic?

Incredibly romantic. But bodice rippers are only one kind of romance, and most of us enjoy something deeper and more fulfilling.

Well, you can, if you want, resort to the tired old shitty stereotypes that have been promoted by ignorant scandal mongers (and the establishment, for that matter). And I am sure you will find a market for them. 16 year old girls, or sheltered housewifes, should any still exist.

But your market is not here.

 

[KoPilot]

These characters and this scene provide a frame for the domination, that’s all it intends to do.

I've been on the receiving end of the guy that you think is being so romantic, and trust me, it's not. Taking advantage of a timid person isn't dominance by any stretch of the imagination; trying to get what you want without asking is cowardice.

 

[MeekMe]

No matter the guy, stranger, coworker, friend... I'd get very defensive if he grabbed me like that. I might make a scene to get the attention of people around us. I wouldn't consider him a romantic interest.

I am a shy, timid girl. I'm also submissive, I just know the difference between creep and potential partner. (￣^￣)ゞ don't lump me in with some idiot shell of a character.

 

[Sir_Winston54]

Sorry to burst your bubble, lulu, but I really don't think you'll find much of anyone here - those who actually live and are familiar with the BDSM culture - who would be interested in writing along the premises you've already set in your first paragraph, even those who occasionally, or even often, write in the non-con genre.

 

[desertslave]

It is a huge myth that a master will find a girl with no experience whatsoever and start in on her. They cannot give consent if they have no real idea what they are in for.

Funny, I don't think I look like a unicorn.

I was a college freshman who came on to my physics TA because he was cute and helped me make sense of the course work. I had zero knowledge of BDSM. After a few dates and some intense conversations, he introduced me to his life (he had been involved for about 8 years). Of course, that was 35 years ago and perhaps things were done differently then.

 

[Sir_Winston54]

.... some intense conversations....

Did those "intense conversations" include BDSM-ish topics?

 

[Stella_Omega]

Funny, I don't think I look like a unicorn.

I was a college freshman who came on to my physics TA because he was cute and helped me make sense of the course work. I had zero knowledge of BDSM. After a few dates and some intense conversations, he introduced me to his life (he had been involved for about 8 years). Of course, that was 35 years ago and perhaps things were done differently then.

By which i sincerely doubt that you mean; "he grabbed my arm after hours at a bar and told me I was coming with him"

 

[desertslave]

By which i sincerely doubt that you mean; "he grabbed my arm after hours at a bar and told me I was coming with him"

Since that wasn't in the part that I quoted above, no.