animaleyesone
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- Aug 3, 2006
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I have almost the first two chapters finished. It's going to be a long epic one.
Whats wrong is I've been trying to find an editor who will edit it, help make it more concise and give me help with the flow issue I'm having. Now after a month of asking for help on the Volunteer editor page I'm still without a reliable editor. I've submitted it three times. I think the writing is alright, maybe its the subject matter.
The premise of my story is Gerald and his mother Angela have a lot of drama between them and there is an undercurrent of anger and frustration. She hasn't been the mother he needed her to be, and he looks and acts like the husband that left her 22 years ago. This comes to a head when he comes home early from class, and he finds out that she is rather kinky sexually. This triggers the idea of making her a slave to his rather dark lust and this becomes such a overwhelming compulsion that everything in his life is effected.
My story is epic in scale. I want to give it a little more polish and a lot better flow because I think my writing is getting stale and it's my first effort. I don't want this to be just another male fantasy/stroke story. I want it to be grounded in reality, and have emotion in spite of the taboo topic.
I need to be challenged, and not just have the story edited for grammar. If you think you can help me, email me back and I will respond with the almost finished first two chapters and the stories general outline.
Anyone feel like helping a fresh new writer find his way?
Whats wrong is I've been trying to find an editor who will edit it, help make it more concise and give me help with the flow issue I'm having. Now after a month of asking for help on the Volunteer editor page I'm still without a reliable editor. I've submitted it three times. I think the writing is alright, maybe its the subject matter.
The premise of my story is Gerald and his mother Angela have a lot of drama between them and there is an undercurrent of anger and frustration. She hasn't been the mother he needed her to be, and he looks and acts like the husband that left her 22 years ago. This comes to a head when he comes home early from class, and he finds out that she is rather kinky sexually. This triggers the idea of making her a slave to his rather dark lust and this becomes such a overwhelming compulsion that everything in his life is effected.
My story is epic in scale. I want to give it a little more polish and a lot better flow because I think my writing is getting stale and it's my first effort. I don't want this to be just another male fantasy/stroke story. I want it to be grounded in reality, and have emotion in spite of the taboo topic.
I need to be challenged, and not just have the story edited for grammar. If you think you can help me, email me back and I will respond with the almost finished first two chapters and the stories general outline.
Anyone feel like helping a fresh new writer find his way?
