Looking for an editor

[pneumaticlover]

So, I already have someone who said he'll help me with development and direction, but I need someone that can fix grammar/spelling/flow issues. I'm a little bit OCD with all that but when you're the author it seems something always slips through.

So far I have one chapter of what I hope to be an epic fantasy/romance. So far there are only hints at sexual tension and I think the erotic scenes will probably left to a minimum, as a head's up.

This is my first attempt at erotica, but not my first time at the writing rodeo. I'm just hoping to find someone that will stick with me through the whole thing if life and prior commitments allow.

As of now, the first chapter is about 4,500 words and there will likely be close to 10 chapters if all goes according to plan. I don't have a concrete outline yet so that may change in the future.

Also, I just want to say thank you to anyone who's read this and/or may show any interest. Volunteer editors are the coolest

 

[snoopercharmbrights]

You might get a better response if you switch on your Private Messages. Go to User CP (top left of this page) then click on Edit Options (in the left hand column) and then tick Enable Private Messaging in the second box down. Make sure that the next box down (Receive Private Messages only from Buddies and Moderators) is NOT ticked. Finally click Save Changes at the bottom of that page.

 

[pneumaticlover]

Thanks for pointing that out. I meant to do that and totally forgot.

 

[pneumaticlover]

Here is the link to my first chapter. I'm still looking for an editor for future chapters!

http://www.literotica.com/s/the-surface-world-ch-01

 

[palisa]

I wish I had time to take it on; the story is interesting and flows pretty well. But the real world intrudes, and you know how men hate to make commitments...

A fairly large number of punctuation problems did slip through your OCD, but they are things that a sharp-eyed editor could fix quickly and easily and that you would recognize from then on. The main issues, IMO, are run-on sentences and not using commas to set off introductory clauses and phrases.

One thing you may want to think about is an occasional tendency to overwrite -- to use $50 words or expressions when a 25-cent generic would do just as well and not give the impression that you're trying too hard:

She admired her penchant for ending up in these situations

Admirably, she almost completely ignored the absolute bareness of her living room as she walked through it in her quest to the kitchen.

(A couple of examples from early in the story.)

Good work!

 

[snoopercharmbrights]

... One thing you may want to think about is an occasional tendency to overwrite -- to use $50 words or expressions when a 25-cent generic would do just as well and not give the impression that you're trying too hard:

She admired her penchant for ending up in these situations

Admirably, she almost completely ignored the absolute bareness of her living room as she walked through it in her quest to the kitchen.

...

That's odd. I saw nothing too florid here, though I admit that "penchant" indicates a desire, rather than just a tendency.

@pneumaticlover Step 2 of the CB Advice System is: After enabling Private Messages, check if you have any from time to time. Go to User CP (top left of this page) then click on List Messages (in the left hand column).

 

[pneumaticlover]

I appreciate both of your replies, and I do check my private messages, albeit not daily.