another new poem by a new poet

[dreamykitten2]

Here's a hot new poem by a newbie poetry author. Titled. SENSUAL MEMORIES go to link
HTTP:/www.literotica.com/p/sensual-memories-1

 

[markjason]

The link isn't working.

 

[Senna Jawa]

The link isn't working.

And neither does the title (of the poem).

 

[prolit1]

Lovely piece short, sweet and sexy Check out some of my poems and enjoy as well

-have a good one, Luke

 

[mona88]

The poem is short, but very interesting.

 

[Senna Jawa]

The poem is short, but very interesting.

Anything but. Get lost, moron. (Posting for the public should carry some responsibility).

 

[BooMerengue]

Anything but. Get lost, moron. (posting for the public should carry some responsibility).

Senna Jawa- I just adore you! A breath of fresh air. Straight from the Arctic. But wonderful, all the same!

 

[SweetOblivion]

Food for thought

The 'poem' in question seems to be more a short collection of capitalised words than a poem. Sorry, dreamykitten2, but you certainly need to rethink your understanding of poetry, if you are to make anything of it in future verses. Try reading some poetry and reworking your ideas.

On the other hand irritable, foul-mouthed and crass comments designed to suppress other people's views, add even less value to these pages. Posts, be they poems or crits, should be thought through.

Calling someone a 'moron', however, does not, alas constitute either thought through or an 'icy blast'. Barbed wit might do better if practiced at home, so it is suitably condescending, sharp and vitriolic, without making the perpetrator look like a tool.

Smiles amicably.

Sweet O.

 

[bronzeage]

The 'poem' in question seems to be more a short collection of capitalised words than a poem. Sorry, dreamykitten2, but you certainly need to rethink your understanding of poetry, if you are to make anything of it in future verses. Try reading some poetry and reworking your ideas.

On the other hand irritable, foul-mouthed and crass comments designed to suppress other people's views, add even less value to these pages. Posts, be they poems or crits, should be thought through.

Calling someone a 'moron', however, does not, alas constitute either thought through or an 'icy blast'. Barbed wit might do better if practiced at home, so it is suitably condescending, sharp and vitriolic, without making the perpetrator look like a tool.

Smiles amicably.

Sweet O.

I can't disagree with anything you have said and thank you for this post.

As for the poem, it may have many deficiencies as a poem, but it is a sincere expression, without artifice. It stands as a bare outline. I wish the poet could take this and expand it with the poet's usual tool kit and sculpt it into an enjoyable read.

While we never seem to have quite enough artifice, we are always painfully short of sincere expression. Artifice can be learned, but sincerity can only be encouraged.

 

[champagne1982]

I can't disagree with anything you have said and thank you for this post.

As for the poem, it may have many deficiencies as a poem, but it is a sincere expression, without artifice. It stands as a bare outline. I wish the poet could take this and expand it with the poet's usual tool kit and sculpt it into an enjoyable read.

While we never seem to have quite enough artifice, we are always painfully short of sincere expression. Artifice can be learned, but sincerity can only be encouraged.

Sincerity? I don't know unless I know the poet how sincere or without artifice they may be. The words certainly carry some sort of theme but they are pretty trite in the order they're presented. They depend on their identity as gerunds to draw the symbology of sexual nouns/verbs free. Sweet O has the way of it, dreamykitten; read poetry, read about writing effective poetry, practice and then, read some more. The toughest lesson to learn about being a poet, is that no matter how great you may think your burst of creativity may be, it's not at the pinnacle of what it could be. Take solace in the fact that every poem you write is YOUR creation and as its creator, YOU have the final decision in when YOU stop editing, where YOU present it and in what YOU do with it. Every word is important and if YOU are happy with the words then noone else can determine what will come of the piece. Thanks for being brave and I hope YOU choose to work at poetry in the future.

Happy Holidays and I hope you enjoy the passing of 2011 into a new solar year.