Writing Challenge ~ 1st - 16th September 2011 ~ Reviews and Comments

[Britwitch]

WRITING CHALLENGE REVIEW THREAD ~ SEPTEMBER 2011 ~ PART ONE​

Just a few little rules for this thread:-

• This thread is for comments and reviews only. Submissions go here!

• Please keep your comments focused on the pieces posted for the challenge running from 1st – 16th September 2011 only, this is not really intended to be a thread for conversation/flirting/mayhem and so on (Sorry to be a bore!). Writers should be able to find reviews/comments for their pieces without having to trawl through pages of banter (no matter how amusing/sexy it might be!)

• Readers/Reviewers:- Please keep your comments and reviews polite and, wherever possible, positive. If you have constructive criticism or advice for writers please do give it but be polite about it! You don’t have to like everything you read but if you really don’t have anything nice to say about something then I would suggest you refrain from posting. And if all you want to say is you liked a piece and no more…that’s great too! We all know how writers like to be appreciated!

• Authors:- Please take constructive criticism as it is intended, as an attempt at improving possible flaws/problems/areas of confusion in your piece. They are not (hopefully!) personal attacks on you or your work.

• This is supposed to be a fun way to get to know new writers and potential partners, to exercise our writing brains, it’s not a competition, please keep that in mind!

• One more thing…suggestions for future prompts are very welcome and should be PM’d to me – Britwitch – as a link ideally.

Previous challenges and reviews can be found here.

Happy reading!

 

[fr33ks33k]

M13, I found it interesting that we both went with the touch of the leaf as a transfer point for some sort of memory or emotion. I didn't read your piece before I wrote mine, but afterward I noticed the basic similarity. I like the flow of your words, as always. In particular, I enjoyed the way you described the couple's copulation. 'Monolith of masculinity'....I like that term.

Overall well done (As if there were another outcome to be expected. *chuckle*).

 

[yeishia]

'Monolith of masculinity' *giggles*

Edit: I did not read the post in question ... it was fr33ks33k's response, *giggles again blushing *

Sorry fr33ks33k I really am.

 

[Nina327]

fascinating.
when i do these challenges I refuse to read the posts or the reviews before I'm done...

so having already entered (yes Ive written before and like homework of old, forgot to turn it in)
I'm now enjoying the tidbits...

It's fascinating to me... I wonder if you all had read each others postings first..
or if this is just a lovely coincidence that the theme is so very similar.

 

[Last_Rider]

Untitled - M13

I like this a lot, and I imagine you pushed the word limit to the max. Despite the length it doesn't feel long and you manage to encapsulate the full range of emotions. The loss, the longing, the fond memories, and the eventual realization. The leaf as a metaphor fit perfectly, and you bring it pretty much full circle at the end. Not exactly happy, but definitely poignant and left me introspective. Very well done.

Dryads - Fr33ks33k

You drew heavily on the leaf for inspiration, but it worked out very well. The prose was lovely, the repetition of phrases to help find a subtle rhythm to it, definitely fun.

Untitled - Nina

Lovely piece, you tapped into the anticipation of the situation very well. Given the general audience here it's a scenario that we all should be able to imagine, or remember depending on the individual. Of course a man would be holding a woman and not really recognize her until she spoke, but his reaction was dead on I'd imagine. Very well done.

Untitled - HottieKatie

Sad piece, but short and to the point. That style allows parts of the mind to create their own details. Very nice and I hope to see more of your work in these.

Dessicated - Fish_Tales

Words or short phrases spread out like that remind me of a stream of consciousness type of piece, and I think you captured that here. Not in a flowing way, but more choppy, and either way it's genuine.

 

[Fish_Tales]

I liked all the postings! I was like Nina and didn't read the others till I'd done mine. I'm glad now that I did it more as a poem - the other submissions were great.

It's amazing how the same photo brings out different interpretations, positive and negative. It's shows that how we are and how we think influences how we interpret art. That's why producing something "commercial" is so difficult - the range of interpretations makes it almost impossible to guess what will work.

As you can see, I interpreted it in a negative or melancholy way...

Thanks Brit for the opportunity

 

[Fish_Tales]

Thanks LR

 

[Nina327]

Ty Rider... I was trying not to read to far into his reactions and go only on hers. hoping only to show his anticipation and/or hope by the disbelief and hesitation in touching her...
hmmm...

 

[Nina327]

M13, Did you pull this piece to go with your other one with the broken mirror???
Seems along the same vein.... I like it. Like seeing little bits of Adrians journey.
Cheers.

 

[marauder13]

M13, Did you pull this piece to go with your other one with the broken mirror???
Seems along the same vein.... I like it. Like seeing little bits of Adrians journey.
Cheers.

I didn't so much as pull the piece, as created it a few moments before writing it. But Sandra, Adrian and one other fellow who may one day appear in one of these tales, are all preexisting characters from the same setting. They are all linked, being the same general types of people, but their personal views and journeys are all different.

But yes, there was that link to Adrian, showing a little more of his past.

Thank you, Nina. And well spotted.

 

[Nina327]

I didn't so much as pull the piece, as created it a few moments before writing it. But Sandra, Adrian and one other fellow who may one day appear in one of these tales, are all preexisting characters from the same setting. They are all linked, being the same general types of people, but their personal views and journeys are all different.

But yes, there was that link to Adrian, showing a little more of his past.

Thank you, Nina. And well spotted.

-nods-

Sry bout the inference. I shouldn't attempt conversation at 330 in the morning... lol

 

[Britwitch]

September's First Challenge Is Now Closed To New Submissions!

Thanks to all those who participated, either through writing or reviewing!

Please do feel free to continue reading and reviewing the submissions already entered though...

The second monthly challenge will begin shortly!​