Hello!
First time poster long, long time reader of literotica. Not much is important besides that I make comics and generally dirty imagery by night, but my comics often get very porn-ish, and quite frankly not especially entertaining.
I intend to make something different this time, and writing up a series of fantasy erotic stories called "Erietales", focusing on people loosing control to their lust in different ways.
As mentioned, I'm not as experienced at writing erotic, sweet stories than I am drawing smut, so what I'm asking for is generally this:
Do you spontaneously want to read further?
What do you think about the small bite that is presented? Enticing, disgusting, bland...
Feedback basically.
The beginning of the script in it's raw form is here: https://***************/document/d/1Hz_IQ2FqLL7TWc4y6Sxw8UTykmTWg2mjRA_S1gLmGkA/edit?hl=en_US
Have in mind that this is a manuscript for the comic, so please try to see beyond my silly prose. This is the mere skeleton.
First time poster long, long time reader of literotica. Not much is important besides that I make comics and generally dirty imagery by night, but my comics often get very porn-ish, and quite frankly not especially entertaining.
I intend to make something different this time, and writing up a series of fantasy erotic stories called "Erietales", focusing on people loosing control to their lust in different ways.
As mentioned, I'm not as experienced at writing erotic, sweet stories than I am drawing smut, so what I'm asking for is generally this:
Do you spontaneously want to read further?
What do you think about the small bite that is presented? Enticing, disgusting, bland...
Feedback basically.
The beginning of the script in it's raw form is here: https://***************/document/d/1Hz_IQ2FqLL7TWc4y6Sxw8UTykmTWg2mjRA_S1gLmGkA/edit?hl=en_US
Have in mind that this is a manuscript for the comic, so please try to see beyond my silly prose. This is the mere skeleton.