College girl in need of money is forced into increasingly hardcore sexual situations?

[Savage_Ilk]

Hey guys, this is my first post here.

I've been kicking around an idea for a while about a 21 year old chick, a smart, perky, physically attractive--modeled after my busty hall-mate in college, who had D cup tits, nice ass, big lips, and was an idealistic college student.

In my story, she walks around her tiny liberal arts school thinking life is good.

Until a car accident kills her older and younger brothers, and also leaves her divorced father a quadrapalegic. Within a few months, its clear that she's going to have to drop out of school to work in order to cover her paralyzed father's ever-growing medical expenses.

One night, while expressing her despair about what her life has turned into, her seedy, deadbeat boyfriend (who is also mooching off her) mentions that he knows a guy who makes porn, and will pay in cash for girls doing blowjobs on camera. She reluctantly agrees, arriving at a photoshoot where she's offered an extra 50 dollars to get videotaped sucking two guys dicks at once.

Desperate for money, she takes the cash and blows the two strangers right there.

Later, feeling the pressure to pay for her paralyzed dad's medical bills, she gets duped into signing a contract to do a hardcore porn shoot involving her and 7 guys; her boyfriend convinces her to take an offer to fly across the country and stay with a pair of Texas businessmen for a week during a conference, during which time they keep her locked in their hotel room and force her to be inebriated almost 24 hours a day, while they double penetrate her and take turns receiving marathon blowjob sessions from her whenever they feel like it; and she even gets blackmailed for months by a group of 12 of her male classmates who stumble across her porn videos online--they start by cornering her one night and threaten to tell the school administration if she doesn't suck off each one of them right there.

Would people be interested in that? Any suggestions?

 

[JMaxwell69]

Just curious: does this girl know you are posting face shots of her on a porn site?

 

[Savage_Ilk]

I'll double check with her first, although she said I can do whatever I want with them.

But how does the STORY sound?

 

[sirhugs]

nice twist on a classic set up.

 

[Sean Renaud]

As someone with actual experience in both porn and medicin all of the numbers thrown out thus far are WAY too low but other than that the story is a bit too tragic. Unless you're really looking for a downer story there is no need to fuck the girl over THAT bad.

 

[LindsayRae]

I'll double check with her first, although she said I can do whatever I want with them.

Send them to her parents. lol

 

[erotiquegirl]

Stories good. I'd lose some of the drama and just turn her into a slut for money. Hey, she tried it reluctantly and now is a porn star and a high call call girl too.

 

[erotiquegirl]

Oh, and in the process, she dumps the boyfriend. LOL

 

[JMaxwell69]

I'll double check with her first, although she said I can do whatever I want with them.

But how does the STORY sound?

The story is good. Setting it apart might be a challenge.

 

[JMaxwell69]

Send them to her parents. lol

The one I saw wasn't nude and she looked perfectly respectable, so I don't think there would be much of an issue with the parents seeing it.

But clothed or not, you put a picture of a pretty girl up around here and someone's going to be wanking to it, and, as I understand it, some women find that objectionable or creepy.

I'm always leary of face pics with no reason to believe the person but them up themself.

 

[Savage_Ilk]

As someone with actual experience in both porn and medicin all of the numbers thrown out thus far are WAY too low but other than that the story is a bit too tragic. Unless you're really looking for a downer story there is no need to fuck the girl over THAT bad.

Part of whats been enjoyable conceiving of and writing this has been the fact that she's almost obligated to do this. I say almost because the boyfriend will be a huge factor in essentially manipulating her and making her feel like she HAS to do it--otherwise her father will starve/die/whatever and they wont be able to stay together or something.

There'd be a humiliation factor to the 50 dollars extra for the 2 bjs...part of the idea is she has no idea how much this stuff goes for, so she just goes with it. haha.

Stories good. I'd lose some of the drama and just turn her into a slut for money. Hey, she tried it reluctantly and now is a porn star and a high call call girl too.

Haha, i see what your saying but I feel like everything will be enhanced if she's doing all this stuff just-barely-reluctantly the whole way through--like, just taking it because she thinks its the only way she can take care of her father and boyfriend.

Noted, however, that not everyone here wants a ton of 'drama.' I'll make sure it moves along briskly.

The story is good. Setting it apart might be a challenge.

I hear you. I'll do some more reading on here as i keep writing it. I'm going to try and make it very visceral, and focus on the girl's inexperience, and the savageness of the industry that she gets thrown into.

Thanks so much for the feedback just on my little description guys. I feel really inspired. If anyone else has anything to add, I'd still love to hear suggestions, or things they might like to see incorporated into it.

 

[Sean Renaud]

Part of whats been enjoyable conceiving of and writing this has been the fact that she's almost obligated to do this. I say almost because the boyfriend will be a huge factor in essentially manipulating her and making her feel like she HAS to do it--otherwise her father will starve/die/whatever and they wont be able to stay together or something.

There'd be a humiliation factor to the 50 dollars extra for the 2 bjs...part of the idea is she has no idea how much this stuff goes for, so she just goes with it. haha.




Haha, i see what your saying but I feel like everything will be enhanced if she's doing all this stuff just-barely-reluctantly the whole way through--like, just taking it because she thinks its the only way she can take care of her father and boyfriend.

Noted, however, that not everyone here wants a ton of 'drama.' I'll make sure it moves along briskly.



I hear you. I'll do some more reading on here as i keep writing it. I'm going to try and make it very visceral, and focus on the girl's inexperience, and the savageness of the industry that she gets thrown into.

Thanks so much for the feedback just on my little description guys. I feel really inspired. If anyone else has anything to add, I'd still love to hear suggestions, or things they might like to see incorporated into it.

Except the industry isn't that savage. Standard starting pay is a grand per scene. Granted medical bills add up quick but unless he had something terminal and the story is ultimately going to end with her father dying and that setting her free.

Who cares that not a lot of readers here like drama. It's true most of the time people want to read a story, and get off. As much as we writers like to pretend we're above it and we're crafting erotica. We're pornographers, and the faster you can get dick in girl the better.

However, if youc an write an epic story you willl be loved for it, and more importantly the haters that down vote never read anything longer than 2 lit pages so once you've got to 3 pages it's unlikely that anybody is going to vote lower than a 3.

If you want to make the situation believable and tragic make her boyfriend her manager so she never really knows how much money she's making. That for whatever reason the checks are made out to him. Or that he knows the crew so he could be double fucking her. You know she should have made 1.5k for that anal scene or 2k for DP (standard fare used to be 1k basic, 1.5 anal and then had .5 per male on set, which is why those Gangbang Videos usually only have two scenes, and also why blowjob only videos have like 18 scenes. Cus you don't get paid if you just use your mouth) But her pimp is taking say two thirds before giving her shit and then asking for 10% of her money as a manager's fee.

If you're going to fuck this girl this hard and go for a true tragic tale you gotta set up the BF as the real villian and them from their out you need to make everybody else slightly less evil.

 

[Savage_Ilk]

Except the industry isn't that savage. Standard starting pay is a grand per scene. Granted medical bills add up quick but unless he had something terminal and the story is ultimately going to end with her father dying and that setting her free.

Who cares that not a lot of readers here like drama. It's true most of the time people want to read a story, and get off. As much as we writers like to pretend we're above it and we're crafting erotica. We're pornographers, and the faster you can get dick in girl the better.

However, if youc an write an epic story you willl be loved for it, and more importantly the haters that down vote never read anything longer than 2 lit pages so once you've got to 3 pages it's unlikely that anybody is going to vote lower than a 3.

If you want to make the situation believable and tragic make her boyfriend her manager so she never really knows how much money she's making. That for whatever reason the checks are made out to him. Or that he knows the crew so he could be double fucking her. You know she should have made 1.5k for that anal scene or 2k for DP (standard fare used to be 1k basic, 1.5 anal and then had .5 per male on set, which is why those Gangbang Videos usually only have two scenes, and also why blowjob only videos have like 18 scenes. Cus you don't get paid if you just use your mouth) But her pimp is taking say two thirds before giving her shit and then asking for 10% of her money as a manager's fee.

If you're going to fuck this girl this hard and go for a true tragic tale you gotta set up the BF as the real villian and them from their out you need to make everybody else slightly less evil.

Thanks again for the comments everyone.

Haha, its really interesting, actually a lot of the elements you suggest are already in the story, I just didn't/don't want to reveal too much before or now. But remember, I did say that the boyfriend will be a huge manipulator......

Hehehehe. Alright, thanks again for your suggestions. Anyone else? I'm actually working on it now.

 

[Savage_Ilk]

Just curious: does this girl know you are posting face shots of her on a porn site?

Haha she said the pictures are fine. She even said I could post them in the Amateur forums if I felt like it.

Its funny, she knew I was gonna use a likeness of her as my main character in an erotic story, but its become a lot darker than I originally thought it was. I'm wondering if I should try to NOT show it to her, hahaha.

 

[Black_Dahlia]

This is definitely my type of story, and I look forward to reading it. I wonder if it will be a continuous fuck-fest, or if it will feature the poor girl's heartache about her father. Also it would be good if she really loved her boyfriend and naively believed he was doing the best for her, as if it hurt him to see her being gangbanged or sucking on some huge black cocks. This would add a sense of guilt that she was betraying him, which she wouldn't feel if he was just openly nasty to her.

 

[Savage_Ilk]

This is definitely my type of story, and I look forward to reading it. I wonder if it will be a continuous fuck-fest, or if it will feature the poor girl's heartache about her father. Also it would be good if she really loved her boyfriend and naively believed he was doing the best for her, as if it hurt him to see her being gangbanged or sucking on some huge black cocks. This would add a sense of guilt that she was betraying him, which she wouldn't feel if he was just openly nasty to her.

So glad to hear this kind of thing might be up someone's alley.

Hahaha you've put what im going for so well, I'm totally feeling what you're saying, about her naively believing that her boyfriend was on her side. That sense of guilt is also a great thing to play with that I'll try to work in. Haha. This is great. More feedback is appreciated.

 

[erotiquegirl]

Working on it.

 

[LindsayRae]

The one I saw wasn't nude and she looked perfectly respectable, so I don't think there would be much of an issue with the parents seeing it.

But clothed or not, you put a picture of a pretty girl up around here and someone's going to be wanking to it, and, as I understand it, some women find that objectionable or creepy.

I'm always leary of face pics with no reason to believe the person but them up themself.

I had no clue what type of pic he posted. I was only going off the comment of "she said I could do whatever I wanted with her pics"... Left my mind thinking there were, or could one day be, naughty pics. It was just my bit of sarcastic humor.

Typically I seem to be the first one "catching" these boys and asking them if the woman knows her pic is up on a sex site!

 

[Lost_Yonder]

While there are many such stories of naive young girl in need of money manipulated by someone into sex - I personally never tire of them! :S

I like the idea of the manipulative bf who "protects" her from the evils of the industry - though he is stealing from her and pimping her out.

What does she make of her new life? Does she remain disgusted with it? Does she warm up to it? What happens when the father dies? Now she is no longer financially in debt - does she leave the industry? Once out, does she miss it? Is it like an addictive drug?

Or, to add another twist, given the father is a quadriplegic, perhaps he has a male nurse who shows him porn films from time to time, even though he can't get off, he enjoys watching. Only, who is that new starlet he is watching in the middle of a gangbang?

 

[Savage_Ilk]

While there are many such stories of naive young girl in need of money manipulated by someone into sex - I personally never tire of them! :S

I like the idea of the manipulative bf who "protects" her from the evils of the industry - though he is stealing from her and pimping her out.

What does she make of her new life? Does she remain disgusted with it? Does she warm up to it? What happens when the father dies? Now she is no longer financially in debt - does she leave the industry? Once out, does she miss it? Is it like an addictive drug?

Or, to add another twist, given the father is a quadriplegic, perhaps he has a male nurse who shows him porn films from time to time, even though he can't get off, he enjoys watching. Only, who is that new starlet he is watching in the middle of a gangbang?

I love it.

 

[Black_Dahlia]

Carrying on from that, maybe it's not just her father who sees the girl's online adventures. College friends, teachers, neighbours, family friends, etc could use it to blackmail her, saying it would kill her poor father if he ever found out what she was really like. So she reluctantly allows them to use and abuse her and it pisses her boyfriend off, because she's giving it away when she should be making him money, but he has to appear to be sympathetic to her dilemma.

He could also put an ad in dirty magazines or online, which is basically 'star in your own porn movie' in which men would pay to fuck the girl in a motel room and have it filmed. The good thing about this is that she might end up being fucked by people she knows, like her doctor or the postman or her old high school principle - dirty old men who always wanted to fuck her but thought she was out of reach.

 

[Lost_Yonder]

Carrying on from that, maybe it's not just her father who sees the girl's online adventures. College friends, teachers, neighbours, family friends, etc could use it to blackmail her, saying it would kill her poor father if he ever found out what she was really like. So she reluctantly allows them to use and abuse her and it pisses her boyfriend off, because she's giving it away when she should be making him money, but he has to appear to be sympathetic to her dilemma.

He could also put an ad in dirty magazines or online, which is basically 'star in your own porn movie' in which men would pay to fuck the girl in a motel room and have it filmed. The good thing about this is that she might end up being fucked by people she knows, like her doctor or the postman or her old high school principle - dirty old men who always wanted to fuck her but thought she was out of reach.

Oh, such delightful perversions!

What if she is being blackmailed into sex by all sorts of people not to inform her father - who would obviously be crushed, it might even kill him given his delicate health situation. Only, he knows. Not only does he know, he is the one calling up people, having them approach his daughter and "blackmailing" her and filming their encounters - all so he can watch his daughter!

But what happens when the scumbag of a bf finds out who is behind the blackmailing and thus the loss of potential revenue???

 

[Savage_Ilk]

Carrying on from that, maybe it's not just her father who sees the girl's online adventures. College friends, teachers, neighbours, family friends, etc could use it to blackmail her, saying it would kill her poor father if he ever found out what she was really like. So she reluctantly allows them to use and abuse her and it pisses her boyfriend off, because she's giving it away when she should be making him money, but he has to appear to be sympathetic to her dilemma.

He could also put an ad in dirty magazines or online, which is basically 'star in your own porn movie' in which men would pay to fuck the girl in a motel room and have it filmed. The good thing about this is that she might end up being fucked by people she knows, like her doctor or the postman or her old high school principle - dirty old men who always wanted to fuck her but thought she was out of reach.

Yep, GREAT ideas. Keep them coming everyone, I love this. You can see from my first post i was sort of going in the direction of having some of her classmates/people she knew beforehand taking advantage of her under threat of revealing what she's doing. I love that idea of the people around her mercilessly satisfying their own long-hidden sexual desires, ignoring the plight of her situation--maybe even thinking that she WANTS to be doing it and is just a big slut.

I'm imagining this scene where she's alone in a room, a seedy hotel or bak in her dorm at college, surrounded by a whole group of men who she's known/trusted for a long time, or guys from her dorm hall that she's lived with and thought were friends, now all staring down at her hungrily, their dicks rock hard, and she's got to take all of them or else.

 

[ramrod32784]

LKeep postingooking forward to both more pictures

 

[Savage_Ilk]

*****NOTE: SHE TOOK HER PICS DOWN BECAUSE SHE GOT A REALLY WEIRD MESSAGE.

Anyone interested in the story and wants to see the girl who it's "based" on, I asked her to make a profile and post a few pictures of herself, which she graciously did here:

http://forum.literotica.com/showthread.php?t=763886

This will just give you an idea of what the chick in my story looks like. She's fun to look at even if my story idea doesn't send you.

Alright, back to writing it.