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[twelveoone]

This thread should be more to PoetGuy's liking.

But I'll Dedicate it to anon, this one:
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The forum is lousy with moderator(s) who pretend(s) to care and help out new poets yet not a single one left a comment on your poem when you obviously need at least one. What does that say about every bodys butty?

You need to take time and edit your work for punctuation and grammar. Spell check doesn't get every mistake but I am not even sure you utilized that tool.

I hope you can overlook the snobbery of the posers and work on your poetry with an open mind. I did not vote.
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no comments? not even one constructive one?
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whom I did not see today.
However I saw an impressive set of comments, some rather lengthy. By Maria 2394, UnderYourSpell, and chipbuddy. On what appeared to be mostly new writer material.

My,my,my. My guess is that they will not be thanked, I hope I'm wrong. They impress me. They certainly didn't look like snobbish posers. And they put there ass on the line, unlike you my dear anon. They almost make me feel ashamed.
Almost..

For what it is worth, they have my respect.


and will point out an error, when people post here, I've noticed that they are rather generous with their time, unlike you under cover.

 

[butters]

thanks, twelvio

a comment might not look very big onscreen, but it takes time to read, think, and formulate a reply to a piece if it is worth typing. throwaway comments are fine on occasion, but i do try to offer a writer insight into how their piece is perceived by this reader, and that my reaction does not translate automatically as to how it's seen by the next.

each to their own and as for the snobbery part - it's a load of old codswallop as we all know.

 

[twelveoone]

thanks, twelvio

a comment might not look very big onscreen, but it takes time to read, think, and formulate a reply to a piece if it is worth typing. throwaway comments are fine on occasion, but i do try to offer a writer insight into how their piece is perceived by this reader, and that my reaction does not translate automatically as to how it's seen by the next.

each to their own and as for the snobbery part - it's a load of old codswallop as we all know.

Well I am a throwaway snob, as long as you know that. BTW In response to one of yours on my latest, thanks, and I did post an explanation in the NPR thank you thread.

 

[butters]

Well I am a throwaway snob, as long as you know that. BTW In response to one of yours on my latest, thanks, and I did post an explanation in the NPR thank you thread.

ah, yes, just went a-reading

grasses indeed.

and to all those philosophers, i say this:

brooms, axes, ships ... so long as a part of the original remains, a part that saw the touch/ownership of the original person in question, then it has a claim. once all parts are replaced and not one is able to announce it was touched/owned by the original person then the claim collapses in upon itself.


i might change my mind with time, but that's the filo-philosophy i'm adopting at the moment. *nods*

 

[Maria2394]

1201-

You are never a snob in my book, none of you are. I know what it takes to review the poems and then make comments. I have made mistakes in my comments and admit them, and try to remedy them.

I do thank you for mentioning those of us who care. And You should have mentioned yourself

anyhoo-



hope you had a great day at work, CB, and the rest of you in your respective daily duties.

~ maria

 

[bronzeage]

Mirage by oneiria

This is a very short piece. Short is not a deficiency, but this poem is under developed. A few stark images are placed before us, but leave little to consider.

The analogy of the limo and the fox eyeball does not hold, so the metaphors and similes of this piece conflict and fall short.

 

[bronzeage]

Damnit kev,

Can't you put some variety in this shit?

 

[twelveoone]

Damnit kev,

Can't you put some variety in this shit?

I think kev is hitting on you bronze.
Can't be me, I don't have the biceps.

 

[bronzeage]

I think kev is hitting on you bronze.
Can't be me, I don't have the biceps.

I am not one those men who feels threatened when another man finds me attractive. It's a perfectly understandable.

 

[twelveoone]

I am not one those men who feels threatened when another man finds me attractive. It's a perfectly understandable.

I find it bizarre when anyone hits on me. It's perfectly understandable.
I question it when they don't cross the street.

 

[butters]

I am not one those men who feels threatened when another man finds me attractive. It's a perfectly understandable.

I find it bizarre when anyone hits on me. It's perfectly understandable.
I question it when they don't cross the street.

have a fishing rod...
in my imagination you look something like this on a good day, and this on one of your bad ones

 

[twelveoone]

have a fishing rod...
in my imagination you look something like this on a good day, and this on one of your bad ones

Close, here's a picture of me relaxing in Texas
That's Lone Star BTW, just has a funny label.

 

[butters]

Close, here's a picture of me relaxing in Texas
That's Lone Star BTW, just has a funny label.

ha - fibber. Wok already used that as his av. it had to be him, surely???

 

[twelveoone]

Here is the deal

Prompted by an email. And frankly, I never thought of it.
I can't say this strongly enough, if you are qualified to write poetry, you are qualified to comment.
Look, I caught shit for leaving puns. I've left a whole load of lame comments. And despite what you may think of me, it isn't the truth, either way. Right down the middle, I may be right, I may be wrong.
I also received another email, about someone valuing my comments, well, sometimes I am right. The writer ultimately sorts this shit out, but the reader see what he sees.
There is no right or wrong way, but there are always better ways. To be a better poet, you have to become a better reader. To be sure maybe it might even help you become better off, if you check the fine print and wording between the lines.

In short, you don't like what I say, fuck you. And fuck me too. We both walk away. It's not like they're bullets. And the most "unqualified" (notice I put this is quotes, 'cause I don't believe it) reader can pick out things that the most "qualified" (again with the quotes...) poet didn't think of. So, what if you're wrong. Anybody wrote the perfect poem (longer that 8 lines)? Anybody ever come up with the perfect interpretation?

I've decided to take a journey over to the authors from time to time, because why should you poets be solely burdened with my presence.

It is a lot of fun being the most feared and hated...

 

[bulltlr]

Twelveoone, you're not scary!
My comment button is broke...I click and nothing happens.

 

[twelveoone]

Twelveoone, you're not scary!
My comment button is broke...I click and nothing happens.

See!
How scary I can be!

 

[twelveoone]

http://www.literotica.com/p/hawthornes-alphabet

by Anonymous05/12/11
u could add

egocentric to ur list gurlie. its the one constant in all ur poetry
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and what can we add to ur list anon?
Besides being stupid and selective, because half of new poems fit that definition.
Some being little more than finger in the hole I,I,I'm comimg...

How about cowardly?
D-bag

Here's a suggestion, create another alt, go vote for urself, tell urself how 1der fool u r.
Ball-less. As in you don't know how to juggle your meds.

 

[butters]

http://www.literotica.com/p/hawthornes-alphabet

by Anonymous05/12/11
u could add

egocentric to ur list gurlie. its the one constant in all ur poetry

who's going to pay any attention to someone who uses 'ur', and twice! ?

 

[SeattleRain]

Quote:

Originally Posted by twelveoone
http://www.literotica.com/p/hawthornes-alphabet

by Anonymous05/12/11
u could add

egocentric to ur list gurlie. its the one constant in all ur poetry

u do have to admit, he duz have a point. I am the biggest navel gazer around. Or is it lint picker.

who's going to pay any attention to someone who uses 'ur', and twice! ?

Ha! I actually did pay attention, and thought to myself-- HEY did I really leave out one of my biggest defects??? But if he/she would have read the poem first, he/she would have seen egocentric was already on the list (different wording, same defect) so I did not have to change it around.

I am so self-centered I even used self like 17 times in the poem. What can I say? I am not a good person, but I am the center of the universe.

 

[SeattleRain]

btw twelver- your comments are always appreciated. I do not like to post-and-run, but seems I have been guilty of that these past days

 

[twelveoone]

Quote:


u do have to admit, he duz have a point. I am the biggest navel gazer around. Or is it lint picker.



Ha! I actually did pay attention, and thought to myself-- HEY did I really leave out one of my biggest defects??? But if he/she would have read the poem first, he/she would have seen egocentric was already on the list (different wording, same defect) so I did not have to change it around.

I am so self-centered I even used self like 17 times in the poem. What can I say? I am not a good person, but I am the center of the universe.

thassa funny, youa tink about youaself

Soa doa I

Chico]
Everyone Says I Love You
The great big mosquito when he stings you
The fly when he gets stuck on the fly paper too says
I Love You

Every time the cow says moo
She makes the bull-a very happy too
The rooster when he hollers cock-a-doodle-doodle-doo
says I Love You

Christopher Columbus he write
the Queen of Spain a very nice little note
He write "I Love You, baby"
and then he gets himself a great big boat
He's a wise guy.
What do you think Columbus do
When he come here in 1492
He said to Pocahontas "Acki Vachi Vachi Voo,
"That means "You little son of a gun, I Love You."

Harpo]
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[SeattleRain]

slamming another comment? bizarre

Okay. I can take the highly critical comments on my poem, I kind of like it, helps to build my confidence and practice my letting go....

but to judge the comment and character of someone who commented on my poem???. That is just silly. Pointless really, except to discourage commenters.

Sorry UYS and thank you for your comment. Much appreciated. I will go back and delete his/her rude comment to your comment.


By the way, anon, you slammed me for responding to a comment someone made on my poem yet you did the same thing. Curious.

 

[SeattleRain]

You know, I thought that fly in my flypaper was giving me the eye....but I had no idea it was love.

Oh the universe looks so sweet from the center.

thassa funny, youa tink about youaself

Soa doa I

Chico]
Everyone Says I Love You
The great big mosquito when he stings you
The fly when he gets stuck on the fly paper too says
I Love You

Every time the cow says moo
She makes the bull-a very happy too
The rooster when he hollers cock-a-doodle-doodle-doo
says I Love You

Christopher Columbus he write
the Queen of Spain a very nice little note
He write "I Love You, baby"
and then he gets himself a great big boat
He's a wise guy.
What do you think Columbus do
When he come here in 1492
He said to Pocahontas "Acki Vachi Vachi Voo,
"That means "You little son of a gun, I Love You."

Harpo]
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[twelveoone]

Okay. I can take the highly critical comments on my poem, I kind of like it, helps to build my confidence and practice my letting go....

but to judge the comment and character of someone who commented on my poem???. That is just silly. Pointless really, except to discourage commenters.

Sorry UYS and thank you for your comment. Much appreciated. I will go back and delete his/her rude comment to your comment.


By the way, anon, you slammed me for responding to a comment someone made on my poem yet you did the same thing. Curious.

Well, you know me...Say what you will, just leave the door open. Don't hide. At least one of the anon's is very curious, spurious, and bulbous too boot.