Comments I can't post on your poetry

[UnderYourSpell]

Another Word For Miscarriage
so sad but I'm not sure what 'nipples pricked in anger and aching' means

Jazzstory
Knowing your love of Jazz I always expect the best poems on the subject from you and I am never disappointed! Congratulations on your 'E'

 

[UnderYourSpell]

I hope nobody minds me doing it this way and that I may count these comments on my score board, I can't see any other way around this dilemma

 

[vrosej10]

Another Word For Miscarriage
so sad but I'm not sure what 'nipples pricked in anger and aching' means

Anger can cause erect nipples and aching was supposed to be a hint about pregnancy (most of my buddies and I used to get a horrible throbbing pain when we got erect nipples early in pregnancy).

 

[UnderYourSpell]

Another Word For Miscarriage
so sad but I'm not sure what 'nipples pricked in anger and aching' means

Anger can cause erect nipples and aching was supposed to be a hint about pregnancy (most of my buddies and I used to get a horrible throbbing pain when we got erect nipples early in pregnancy).

Oh pricked as in erect now I get you!

 

[vrosej10]

Oh pricked as in erect now I get you!

Coolio. I misread the term leftie in Sinister Christmas the other day as politically left and misread the whole poem as this weird paraniod rant about how the xmas stuff was trying to get him....

 

[UnderYourSpell]

An Alba for Him
A moment in time short and sweet and everything you need to say in just those few words. I agree that you don't need the extra spacing around 'slowly' commas would have been enough

After the Earthquake
I like this a lot, one of the best you have written, although I'm not sure you can call it a pantoum (I thought they rhymed!) But I don't care what it's called it's really good

 

[twelveoone]

OK, looks like someone else is having probs.
Not bad Ang. Four in a after a hiatus, an E. Did you know the flatted fith is the devils tritone. So this must have something to do with Devil's music. My biggest objection is it is not strict Iambic Pentameter. How are poor black folks going to get rhythm unless we share the white man's meter with them?
So tell us about the meter (I heard someone say).

The meter costs a quarter for 15 minutes, and what's that you say? We ain't got rhythm?

AH, yes the ol' Teutonic two step.

I shall elaborate further on MLK day.

 

[twelveoone]

Anger can cause erect nipples.

And I thought you were just happy to see me.

 

[vrosej10]

And I thought you were just happy to see me.

Oh I am dude! How's the eyes?

 

[Angeline]

OK, looks like someone else is having probs.
Not bad Ang. Four in a after a hiatus, an E. Did you know the flatted fith is the devils tritone. So this must have something to do with Devil's music. My biggest objection is it is not strict Iambic Pentameter. How are poor black folks going to get rhythm unless we share the white man's meter with them?
So tell us about the meter (I heard someone say).

The meter costs a quarter for 15 minutes, and what's that you say? We ain't got rhythm?

AH, yes the ol' Teutonic two step.

I shall elaborate further on MLK day.

Damn I'm outta quarters. You wanna know the meter? Here's the meter!

 

[twelveoone]

Damn I'm outta quarters. You wanna know the meter? Here's the meter!

ok, one more crack, and I'm outta here...
That is not the minuet.

Seriously, I am reading, (slower than I like) Sound and Form in Modern Poetry by Harvey Gross and Robert McDowell (sound like two white guys), Eliot gets a whole chapter, Pound does too, a lot of interesting things about Dickenson, Moore, etc., etc. Langston Hughes (probably the shortest) get's a half page, something about blues...no analysis, quick on to the next white guy.
A good book, even though I don't believe in the two step, but that was annoying.

 

[vrosej10]

ok, one more crack, and I'm outta here...
That is not the minuet.

Seriously, I am reading, (slower than I like) Sound and Form in Modern Poetry by Harvey Gross and Robert McDowell (sound like two white guys), Eliot gets a whole chapter, Pound does too, a lot of interesting things about Dickenson, Moore, etc., etc. Langston Hughes (probably the shortest) get's a half page, something about blues...no analysis, quick on to the next white guy.
A good book, even though I don't believe in the two step, but that was annoying.

I am gunna hunt down that book and give it a whirl. I am reading The Western Wind by somebody Nims and The Discovery of Poetry (I've always got several book going and I tend only to read poetry and non-fiction). The Western Wind is a corker and I would recommend it for all the poetry noobs out that. One thing I love about it; it has a pitch chart for vowels. A very handy item.

 

[twelveoone]

I am gunna hunt down that book and give it a whirl. I am reading The Western Wind by somebody Nims and The Discovery of Poetry (I've always got several book going and I tend only to read poetry and non-fiction). The Western Wind is a corker and I would recommend it for all the poetry noobs out that. One thing I love about it; it has a pitch chart for vowels. A very handy item.

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