Boo ya!

[GinaTina]

Mercy me! It's been awhile since I've been active here.

I started a couple of RPG's in the forums a bit ago, but was entirely too busy to be able to keep up with them.

They died out, sadly enough.

However, quite a few people PM'ed me stating that they enjoyed my writing style very much.

Ok, so I was flattered.

I recently (as in today) submitted my first attempt at an erotic story. It's now pending for publication and I really hope it's accepted. Spelling and proper punctuation come easy to me so I'm not much worried about that.

I would like to know if anyone might want to give it a once-over to see if I ought to continue it. I believe I have a unique style which may be enjoyable for some.

If anyone cares to give me some critiques please PM me on this site and I will send you what I have thus far.

Thanks in advance,
Ginnnnnnnna!

 

[CopperSkink]

No apostrophy on "RPGs".

 

[sr71plt]

Also, none in "RPGs."

Posting this to the Story Feedback section will probably garner more response.

 

[CopperSkink]

Didn't we agree the period belongs outside of the quotes?

 

[PacoFear]

Didn't we agree the period belongs outside of the quotes?

Not for us American-types. We always tuck them inside. See CMS 6.8. Brits play a different game.

 

[GinaTina]

Why, you're right.

:d

Thanks though, for your feedback. Any and all is appreciated.

btw - my story got approved First try. It's the little things that make life grand, correct?


I know a couple of people enjoyed it already - got a couple a faves as well. Pretty sweet.

I am in the market for an editor though. I did try and contact one through email and I sent my story - but he hasn't responded. I could really use another pair of eyes to catch small mistakes here and there and even give me suggestions for the plot.

Any takers would be welcome.
http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=499882


Please and thanks,
Ginnnnnnna!

P.S. - if this is posted incorrectly, I apologize.

 

[snoopercharmbrights]

... I am in the market for an editor though. I did try and contact one through email and I sent my story - but he hasn't responded. I could really use another pair of eyes to catch small mistakes here and there and even give me suggestions for the plot.

Any takers would be welcome. ...

You might get a better response if you specify the genre of your story (eg romance, non-consent, incest, gay male, lesbian, etc), the help you feel you need (e.g. grammar only, grammar and continuity, etc.), and its length (in words) as these factors play a large part in a volunteer editor's decision whether to offer help.

 

[GinaTina]

You might get a better response if you specify the genre of your story (eg romance, non-consent, incest, gay male, lesbian, etc), the help you feel you need (e.g. grammar only, grammar and continuity, etc.), and its length (in words) as these factors play a large part in a volunteer editor's decision whether to offer help.

....that would help wouldn't it. *chuckle*


Point taken. ^.^

Quick Synopsis: Non-human, possible non-consent - not sure where it's going at the moment.

Sisters are taken captive by two sinister beings for unknown reasons (so far).

Would love having another pair of eyes for minor spelling and punctuation errors. Also, a muse would be nice. Sometimes I get stuck and am unsure how to continue. When this happens, my stories tend to come to a stand-still and I lose interest.

I prefer in depth, well-written stories that take a certain amount if time to build up. If you're looking for instant gratification, you'll probably want to move on. My writings tend to be very long.

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=499882 - give it a read! I'm getting fabulous feedback so far!

Thanks again for the advice.

Ginnnnnnnna!

 

[CopperSkink]

I see "sinister beings" in the nonhuman category, and already I'm turned off. But don't think I'm being genrist; if I saw "two sisters have sex" as the story's plot, I wouldn't read it. If I saw "two guys rape two girls" I wouldn't read it; same with "mysterious men tie down women for sex."

Two girls getting kidnapped isn't a plot. Were they out trying to cure hemerroids? Did they have a fight? Are they incapable of love and were on an adventure to enjoy the simplicity of their monogomous fate much to the style of Tina Yuthers and Bruce Morgan?

A kidnapping isn't a story at all; it's the unfortunate plot twist that happens in the middle of a preexisting story that stops it from being boring because perhaps you'd began talking about something unarousing such as the consistancy of birthing diapers. One look at your post, and I in my objective brilliance write you off as another Twilight fan that wants to see poor innocent white-skinned girls being taken captive by two dangerous yet mysteriously handsome young men who can't seem to catch a suntan.

If it were a story, it might be a story, but this is overdone as it is and not much of a story. Why should we care two licks about the sisters? Introduce the story with the two of them getting spirited off to some evil mansion, and you're dead in the water.

 

[GinaTina]

Well, if it isn't your type of story, don't read it. :d There you go.


And that was merely the synopsis; there is an actual story.

Thanks again!

 

[elfin_odalisque]

No apostrophy on "RPGs".

Agreeing with both you and sr, depending on the side of the pond, what happens with capitals? Surely a title like, THE HISTORY OF RPG'S, needs the apostrophe to give clarity?

 

[sr71plt]

Agreeing with both you and sr, depending on the side of the pond, what happens with capitals? Surely a title like, THE HISTORY OF RPG'S, needs the apostrophe to give clarity?

No problem here. Titles aren't full capped to begin with. Even on cover spines, the publisher has options. Don't full cap that title (which is what they mostly do anyway) or use different size caps.

 

[CopperSkink]

Either "The History of RPGs" or The History of RPGs for the purposes of titling something; if you were to capitalize the entire thing, a... one of those thingies with the first letter taken from every word would get bastardied and then we're into using italics which would just derail the entire choo choo.